Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

How fun, Steve! Nothing like little boys assuming the characters of different heroes and pretending to be them. Great accompanying art work. Who did you pretend to be when you were little? My brothers always wanted to be cowboys. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, Sue

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thank you, Sue. This was a fun contest and I loved your entry as well, although I think we're both going to be chasing Brooke's coat-tails.
Steve

Comment from janalma

Excellent

This is a winner too. Darn, these are all so good, at least the ones I've read. I like how you get it all going into adventure with Robin Hood, King Arthur, pirates etc. and then come back down to earth so smoothly with 'time for tea.' Enjoyed this and it made me smile. I think kids would really enjoy this type of poem with the repeating lines.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thank you - I agree, all the entries for this were great!
Steve

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

This has been one of my favourite writing prompts. And this is a terrific children's poem. The repeating lines are not monotonous and feel like they are meant to be there. It's cute and amusing. Well done Steve. Giddy

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thanks, Giddy - it really was a fun prompt and drew some wonderful entries.
Steve

Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

Coming out with this is amazing. Just from the archives and from the memory lane. Like the repetition at the end of each stanza. Words and style not too strong for the intended audience.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thanks, ola, for the kind words.
Steve

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

This is a very skillfully-written, delightful poem. You have presented an impressive cast of characters to convey your theme. Excellent

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thank you, Janice.
Steve

Comment from WilliamDeen

Excellent

Your Childrens' Monotetra Poem, Time for Tea, is well written with a perfect rhyming scheme and syllable form too. The cadence of your poem is smooth and flows nicely. Love all references to Camelot, Sherwood Forest and Pirates!!!

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thank you, William. It was a fun contest with some great entries.
Steve

Comment from Twomoon

Excellent

very well done. This was one fun contest to read. I loved your creative touch on robin hood...and the Scotland yard..nicely done, good luck, xx twomoon

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thanks for the review.
Steve

Comment from Sally Carter

Excellent

Very nice!
Some great characters, not just fun, but potentially providing lots of areas for discussion about books, heroes etc.
Good meter, apart possibly from Many a maiden I will save. A slight tweak could get it in line with the rest, eg, so many maidens I will save?
And a great ending, which brings us back to the starting point and neatly summarises the places you have taken the reader to.
A very strong entry, and I wish you good luck with it.
Sally

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thanks, Sally. This didn't turn out quite as well as I'd hoped and i think I'm up against it in this competition. I thought your entry was superb and I voted for it, but brooke's and Warren's were up there too.
I am not too worried about the exact meter here - there are probably a couple of lines where it is irregular, but I'm happy with the overall sound.
Steve

reply by Sally Carter on 18-Jul-2012

Thank you so much Steve. I really appreciate that.

Comment from strandregs

Excellent

Great humour and great flow and great rhyme and great fun
I bet you had a blast writing it.did I mention rhythm, meter etc..Z.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thank you - yes, this was fun, but I struggled to get it to come out the way I wanted. Competition is tough too.
Steve

reply by strandregs on 18-Jul-2012

A hard kvetch brings great satisfaction.(also in the toilet).
(If you don't have piles). grusome :).

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

True to form and cleverly rhymed.
II like how you chose different
fictional characters for your poem.
Children should enjoy this as well
as adults.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Nancy, thanks for the review.
Steve