Comment from Sasha

Exceptional

I enjoyed this immensely. You made me giggle all the way through this one. Excellent work with this and I just love the illustration you used with this one...this is truly excellent work.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2012

Thank you, my friend :-). I had to take a dig at our preoccupation with form - it really can get in the way of a good poem!

Mike

Comment from Judian James

Exceptional

FABULOUS and clever and fun! I love the mix and match of it all and how well you made your point while using the exact forms you're describing. BRAVO. You are a master!!

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2012

Aww, Jude, you'll make me blush :-). Some reviewers have managed to make my point already, without realising it. I used to label everything as free verse, but that to me negates the point. How can one intentionally categorise something as uncategorised??? lol

Mike

reply by Judian James on 18-Jan-2012

This is just a blanket sixer for all the sixers I have not been allowed to give over the years.
You are extraordinary.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Exceptional

What better way to demonstrate various poetic styles and forms than with a "poemy" poem that captures the diffi-culties we encounter attempting to LABEL poetry!

I really liked "The Pedantic Examiner."

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2012

Thank you so much for the great rating and wonderful comments, Janice :-). I sometimes think people should firget what 'form' something is supposedly in and just read the poem. I'm so glad you enjoyed the read.

Mike

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I love how you model what you are discussing in the stanza where you are discussing it so that the section about blank verse is in blank verse, etc.
Excellent iambic meter and in those sections where you do rhyme, strong rhyme.
I love your clever and insightful observations on the way we label poems based on various criteria like meter and rhyme or lack thereof :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2012

Thank you, Brooke :-). This was inspired by our conversation the other day about me not labelling my sonnet as a sonnet. It wanted to come out, lol!

Mike

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

LOl--Love that closing line--brilliant and made me LOL

This is witty, entertaining, well composed and delightful to read aloud. (Great flow, iambs and rhyming (when it's used)--even if not in a formal form lol)

this is formally informal.

Love the blank verse opening shifting gears in next stanza.

screen and clean is a great rhyme pair, because of the bonus consonance of C

knees and categories is brilliant and original as well.

Bravo, Mike.

Smiling,
rd

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2012

Thank you, rd :-). Every now and then I rebel over form, and this was one of those moments. I sometimes catch myself harming a piece to try and fit it into a structre. Hence, I've taken to not labelling any of my pieces unless they're written specifically as a form or a contest or personal challenge. That way, others can decide if it's in a form or not, and if they think not, they are welcome to consider it free verse, lol :-).

Mike

Comment from N.K. Wagner

Excellent

Yeah, well, that's easy for you to say! Very cute, Mike. So, have you come up with a name for this polystylistic piece of poetry? :D Nancy

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2012

How about 'Polystylistic'? :-). I like that. As far as I'm concerned, all poetry is free verse - it just might use techniques for effect. I think poems should only ever be categorised by genre (if at all). To label them based on elements such as rhyme structure and meter just seems absurd. The main thing is that people enjoy them :-).

Mike

Comment from missy98writer

Excellent

Mike,
Your free verse poem is cleverly written with vivid imagery that paints a picture in the readers head. The art work you used is funky cool. I love your satirical fun with styles of poetry.
Alliteration Usage: great.
Use of Metaphor: great.
Rhyme: some
Content: excellent
Flow: excellent
Mechanics: great.
The lines or stanza that I liked:
"but sprinkling just the merest hint of rhyme upon a structure begging for a theme can redefine perception of design, and suddenly a quatrain is the meme." I also liked your phrases: "arrange my words, convention dictates, label them, hint of thyme, perception of design, booming from the screen, pendantically iambic, penned to fend off, float around the world (like a turd) and crashing to its knees." I love the cheekiness of your terrific poem. Your rocked the poetic verse. I'd recommend this fabulous poem to other reviewers. Keep on writing with humor and a creative pen. Please have a marvelous day.
Melissa.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2012

Thank you, Melissa :-). I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece.

Mike

Comment from Rasp E

Excellent

And let my free verse go! lol. Well-written and cheeky. Naturally, I approve of any use of convention to critique convention (because that's just the kind of girl I am). :) It's irony at its best.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

Thank you, Erica :-). I couldn't resist a little dig. It's Brooke's fault for asking why I didn't label my last sonnet as a sonnet. I see it all as free verse; judge a poem as a poem, not against the arguable set of rules that may have been borrowed for effect!

I know, preaching to the converted :-).

Mike

reply by Rasp E on 17-Jan-2012

Compared to the rest of you, I'm just about an anarchist, poetically speaking. lol. Even in the three whole formal pieces I've posted here, I cheerfully ignored whatever rules were holding me back. ;')

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Comment from jlsavell

Excellent

Fleedleflump,

Oh my, oh my,

When words and thoughts do freely flow
and wizard's wands are talent's tow
Structures are but one device
Free verse, blank verse, what does suffice?

No ordinary language to soothe a king
Nor a chalice of such offering
But words that live in thinker's deep
Intense and vivid in lines do seep

Sense and perception is the key
Focused and formed can still be free
Enjoy, enjoy, the wizard's magic words
The spell of experience will be heard

Imprison the poet not in caged thought
Unprison the spill of words he sought!!!!

Love your work!!! jimi

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

In violence spews the telling phrase,
and cuddles draw a silver line
upon the cloud of darkened prose
that darkens comedy profane

for even partial rhyme can bless the day
with lines accelerating as they say

the thoughts with meanings huddled underneath;
a storm
a thorn
a renovation,
ripping through yoir home.

No thinking mind
can leave order alone.



Mike

PS: I love your responses :-)

reply by jlsavell on 17-Jan-2012

awwww shucks.. love your work!!!!

Comment from TammyGail

Excellent

Great work on this poem Mike, I wish they would add a dark category really WTF it really doesn't fall under horror.. Its like the bastard child on this site. Great imagery used its perfect really.. Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

Thanks, Tammy :-). It's like the way horror and thriller are lumped together. To me, they are two completely different genres. A dark poetry category would be awesome. Chilling, as opposed to horrifying. Sinister, like a black snake curling through your intestines, lapping up the tension with a forked tongue.

Mike