Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Fairy Playground"A collection of my children's poems
57 total reviews
Comment from MyYiaYia
Lovely poem and stunning picture to go with. Nicely rhymed and flows right off the page. Very descriptive with vivid imagery. Good Luck in the contest. Deb :0)
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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Lovely poem and stunning picture to go with. Nicely rhymed and flows right off the page. Very descriptive with vivid imagery. Good Luck in the contest. Deb :0)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind words - this piece was unusual for me so, sure enough, it's the one that gets nominated for PoM!
Steve
Comment from RYME4U
Absolutely beautiful. I just love fantasy poetry that rhymes so rhythmically well.I think you covered every famous fairy elf and sprite there is. This deserves the six stars.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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Absolutely beautiful. I just love fantasy poetry that rhymes so rhythmically well.I think you covered every famous fairy elf and sprite there is. This deserves the six stars.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the lovely review and the six stars - much appreciated - I think I am going to get pipped by a very good poem in the contest...
Steve
Comment from VinnyCasso
Excellent poem. Couldn't find a thing that I would have changed about it. You've created a delightful little paradise & made it seem real to us. The words and rhyme flow smoothly & the alliteration just inserts itself here & there and keeps right on flowing beautifully. Lots of good poems in the voting booth this time, but this one's definitely my pick! Six-star rating is well-deserved.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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Excellent poem. Couldn't find a thing that I would have changed about it. You've created a delightful little paradise & made it seem real to us. The words and rhyme flow smoothly & the alliteration just inserts itself here & there and keeps right on flowing beautifully. Lots of good poems in the voting booth this time, but this one's definitely my pick! Six-star rating is well-deserved.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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Thanks for your great review - I'm glad you enjoyed my Fairy poem - it is doing quite well in the contest - currently sitting in second place behind a very strong poem...
I had fun writing this pretty piece which is a bit atypical for me.
Steve
Comment from Jean Lutz
This is delightful -- set my soul to clapping. I wish I had a six star rating left, but instead I will just have to fling stardust. Best to you with the entry.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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This is delightful -- set my soul to clapping. I wish I had a six star rating left, but instead I will just have to fling stardust. Best to you with the entry.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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Thanks for the applause and the fairy dust - may just need it if this is to haul in the runaway leader in the competition, but I am pleased to see my impromptu fairy piece matching it with those in the running for second place.
Thanks again.
Steve
Comment from sasil
This is a lovely fairytale you've described--a fantastical scene of the fey at play. Your broken quatrains in aabb pattern read with just the right lilt and cadance--the syllables bump and bounce right along to the beat of fairy feet. I enjoyed both the poem and the artwork.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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This is a lovely fairytale you've described--a fantastical scene of the fey at play. Your broken quatrains in aabb pattern read with just the right lilt and cadance--the syllables bump and bounce right along to the beat of fairy feet. I enjoyed both the poem and the artwork.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed my little foray into sweet and pretty!
Steve
Comment from jgirlie152
This is one of the best poems I have read here in a long time. It's perfect, taking me to this Fairy Playground as surely as if I were there. It seems so effortless, yet I know you worked to get this just right. Congratulations on a wonderful piece of work.
Joan
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2011
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This is one of the best poems I have read here in a long time. It's perfect, taking me to this Fairy Playground as surely as if I were there. It seems so effortless, yet I know you worked to get this just right. Congratulations on a wonderful piece of work.
Joan
Comment Written 19-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2011
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Thank you, Joan.
Do you know how a clever phrase or rhyme will suddenly pop into your head - that's what happened with this one - I got the beginning and then I just had to build on the whimsical idea of all the fairies. Not my usual cup of tea as I tend to write more humorous stuff - I think of this as my 'pretty' poem. And yes, you are right - there was work involved to get the rest of it into shape!
Thanks for becoming a fan, too. I shall try not to let you down. Feel free to peek into my portfolio...
Steve
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
I love fairy poems and have written a few myself, as I owned a few (or they owned me) as a child in the hills of Appalachia. There is a magic and a whimsy to the ones done well and this one is excellent with wonderful imagery. Congratulations on your POM nomination and the best of luck to you in the contest!
Great work!
Pea
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2011
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I love fairy poems and have written a few myself, as I owned a few (or they owned me) as a child in the hills of Appalachia. There is a magic and a whimsy to the ones done well and this one is excellent with wonderful imagery. Congratulations on your POM nomination and the best of luck to you in the contest!
Great work!
Pea
Comment Written 19-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2011
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Thank you, Sweet Pea - a fellow competitor I see, so congratulations to you too. I have already reviewed yours I think. Your poem and mine stand out as the only light-hearted ones amomgst some pretty intense stuff - looks like intense may win the day.... :o(
Steve
Comment from loggerdan1
I thought the rhyming was good it was a little out there but capturing as I felt like one of the characters in the poem good flow.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2011
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I thought the rhyming was good it was a little out there but capturing as I felt like one of the characters in the poem good flow.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2011
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Thanks for the review.
Steve
Comment from Bep Kororoti
Nicely done poem here. It has a very fluid flow to it. Each word and line rolls right off the previous one naturally. It's well written, creating a whole imaginary world the reader can be submersed in. I liked the knowledgeable references to, and uses of mythological beings and the character of Puck. Shows you're very familiar with this sort of setting and it isn't just another poem about some fairies in the woods. Good work and good luck! Peace -Bep
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2011
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Nicely done poem here. It has a very fluid flow to it. Each word and line rolls right off the previous one naturally. It's well written, creating a whole imaginary world the reader can be submersed in. I liked the knowledgeable references to, and uses of mythological beings and the character of Puck. Shows you're very familiar with this sort of setting and it isn't just another poem about some fairies in the woods. Good work and good luck! Peace -Bep
Comment Written 18-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2011
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Thanks, Bep - glad you liked it. This 'pretty' style is not my usual thing, but this one came to me in a rush. Those who know my writing have had a chuckle, but I guess the laugh's on them if someone liked it enough to nominate it.
Steve
Comment from Judian James
Hi there! I wanted to review all the nominees before voting. This is so charming and dear, kiwisteveh! The visuals you've created through your words are marvelous and it is beautifully rhymed and metered to carry your story!
I LOVED it!! Good luck!!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2011
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Hi there! I wanted to review all the nominees before voting. This is so charming and dear, kiwisteveh! The visuals you've created through your words are marvelous and it is beautifully rhymed and metered to carry your story!
I LOVED it!! Good luck!!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2011
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Thanks, Judian.
This is not really my cup of tea, but it just popped into my head complete with the first few lines so I just had to try my hand at pretty. Just checked the competition - my only hope is that voters will go for sweet and easy over intensity and depth!
Steve