Waiting for Daddy
thoughts of an alcoholic's child17 total reviews
Comment from azwildrosa
what a great poem for this contest. indeed it is sad when a child doesn't want to be like their father. thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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what a great poem for this contest. indeed it is sad when a child doesn't want to be like their father. thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you!
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Thank you!
Comment from Ann Smith
I can hear the voice of the child in the poem. As a matter of fact I hear his voice through the voice of a child at school today. His story was very similar. Hopefully the little boy won't grow up to drink so his children won't have to suffer. Children carry such burdens as the words of the last stanza tell. Good luck with the contest and thank you for reminding us of the children. ann
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I can hear the voice of the child in the poem. As a matter of fact I hear his voice through the voice of a child at school today. His story was very similar. Hopefully the little boy won't grow up to drink so his children won't have to suffer. Children carry such burdens as the words of the last stanza tell. Good luck with the contest and thank you for reminding us of the children. ann
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much, Ann, for your comments. I'm glad that my poem, while sad, was able to remind others of the burdens these poor children carry. As a child, I was one of them. Thanks again.
Comment from wvfreespirit
I enjoyed the poem. I like the fact that it was written from the child's point of view. Children are the innocent and often unwilling participants in the adult dramas such as addictions, irresponsibilty and poor choices and yet their voices are rarely heard. Job well done!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I enjoyed the poem. I like the fact that it was written from the child's point of view. Children are the innocent and often unwilling participants in the adult dramas such as addictions, irresponsibilty and poor choices and yet their voices are rarely heard. Job well done!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much for your review. :-)
Comment from Harrisa
This is a very good poem. It has good rhymes and a good rhythm. The message is sad, and it made me feel for families with this problem. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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This is a very good poem. It has good rhymes and a good rhythm. The message is sad, and it made me feel for families with this problem. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Harrisa, for your review.
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Thank you, Harrisa, for your review.
Comment from Mary's angel
This is sooooo heartbreaking. It speaks the truth of so many homes with an alcoholic parent. The children always get hurt. The rhyme scheme is very good. The words flow nicely. Good Luck.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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This is sooooo heartbreaking. It speaks the truth of so many homes with an alcoholic parent. The children always get hurt. The rhyme scheme is very good. The words flow nicely. Good Luck.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you!
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Thank you!
Comment from Shirley B
This is a very sad poem. You should do well in the contest. The very sad thing is that this happens so many times in a lot of childrens homes. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. Good luck, Shirley
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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This is a very sad poem. You should do well in the contest. The very sad thing is that this happens so many times in a lot of childrens homes. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. Good luck, Shirley
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Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Shirley, for your generous comments and rating. :)
Comment from kleblanc
Great poem, I enjoyed it. It is easy to empathize with. Good work. Keep it coming. I don't think I would have changed anything about it.
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Great poem, I enjoyed it. It is easy to empathize with. Good work. Keep it coming. I don't think I would have changed anything about it.
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Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much for your review. :-)