Life in the ass lane.
a challenge I could not resist.19 total reviews
Comment from Nicky B
As I approached from behind, he stopped short, mid-stroke. We both stood watching as Daphne lowered herself onto the bed, naked except for thigh highs and a garter belt and inserted a cucumber into her steaming salad bowl.
Shakespeare eat your heart out.
I bow to thee my great salacious one.
God bless.
Nick.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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As I approached from behind, he stopped short, mid-stroke. We both stood watching as Daphne lowered herself onto the bed, naked except for thigh highs and a garter belt and inserted a cucumber into her steaming salad bowl.
Shakespeare eat your heart out.
I bow to thee my great salacious one.
God bless.
Nick.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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Shakespeare and I went to school together. He was always hung up on the girls with the big hair.. how unfortunate. Thanks honey. ZeeZee
Comment from Readywriter52
The images in your story are very vivid. I like your euphuism like steaming salad bowl, bottomless cavern. or scrawny nut sack. Your story is ridiculous and a little funny.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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The images in your story are very vivid. I like your euphuism like steaming salad bowl, bottomless cavern. or scrawny nut sack. Your story is ridiculous and a little funny.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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HI Readywriter52, I strive for ridiculous and occasionally the nonsensical. Thank you very much for reading and leaving a very generous review. ZeeZee
Comment from IndianaIrish
Oh yeah...I got more than a couple of laughs from your challenge, Ms ZZ!! Damn, you're one funny lady. I'm surprised I could see anything because of the laughing, but...
siting (citing?)
and demand and apologize for calling me coward. I am not a coward. (the second "and" needs to be changed to "he" or make it "an apology")
Loved it!
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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Oh yeah...I got more than a couple of laughs from your challenge, Ms ZZ!! Damn, you're one funny lady. I'm surprised I could see anything because of the laughing, but...
siting (citing?)
and demand and apologize for calling me coward. I am not a coward. (the second "and" needs to be changed to "he" or make it "an apology")
Loved it!
Indy :>)
Comment Written 25-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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Well, I do feel better. My comedic muse was hanging around with some serious types and went for a long ride. But it appears to be back, at least for the moment. Thanks for the heads up on the spaggies. ZeeZee
Comment from Withoutlimits
Admittedly, I question the path you chose to take a break from the serious, however, I have to say, even with the questionable subject, you're a good writer and wordsmith.
One correction: My [prizing] winning cucumber--[prize]
Keep having fun!
W.
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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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Admittedly, I question the path you chose to take a break from the serious, however, I have to say, even with the questionable subject, you're a good writer and wordsmith.
One correction: My [prizing] winning cucumber--[prize]
Keep having fun!
W.
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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Hi W. I will make note of the spelling and fix it. I appreciate that you brought this to my attention. Thank you for reading and commenting. ZeeZee
Comment from Scribbelini
Too many on this site take things too damn serious. A good mix of genres and styles maketh the writer grow harder oops stronger. Great job good chuckles. Now git out thar and rite a pome bout a chuck wagon girl
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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Too many on this site take things too damn serious. A good mix of genres and styles maketh the writer grow harder oops stronger. Great job good chuckles. Now git out thar and rite a pome bout a chuck wagon girl
Comment Written 24-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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A chuck wagon Girl.... hmmm.. velly interesting. Thanks Scribbelini. ZeeZee
Comment from bluefly
Hey zeezee,
This piece is a real hoot! I laughed the whole way through. Your imagery is wonderful and your humor could tickle even dourest of funny bones. Also, great job using the seed words so creatively.
Just a couple nits...
1. "...and emphatically denied every doing the..." I believe the word "every" should be "ever".
2. " ...and demand an apologize for calling me..." Either "an" needs to be "and" or "apologize" needs to be "apology".
Thnaks again for the great read and the laugh!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2008
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Hey zeezee,
This piece is a real hoot! I laughed the whole way through. Your imagery is wonderful and your humor could tickle even dourest of funny bones. Also, great job using the seed words so creatively.
Just a couple nits...
1. "...and emphatically denied every doing the..." I believe the word "every" should be "ever".
2. " ...and demand an apologize for calling me..." Either "an" needs to be "and" or "apologize" needs to be "apology".
Thnaks again for the great read and the laugh!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2008
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Hi Bluefly, I made the changes you pointed out. I cannot thank you enough. ZeeZee
Comment from rhymer1
I believe it would have been better if he obervered KAlbert's cucumber entering a bush in the bedroom. keep nature in the write, Slainte, rhymer1
ps: felt a little tweek my self but it was while I was writing my review:<)
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2008
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I believe it would have been better if he obervered KAlbert's cucumber entering a bush in the bedroom. keep nature in the write, Slainte, rhymer1
ps: felt a little tweek my self but it was while I was writing my review:<)
Comment Written 24-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2008
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lol... I am not a nature person, by nature. I hate nature. I like concrete. But I do like men. This was a fun for me... a fun time, a fun write. Shit.. I need a vacation. Thanks. ZeeZee
Comment from darkgreennights
Dear Zee Zee, whenever you venture out to write, I'll lay in wait to read it. You are a darkly hilarious social satirist for the fine times we live in. Your a little like Margaret Atwood, who I adore
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2008
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Dear Zee Zee, whenever you venture out to write, I'll lay in wait to read it. You are a darkly hilarious social satirist for the fine times we live in. Your a little like Margaret Atwood, who I adore
Comment Written 24-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2008
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Thank you so much DGN.. I so appreciate your reading. I need to go for a smile, a laugh.. a ha ha.. too much dark makes me look old. Thanks. ZeeZee
Comment from adewpearl
Wait one minute - this wasn't serious???? LOL Your writing continues to delight me. I'm not sure my daughter would be thrilled at the sight of my laughing my head off over the little cucumber incident, but my son would probably get a huge kick out of it! This is hilarious, bawdy, but hilarious! Oh, I may have my church eldership taken away from me yet if I keep reading your stuff!!!
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2008
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Wait one minute - this wasn't serious???? LOL Your writing continues to delight me. I'm not sure my daughter would be thrilled at the sight of my laughing my head off over the little cucumber incident, but my son would probably get a huge kick out of it! This is hilarious, bawdy, but hilarious! Oh, I may have my church eldership taken away from me yet if I keep reading your stuff!!!
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2008
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I try to remain on the side of .... titillating. Surely you are allowed titillating? Ok, how about humor with a touch of naughty? I like the word naughty. It feels so good rolling off my tongue. Thanks for reading.. ZeeZee