Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Hello, my friend, I hope you'll feel better soon. I love this chapter, and you managed to keep me on my toes again:) I hope Phil can make it and Althea gets her son back.

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025

Hey, Iza. Nice to see you stopping by and jumpting into the middle of a mess... ghosts and everything. It's been a rough few days but fingers crossed it gets better soon.
Smiles, Carol

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Your writing is always such a wonderful blessing when I listen to it being read to me. I wish you the very best with your writing. I also wish you a very wonderful weekend and may God bless you. Patricia.

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Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this with us. I am guessing DeLuca is involved all of this, but I do believe that only scratches the surface. Matthew better keep Rebecca under lock and key.

but he didn't put much stock into it until he confronted him/ Even then, he dismissed him as a (him. Even)

"Damn it," he muttered, his gaze darting to the fading taillights of the fleeing vehicles.
He could hear the approach of more sirens, but he wasn't waiting. "Sorry, DeLuca. Gotta learn to drive faster." (This confused me. I wasn't sure who said it or did two people say it?)

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025

DeLuca, the other detective, was following in his own car. It was meant to be Donatelli muttering to himself why he couldn't wait for him.... the only person at the scene besides Phil in the car is Donatelli. I take it that it didn't come out very clear.

reply by barbara.wilkey on 17-Jan-2025

I didn't get that, maybe it's just me.

reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025

I'll look at it again...I want to make sure it is clear. Thanks!

reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025

Does this make it any clearer....."Damn it," he muttered, his gaze darting to the fading taillights of the fleeing vehicles and then to the tracks of Phil's car before it went over the cliff. He could hear the approach of more sirens, but he wasn't waiting for the others. "Sorry, DeLuca. You gotta learn to drive faster if you want to keep up with me."

Comment from Tim Margetts

Excellent

Your proofing is forgiven, a sick bed is no place to decide if a comma or a full stop belongs in this place or that.
This is an excellent Chapter, Carol.
Get better and keep writing.
Tim x

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 Comment Written 17-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025

Thanks, Tim. I am struggling to write the short story now, but I think that will be it for me. I am so far behind on reviews it's not funny...but it can't be helped. Appreciate the support.
Smiles, Carol

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Phil can't die!!! At least the killers/theives left some papers with Anthea's name on it, so Matthew will hopefully understand what this is about now. And Eleanor heard the conversation between Grayson and Anthea, that will also add strength to what they know. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter, but please don't do anything until you are recovered. Now I know why you went missing, I'll understand if you don't feel like writing for a while. Love you lots, dear friend. :)) Sandra xx

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 Comment Written 17-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025

Thanks, Sandra...You are the best! Never fear! The "trojan" in me insists that I get out of bed and do what needs to be done. Already instacarted groceries for my upcoming house guest and posted this story plus a few reviews...so that means I am on the mend. Thanks again for checking... I so appreciate it. I am going to attempt another post, but we will see.
Love ya, Carol