Veil of Secrets
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Comment from LJbutterfly
I can't believe you've added more layers to this story, First of all, Grayson is holding a mysterious ace which will be revealed later. I'll be waiting for the surprise with Grayson. Now, we meet Althea who is contracted by the mob, to fight for a portion of Rebecca's inheritance, if she wants to see her son again. How convoluted.
Where is Doyle and Rossi? That's yet to be revealed. Take you time. I'm enjoying this roller coaster. I can't wait to see how you unravel all the layers of deception you've created.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I can't believe you've added more layers to this story, First of all, Grayson is holding a mysterious ace which will be revealed later. I'll be waiting for the surprise with Grayson. Now, we meet Althea who is contracted by the mob, to fight for a portion of Rebecca's inheritance, if she wants to see her son again. How convoluted.
Where is Doyle and Rossi? That's yet to be revealed. Take you time. I'm enjoying this roller coaster. I can't wait to see how you unravel all the layers of deception you've created.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Me too! I never intended it to get so involved but that's this crazy mind of mine...it gets going and the twists and turns get so tangled even I have to stop and find out where I am. I believe I've got this one now....but be sure and set me straight if I go astray. I've got to get this part of the story going first.... and then bring in the others.... at least I think that's how its suppose to happen
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Trevor's dead, right? Althea won't be able to find him. How old is this lady? I need to go back and reread this part. I think I go confused. I am pretty sure Rebecca's in danger. I don't like Grayson. He's not a good person. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Trevor's dead, right? Althea won't be able to find him. How old is this lady? I need to go back and reread this part. I think I go confused. I am pretty sure Rebecca's in danger. I don't like Grayson. He's not a good person. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Grayson, Althea, and Rebecca and Allie are all the same age... And you are right Grayson's bloodline made him a bad one too. And yes Trevor is dead but I don't think we will see him in this story. There's enough ghosts to keep straight. LOl
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story pulls me right in! The tension between Grayson and Cornelius has such intensity. I love how their dialogue reveals so much about them. The shift to Althea's perspective was excellent. I could feel her feelings. Especially when she grappled with her decisions about Trevor.
I'm already invested in seeing what happens next. Amazing work - keep going!
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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Your story pulls me right in! The tension between Grayson and Cornelius has such intensity. I love how their dialogue reveals so much about them. The shift to Althea's perspective was excellent. I could feel her feelings. Especially when she grappled with her decisions about Trevor.
I'm already invested in seeing what happens next. Amazing work - keep going!
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Emotions are a big thing with me...so I am thrilled that you could feel the tension between Greyson and Cornelius and the strife Althea was struggling with...I made a blooper and the boy's name should be Travis not Trevor. Too many cobwebs in the old brain.
Thanks again for following the story.
Smiles, Carol
