The Devil Fights Back
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Comment from Wayne Fowler
Marie is a hard sell, I have to admit, a character who seems a bit out of character. A person could change, but... I think of authors who paint insurmountable odds... and then surmount them.
Wishing you and yours a blessed Christmas.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Marie is a hard sell, I have to admit, a character who seems a bit out of character. A person could change, but... I think of authors who paint insurmountable odds... and then surmount them.
Wishing you and yours a blessed Christmas.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Well, she hasn't changed completely and will backslide a bit before she finally gets on the right path forward. The timeline may be a bit condensed, but the idea is still the same. Do you fault Charles Dickens for having Scrooge change in one night, or Dr. Seuss for having the Grinch change in one night too? :-)
Hey, you have a blessed Christmas too, Wayne.
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Scrooge got a supernatural visit.
Grinch was a cartoon, which offered much room on the credibility front.
Would you allow a historical fiction writer to send Hitler into a conversation with a black Jewish woman, fall in love and marry her? (a bit of an exaggeration for effect - does not apply to Marie.
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Scrooge got a supernatural visit.
Grinch was a cartoon, which offered much room on the credibility front.
Would you allow a historical fiction writer to send Hitler into a conversation with a black Jewish woman, fall in love and marry her? (a bit of an exaggeration for effect - does not apply to Marie.
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Aw, you didn't like my analogies. How about this one: Forrest Gump? Plenty of unbelievable stuff in that one. (Nah, you won't like that either: That was the point of the the story and its shtick, so to speak.)
Well, let's just leave it at: I'm not done with Marie yet. There will be some bumps along the way in her transformation.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. I am happy to read that Maria is softening. She might make a good grandma after all. LOL Great writing.
I'm not in very good shape because I don't exercise, and getting up and down from the floor has certainly become a lot more challenging than it ever used to be. (I'm wondering if she'd really admit it's because she doesn't exercise. The people I know would not.)
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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thank you for sharing this with us. I am happy to read that Maria is softening. She might make a good grandma after all. LOL Great writing.
I'm not in very good shape because I don't exercise, and getting up and down from the floor has certainly become a lot more challenging than it ever used to be. (I'm wondering if she'd really admit it's because she doesn't exercise. The people I know would not.)
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Barbara. Marie seems to be aware of her faults. Not that she's ever done that much about them, but at least she's aware of them and doesn't delude herself.
She is starting to soften, but we haven't seen the last of her faults yet. This will be a more gradual resurrection for her.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another well-written and consolidating chapter to keep the reader up to speed with everything. Marie has certainly evolved into a much more caring and introspective character and it's thanks to Johnny for the most part (should he be included in the list of characters?) Sometimes, I think Marie's thoughts could be more streamlined, for example, when you start the paragraph: "I screwed up badly. I know that now.." (a little repetitive and not requiring a new paragraph anyway). Also, when she's reflecting on Brian, I think she should refer to the fact he was orphaned so tragically. Apart from anything, to remind the reader of the impressive progress he's made. Both he and Julia are soulmates, after all, because of deficiencies in their upbringing.
But, as ever, your compelling story continues to entertain and intrigue. Well done, Jim. Warm wishes Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Another well-written and consolidating chapter to keep the reader up to speed with everything. Marie has certainly evolved into a much more caring and introspective character and it's thanks to Johnny for the most part (should he be included in the list of characters?) Sometimes, I think Marie's thoughts could be more streamlined, for example, when you start the paragraph: "I screwed up badly. I know that now.." (a little repetitive and not requiring a new paragraph anyway). Also, when she's reflecting on Brian, I think she should refer to the fact he was orphaned so tragically. Apart from anything, to remind the reader of the impressive progress he's made. Both he and Julia are soulmates, after all, because of deficiencies in their upbringing.
But, as ever, your compelling story continues to entertain and intrigue. Well done, Jim. Warm wishes Debbie
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Debbie, thank you so much for this fine review and excellent rating with the 6 stars. I really appreciated all your suggestions and worked them into this chapter.
It was never my intention from the start to spend this much attention on Marie, but she has really grown on me as a character, and her resurrection has become a major plot line along with the others. She's just so much fun to write about. She's not out of the woods yet, though!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed reading this! I loved how you mixed humor with the deeper emotional moments, Like Marie playing music with Julia and trying to bond with Johnny. It's clear you've put a lot of thought into the characters, and I can't wait to see how their stories unfold. Keep it up, you're doing an excellent job!
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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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I really enjoyed reading this! I loved how you mixed humor with the deeper emotional moments, Like Marie playing music with Julia and trying to bond with Johnny. It's clear you've put a lot of thought into the characters, and I can't wait to see how their stories unfold. Keep it up, you're doing an excellent job!
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much, Michael. I really appreciate your comments. My original concept of this story was mostly an action/adventure story, but the more I got into writing it, the larger the role Marie has played in the story. Her resurrection has become one of the main plot lines. However, she will become involved with one of the other major action-type plot lines by the end. She's a complex and enjoyable character to write about.