Painful Memories
My hot mess of a life22 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
Your writing is excellent and you survived all the dark times and abusive men in your life. I am sure many women can relate to your story. We often repeat our parents behaviors but you changed. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Your writing is excellent and you survived all the dark times and abusive men in your life. I am sure many women can relate to your story. We often repeat our parents behaviors but you changed. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. It wasn't easy though. I just didn't want it to keep repeating itself.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Sacrifice your autobiography contest. Alcohol destroys so many lives and then, more often than not, the children who were abused because of alcohol grow up to have the same addiction and also to lean toward partners with the same problem. God changes everything and I'm so glad you found Him. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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An excellent entry for the Sacrifice your autobiography contest. Alcohol destroys so many lives and then, more often than not, the children who were abused because of alcohol grow up to have the same addiction and also to lean toward partners with the same problem. God changes everything and I'm so glad you found Him. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, alcohol and the behavior can be generational. I know it was for my husband and I. My kids turned out okay. God is good.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow, what a story! I wish this had been multiple posts because it's so much to take in all at once and I was floored by all the abuse you suffered as a child. I was hopeful that the Navy was good for you but it came with alcoholism but you did meet your husband. Most of all, both of you met the LORD Who turned your lives around. I have been reading about generational strongholds and I know that our God can break those bonds and free you and your children and their children to be blessed and thrive in Him! Thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest!
He just disappeared of the face of the earth. (off)
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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Wow, what a story! I wish this had been multiple posts because it's so much to take in all at once and I was floored by all the abuse you suffered as a child. I was hopeful that the Navy was good for you but it came with alcoholism but you did meet your husband. Most of all, both of you met the LORD Who turned your lives around. I have been reading about generational strongholds and I know that our God can break those bonds and free you and your children and their children to be blessed and thrive in Him! Thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest!
He just disappeared of the face of the earth. (off)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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lvenochka,
Thank you for the kind review. God is good.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a very lengthy post and, ideally, I would prefer it edited down a bit so that it doesn't deter reviewers. That said, I accept there was a lot to be said and it's never easy to organise such often painful and emotional thoughts. So well done for conveying your experience of growing up here. It was a harsh journey but you sound like you showed a lot of strength and determination along the way and it's to your absolute credit that you turned your life around. As far as this write is concerned, there's a number of edits needed for which I would normally give a lower rating. However, the effort and intensity of you work has decided me otherwise. But please remember to proof-read in future, particularly for a contest. Good luck! Debbie PS I think you need to change the heading from fiction to non-fiction.
Needless to say these events damage(d) my psyche
This was an (everyday) thing and (we) were often left at home
when I told good (ol) mum
I think they had self-esteem issue(s)...
I think it was the lat(t)er but none of the..
During the (heydays)
good (ol) me
it turned his life (turned*) around (*delete)
it was (an) answer.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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This is a very lengthy post and, ideally, I would prefer it edited down a bit so that it doesn't deter reviewers. That said, I accept there was a lot to be said and it's never easy to organise such often painful and emotional thoughts. So well done for conveying your experience of growing up here. It was a harsh journey but you sound like you showed a lot of strength and determination along the way and it's to your absolute credit that you turned your life around. As far as this write is concerned, there's a number of edits needed for which I would normally give a lower rating. However, the effort and intensity of you work has decided me otherwise. But please remember to proof-read in future, particularly for a contest. Good luck! Debbie PS I think you need to change the heading from fiction to non-fiction.
Needless to say these events damage(d) my psyche
This was an (everyday) thing and (we) were often left at home
when I told good (ol) mum
I think they had self-esteem issue(s)...
I think it was the lat(t)er but none of the..
During the (heydays)
good (ol) me
it turned his life (turned*) around (*delete)
it was (an) answer.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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Debbie,
Thank you very much for reading my story. Thank you for the kind review. I am a new writer and normally just do poems. I will take your advice and make changes accordingly. I will try to shrink a little.
Comment from DonandVicki
You said in your header that this is fiction but it sure reads real. I had some of the same experiences; "I remember another time when my mother gathered all of us up in the middle of the night" My mother did the same we drove around all night. I joined the Navy at 17 and it was the best thing that had happened in my life at that point.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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You said in your header that this is fiction but it sure reads real. I had some of the same experiences; "I remember another time when my mother gathered all of us up in the middle of the night" My mother did the same we drove around all night. I joined the Navy at 17 and it was the best thing that had happened in my life at that point.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I will change to non-fiction as it's all real.
Comment from Madeleine Mardis
This is such a sad, happy, inspiring story about a true survivor! So glad you and your husband have found God and are now at peace! What a great story you wrote, shooting from the hip, so to speak and not mincing words! Bravo!!
Maddy
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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This is such a sad, happy, inspiring story about a true survivor! So glad you and your husband have found God and are now at peace! What a great story you wrote, shooting from the hip, so to speak and not mincing words! Bravo!!
Maddy
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate the six star review.
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Thank you for the kind review. God is good.
Comment from BethShelby
I'm so happy this story had a good ending because for a long time it didn't sound as if it would. God is about the only thing that can turn a life around with so many things going wrong.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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I'm so happy this story had a good ending because for a long time it didn't sound as if it would. God is about the only thing that can turn a life around with so many things going wrong.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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Yes, ma'am. God is good.
Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from joann r romei
Your story is captivating, so much richness in the way you tell your story, the reader feels every emotion and wants the best for you, keep writing , God bless you
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Your story is captivating, so much richness in the way you tell your story, the reader feels every emotion and wants the best for you, keep writing , God bless you
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Also thank you for the 6 stars.
Cecilia
Comment from kahpot
"He found Jesus during this time and it turned his whole life turned around." I think this line may need a second look and edited, what a life you have had, I am so glad to read that your life has turned for the better, an excellent read, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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"He found Jesus during this time and it turned his whole life turned around." I think this line may need a second look and edited, what a life you have had, I am so glad to read that your life has turned for the better, an excellent read, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I will look at that line.
Comment from Tim Margetts
This story gripped me and I feel for you and what you have been through, and I can understand the reason for you also inflicting so much suffering on yourself.
I am happy that things have turned around for you. God can do that.
There are a lot of spelling and grammatical issues with this piece and some may mark you down for that.
For me, it's not an issue. I have given you my stars for the story, and the truth with your words.
God Bless.
Tim
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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This story gripped me and I feel for you and what you have been through, and I can understand the reason for you also inflicting so much suffering on yourself.
I am happy that things have turned around for you. God can do that.
There are a lot of spelling and grammatical issues with this piece and some may mark you down for that.
For me, it's not an issue. I have given you my stars for the story, and the truth with your words.
God Bless.
Tim
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Can you give me examples of the grammatical issues so I can fix them.
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Sure, here are some
My father was a hard-core alcohol
My father was a hard-core alcoholic,
my mother had a loaded shot gun
my mother had a loaded shotgun
We found out years later when I was about
We found out years later, when I was about
for three or months,
I am guessing here but...
for three or four months,
It was chaotic and a house full of love.
You could restructure this to
It was a chaotic house full of love
These are a few that I noticed as I read
Tim :)
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Thank you so much.
