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Two very real women in not so real situation.

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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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I know Tom reads a lot of what is on his platform; I bet he had a smile or two over being featured in a few chapter writes and reviews.

I really liked the reference to the church of Rebekah and the disciples in the room. It makes the moment stand out, and hints at an angelic voice.

What's this? A possible second road trip? Please, though, no Jane Babies along for the ride this time.

You and Rachelle have pulled off a very good co-write here. I enjoyed the two perspectives throughout, and all the characters that were introduced along the way.

Any word on those additional sixes?

Good luck in all of your future writing, Gretchen.

xo
Pam

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    Thank you, Pam. This has been a wonderful experience. I have enjoyed this trip with Rachelle. What started out as a silly idea of the two of us being stranded in Amish country, ended up becoming a delight to work on. I really appreciate this wonderful review. Thank you. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
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Hello Gretchen,
I guess all roads come to an end. Some that we've traveled, we're thankful that we'll never go down again. But some, like the incredible story that you and Rachelle put together was one I hated to see come to an end. The talent that the two of you displayed with this story was exceptional. I would never have thought that the idea that two people could write the same story could possibly work, but you ladies pulled it off with flying colors. I was so impressed, and I'm truly delighted that I was along for the ride. I can't believe I'm down to my last six already, but you certainly have earned it many times over. Well done my friend!
Have a blessed evening.
Tom

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    Thank you, Tom. This has been a fun project for us. I appreciate this so much. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
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I gather we have reached the end of this crazy story. Was there actually a Fanstory convention, and did you really meet some of the writers live? I enjoyed the Amish cruise.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    There was no convention just two vivid imaginations. Lol. Thank you for this great review. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
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This was a fine ending to your book. Reflective in tone (as befits your personality and character (and mine!), and very emotional re Rebekah's fine singing - there are many factors which influence our life choices, and she chose what she thought was right for her.
I can't compliment you and Rachelle enough for the fun this book was - thoroughly enjoyable from beginning to end.
Wendy

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    Thank you so much, Wendy. This means so much to me. I have appreciated your support throughout. Gretchen
Comment from Samantha Wymer
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I for one hope they meet again for a road trip and see where the road takes them. All kinds of folks to meet and destination to see full of mystery and beauty for all the world to see. Who knows what Rachelle and Gretchen will get into next just like Thelma and Louise. Great writing. I enjoyed reading this fun and exciting adventure.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    Thelma and Louise, now that makes me laugh. I really appreciate this wonderful review. Gretchen
reply by Samantha Wymer on 04-Nov-2024
    You're welcome
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Your shared adventure was a delightful story. The convention got a little carried away, but the time with the Amish was like taking a vacation into the past. You did a wonderful job of helping us see each person you met and making us laugh. The urge to kill was also there whenever Jane put in an appearance. I had a roommate like Jane in college. Everyone hated her. A $650 phone bill brought her mob-connected father to campus, and she returned home with half of my clothes.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    Lol. That sounds like a great story, Carol. Sorry about the clothes but you should write that. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Gretchen.
You did a great job of summing up the trip, the adventure, and the madhouse convention. Since I spent most of the time on the floor, I missed a lot of what else was going on, but I heard it all. It was fun submitting my short piece which added nothing to the story, but I did let people know that Bob Dylan and I have the same name. Again, I need to say, I'm the real Robert Zimmerman, I'm just not that one.
Robert

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    I loved the added chapters. Each one was different. I had so much fun working on this project with Rachelle. Thank you. Gretchen
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 04-Nov-2024
    You're welcome.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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That was really fun! Great concept, fantastic execution.
The only thing I would have expected to be different would be that I would have thought Rachelle would just hand you a barf bag and point to the shotgun seat. (smiley face here)

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    In reality, I don't get sick. I just have highway anxiety. And I hate to drive. Lol. This was a far reach for me. Thanks so much for coming along for the ride. Gretchen
Comment from forestport12
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I'm glad I caught this. I will have to catch up your fictional take off on a fanstory convention. I think they should really do it. Like the flow of your writing and can learn from your word smithing. U must make Tom proud. I've always wondered if he was a real person LOL. I almost wrote a short story about him being a super computer parked in a cornfield.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    His origin is the stuff of legends. He just could be a super computer. Lol. Thank you so much for this. Gretchen
Comment from marilyn quillen
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I think you should have a New Years Party. Maybe on a farm, you could all run through the fields with the cows, shoot off your own fireworks, have a barn dance, there are lots of interesting things you could get into. Another fun thing is jumping from the hay loft into a pile of hay

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    Thank you for this. I would love to continue this story but at a later date. Thanks for the enthusiastic review. Gretchen