Spirited Justice
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Patti is safe, for now. Maybe she'll confide in Matthew. It would be to her advantage. Keep action sentences short and descriptive to heighten the threat.
Well, someone will die if you don't get out of that chair. Patti Beckett is having lunch with Hilda as we speak, and she's digging for information." (missing beginning quotation marks "Well,)
One of the men looked at her with a cold, men (Too many words, makes it less intimidating, try something like The man's glare bored holes into her.)
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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Patti is safe, for now. Maybe she'll confide in Matthew. It would be to her advantage. Keep action sentences short and descriptive to heighten the threat.
Well, someone will die if you don't get out of that chair. Patti Beckett is having lunch with Hilda as we speak, and she's digging for information." (missing beginning quotation marks "Well,)
One of the men looked at her with a cold, men (Too many words, makes it less intimidating, try something like The man's glare bored holes into her.)
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Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Barbara... Patti needs to understand how close she just came to being yesterday's news. She could give Matthew information on the guys probably.... and I am certain her chances of getting her hands on those research papers are long gone. Now Garth ne4eds to get the other ones from Angelo and he needs to sit down with Matthew and start comparing notes.
Smiles, Carol