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The HotHouse Bar, part three of four.29 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
The goings on at this bar has the bar seen in Cheers beat by a thousand miles. The only short coming is there is no Carla. You gotta have a Carla. She makes the whole thing work. I love this, can't wait for the next episode.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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The goings on at this bar has the bar seen in Cheers beat by a thousand miles. The only short coming is there is no Carla. You gotta have a Carla. She makes the whole thing work. I love this, can't wait for the next episode.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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LOL, thank you for the six stars! I will have to think about Carla, I am so glad you are enjoying the story. The last one will post on Tuesday. Terry.
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I can hardly wait. Please don't misunderstand me. I am not suggesting you include someone like Carla in your story. I just thought about her in a situation like the one you write about.
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Nomi, no I get you. Carla's got to wait, this one is in the books. Thank you. Terry.
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Cool.
Comment from royowen
A great post Terry, you're good at these short novellas. Have you written a full length novel? You're good with characterisations, they ate quirky, clever and believable, you put together very readable works. Beautifully written Terry, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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A great post Terry, you're good at these short novellas. Have you written a full length novel? You're good with characterisations, they ate quirky, clever and believable, you put together very readable works. Beautifully written Terry, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Roy, I do appreciate your wonderful review. I have not written a novel, the work on FS is pretty much my output, and only recently started fiction after I got some pointers from Humpwhistle. Thank you for reading, the last one in the group will be Tuesday. Terry.
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You?re doing well Terry
Comment from LJbutterfly
I'm enjoying the authentic conversational tone of your characters. I've never been a regular at a bar, but your description sounds like what my husband has told me...everybody knows your name. I agree with Jennifer's favorite novelists. She knows how to select good writers. This was a great episode. I'll be here waiting for the next one.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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I'm enjoying the authentic conversational tone of your characters. I've never been a regular at a bar, but your description sounds like what my husband has told me...everybody knows your name. I agree with Jennifer's favorite novelists. She knows how to select good writers. This was a great episode. I'll be here waiting for the next one.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you for reading and your review. The last installment will be Tuesday. Terry
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I agree with Jenny's choice of authors. LOL Thank you for sharing this post with us. I really like this story.
Jennifer sighs, "Don't you ladies ever read? (period after sighs.)
Jennifer looks at everyone, "Okay, I'm working, (period after everyone)
and she thinks it is the first night of (comma after thinks)
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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I agree with Jenny's choice of authors. LOL Thank you for sharing this post with us. I really like this story.
Jennifer sighs, "Don't you ladies ever read? (period after sighs.)
Jennifer looks at everyone, "Okay, I'm working, (period after everyone)
and she thinks it is the first night of (comma after thinks)
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Barbara, thank you for the kind review and the edits. Terry.
Comment from Jay Squires
Oh, man, this is so NOW in just about any hometown bar. You have such a good mix of girl-cattiness and guy DUH! here
Jennifer observes, "Must be hard on you managing your husband's affair." [Ha! this can be read with such subtext. I agree with your use of "managing". I was tempted to suggest "orchestrating", but "managing has more of a down-and-dirty businesstransaction.]
"How bad was it cut?" [I've often thought that "jib" could be a good word for a pivot into a joke. But you delivered it so flawlessly!]
Her current favorites were Sandra Mitchell, Ulla, Barbara Wilkey, and Sally Law. [Good choices, all. I discovered Sally just this year and I can't get enough of her whodonits.]
You got me aboard, podner!
Jay
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Oh, man, this is so NOW in just about any hometown bar. You have such a good mix of girl-cattiness and guy DUH! here
Jennifer observes, "Must be hard on you managing your husband's affair." [Ha! this can be read with such subtext. I agree with your use of "managing". I was tempted to suggest "orchestrating", but "managing has more of a down-and-dirty businesstransaction.]
"How bad was it cut?" [I've often thought that "jib" could be a good word for a pivot into a joke. But you delivered it so flawlessly!]
Her current favorites were Sandra Mitchell, Ulla, Barbara Wilkey, and Sally Law. [Good choices, all. I discovered Sally just this year and I can't get enough of her whodonits.]
You got me aboard, podner!
Jay
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Jay, thank you for the six stars and your wonderful review. I will post the final on Tuesday. I hope it meets your expectations. Terry
Comment from Ric Myworld
The Bingo lines alone were enough to put me all in, but there's so much in this story that brings to mind naughty things I'd rather not share. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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The Bingo lines alone were enough to put me all in, but there's so much in this story that brings to mind naughty things I'd rather not share. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Ric, thank you for the six stars and stellar review. I will post the final on Tuesday, I changed Ric?s solo from Otis Redding to John Prine, I thought it went better. Terry.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Great installment, and I cannot wait for the next one. I must have missed one installment. I am headed for your page to seek it out. You, Mr. Terry is a great writer, and I continue to enjoy all the various topics you write about. All the words you mentioned in your AN are used just the same in Virginia. Must be a southern thing! Thanks for sharing your talent with us.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Great installment, and I cannot wait for the next one. I must have missed one installment. I am headed for your page to seek it out. You, Mr. Terry is a great writer, and I continue to enjoy all the various topics you write about. All the words you mentioned in your AN are used just the same in Virginia. Must be a southern thing! Thanks for sharing your talent with us.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Sandra, I am pleased you enjoyed the story, the last installment will be Tuesday. Terry
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You are welcome. I will look for it. The poetry reading went well.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
So Ann and Stan are the only two scoring dates in this crowd of Barhounds. There's a whole lot of talk and not enough action. Are you telling us this group has Lunch and then return for Happy Hour at the Hot House Bar at 5 p.m.? LOL They ARE regulars, aren't they? Looking for love in all the wrong places. LOL Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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So Ann and Stan are the only two scoring dates in this crowd of Barhounds. There's a whole lot of talk and not enough action. Are you telling us this group has Lunch and then return for Happy Hour at the Hot House Bar at 5 p.m.? LOL They ARE regulars, aren't they? Looking for love in all the wrong places. LOL Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Nancy, thank you for the review. I am delighted you enjoyed the story. Terry
Comment from Annmuma
Maybe the best part of this post is the ending. It draws the reader in and the next post becomes a 'I can't miss it' AND it leaves the door open for any kind of ending. Really excellent work.
I love the characters; the scene is set so well, one can hear the glasses as they are slid in front of the customers. The dialogue is good and sounds authentic without being over the top. Every reader knows someone that at least one of the characters remind them of.
It is really well-written, Terry.
There are two men customers---I suggest 'two male customers'.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Maybe the best part of this post is the ending. It draws the reader in and the next post becomes a 'I can't miss it' AND it leaves the door open for any kind of ending. Really excellent work.
I love the characters; the scene is set so well, one can hear the glasses as they are slid in front of the customers. The dialogue is good and sounds authentic without being over the top. Every reader knows someone that at least one of the characters remind them of.
It is really well-written, Terry.
There are two men customers---I suggest 'two male customers'.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Ann, thank you for the six stars and your very kind review. "Male" customers?...this is Texas where "Men are Men!" LOL, Terry.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Well, I can say one thing, Terry, the bourbon is not affecting your writing, not one little drop. Great chapter! The fact that you have so many characters in one scene and manage to keep them all involved is one sign of a good writer. This cast of characters is exciting and keeps your eyes moving to experience what they'll say next. Great work! JohnC
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Well, I can say one thing, Terry, the bourbon is not affecting your writing, not one little drop. Great chapter! The fact that you have so many characters in one scene and manage to keep them all involved is one sign of a good writer. This cast of characters is exciting and keeps your eyes moving to experience what they'll say next. Great work! JohnC
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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John, I am delighted you enjoyed the story, thank you for reading. Terry.