Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Charon Comes Late"Musings of an old man - 2022
25 total reviews
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Raul, thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiments although this is not a traditional sonnet as it has an additional stanza, nor is it written in strict iambic pentameter, nevertheless I enjoyed it and wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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I enjoyed the sentiments although this is not a traditional sonnet as it has an additional stanza, nor is it written in strict iambic pentameter, nevertheless I enjoyed it and wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from JoannaN
This is an intriguing poem. The accompanying picture is fascinating, and brings us some questions. Who was this woman? How did she die? We are placed in the Charon's boat, watching the unknown woman pass by.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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This is an intriguing poem. The accompanying picture is fascinating, and brings us some questions. Who was this woman? How did she die? We are placed in the Charon's boat, watching the unknown woman pass by.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Joanna, I appreciate your review and comment.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Very well done. I only began to read WHShakespeare book of sonnet this week, and truth be told of the eight read, I find yours far more clear. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Very well done. I only began to read WHShakespeare book of sonnet this week, and truth be told of the eight read, I find yours far more clear. Congratulations.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Tom, thanks for the extra star! To be honest writing sonnets have been a real bust for me until just recently. Something finally just clicked.
Comment from nomi338
The fading of a star, the gradual decaying, sagging skin, the graying and thinning hair, signals the approaching of the end. It is never a pretty or pleasing sight. As a friend and or fan, you pray that he end will not be too unpleasant. Still it will be sad, there will be tears. Your detailing of this was poignant, pointed and direct.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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The fading of a star, the gradual decaying, sagging skin, the graying and thinning hair, signals the approaching of the end. It is never a pretty or pleasing sight. As a friend and or fan, you pray that he end will not be too unpleasant. Still it will be sad, there will be tears. Your detailing of this was poignant, pointed and direct.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Nomi thank you! Yes I know of no one who has died easily, even Jesus suffered.
Comment from HarryT
This is an excellent heart-felt rendition of a torturous existence of finally being ended. The peace not only coming to the subject of the poem but to the author as well. A fine effort in this style of poetry. I cannot judge the correctness of the writing i.e. the sonnet style, but the meaning comes through. A job well-done.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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This is an excellent heart-felt rendition of a torturous existence of finally being ended. The peace not only coming to the subject of the poem but to the author as well. A fine effort in this style of poetry. I cannot judge the correctness of the writing i.e. the sonnet style, but the meaning comes through. A job well-done.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Author,
Your poem is poignant, as the protagonist of your work suffers in this world, and is finally released of darkness and placed in the Lord's hands.
We all suffer in this world, but it is in God's time to embrace us in the end. (As I was someone who used to be suicidal).
Your sonnet is great work!
Good luck with this one!
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Author,
Your poem is poignant, as the protagonist of your work suffers in this world, and is finally released of darkness and placed in the Lord's hands.
We all suffer in this world, but it is in God's time to embrace us in the end. (As I was someone who used to be suicidal).
Your sonnet is great work!
Good luck with this one!
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Cindy, thank you for your honest feedback and what a gift you are for sharing your authentic truth about our human struggle.
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
I have never read a sonnet like this before, and I love it! The sweet release of death, but not death... on to eternal life! Best of luck in the contest, I think you should win!
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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I have never read a sonnet like this before, and I love it! The sweet release of death, but not death... on to eternal life! Best of luck in the contest, I think you should win!
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thank you! This very new poetic writing for me.
Comment from Janet Foor
This is an unusual sonnet for certain which is what is expected by the writing prompt. I think you did an excellent job with your subverted sonnet. Creative with vivid imagery, sonnet rhyme and meter.
Well done
Blessings
Jy
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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This is an unusual sonnet for certain which is what is expected by the writing prompt. I think you did an excellent job with your subverted sonnet. Creative with vivid imagery, sonnet rhyme and meter.
Well done
Blessings
Jy
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Jy. Thank you, I have certainly had some hurdles writing a sonnet in the last. I value your comments
Comment from leather
I must congratulate you for just attempting this poem with all its requirements. The topic is unusual, and the verse is without spelling errors.
I am not familiar with Greek mythology, so I may lack the foundation needed to understand the fifth line from the bottom. But the meaning of that line escapes me. This poem may appeal to a very select audience.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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I must congratulate you for just attempting this poem with all its requirements. The topic is unusual, and the verse is without spelling errors.
I am not familiar with Greek mythology, so I may lack the foundation needed to understand the fifth line from the bottom. But the meaning of that line escapes me. This poem may appeal to a very select audience.
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Hi leather, let me explain this line: Oh, you unjust trustee of the pit czar; it is a metaphor about Charon, who in Greek mythology ferries the dying across the river Styx into Hades ( the pit ) Charon (the unjust trustee) , thus the czar of the vessel.
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Thank you for the explanation. I needed it.