Eavesdroppers Are We All
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Eavesdroppers Are We All, Sc. 3"A Reader Caught in the Middle of an Intrigue
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You have assembled an interesting cast with, so far, quite distinct characters. The tension of the storm and being trapped in the cafe for an unknown time seems to have already added an edge to some tempers, or perhaps they will prove to be simply bad tempered.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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You have assembled an interesting cast with, so far, quite distinct characters. The tension of the storm and being trapped in the cafe for an unknown time seems to have already added an edge to some tempers, or perhaps they will prove to be simply bad tempered.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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The storm does seem to bring out the essence in all the characters. It will get more direction beginning scene 5.
Comment from Spitfire
Love the blending of Harry into a character from Pygmalion aka My Fair Lady, my favorite musical. Also like the bit about Harry's appearance matching that of Rudy's. The last lines make me wonder if you are trying to give advice to wannabe authors. Some on this site could use it. LOL
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Love the blending of Harry into a character from Pygmalion aka My Fair Lady, my favorite musical. Also like the bit about Harry's appearance matching that of Rudy's. The last lines make me wonder if you are trying to give advice to wannabe authors. Some on this site could use it. LOL
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Shari, your mind doesn't slow down, does it. Always in there nosing about their motives and deeper impulses. Oh, how I love My Fair Lady. Of course I liked the original Pygmalion, too.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Jay
Let me say, the chacters in Eavesdroppers Are We All, .
Have an important part to your play, in your Eavesdroppers play are the characters and I like how they all stood out especially,
the little scrubby looking dog, Rudy.
Thank you Jay by how you Kept my attention till your ending; as you said your self in the ending of your well constructed of your humorous play-----
"if I can just get you to keep your focus."
which you did,
Gert
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Hello Jay
Let me say, the chacters in Eavesdroppers Are We All, .
Have an important part to your play, in your Eavesdroppers play are the characters and I like how they all stood out especially,
the little scrubby looking dog, Rudy.
Thank you Jay by how you Kept my attention till your ending; as you said your self in the ending of your well constructed of your humorous play-----
"if I can just get you to keep your focus."
which you did,
Gert
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Awwww, Gert. I love your review. Magically poetic. Thank you for it ... and for the lovely six!
Jay Squires you are most welcome
The six rating you earned it
Gert
Comment from Ulla
Wow, this is an amazing scene. Ray. Everybody walks around the hot porridge, as we wold say in Danish, lol, meaning a lot of inuendo and that someone knows more than he or she is prepared to reveal. What everyone seem to agree on is the bad breath of the poor dog. I just wonder how this will all pan out. What a great story! Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Wow, this is an amazing scene. Ray. Everybody walks around the hot porridge, as we wold say in Danish, lol, meaning a lot of inuendo and that someone knows more than he or she is prepared to reveal. What everyone seem to agree on is the bad breath of the poor dog. I just wonder how this will all pan out. What a great story! Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Ulla. All will begin to move in a more singular direction beginning scene 5. But this is more a circular play than the others. Thanks for the six lovely stars.
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's always a pleasure to see what you and your characters will come up with next. And it's a great way to start off my Sunday, or any other day, I'm sure. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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It's always a pleasure to see what you and your characters will come up with next. And it's a great way to start off my Sunday, or any other day, I'm sure. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Awww, thank you, Ric. I'm kinda anxious for this to show me where it's going. I'm working on scene 5 now, and I actually am seeing a unified plot groping forward.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my! Poor Rudy. LOL I enjoyed reading your post. I do hope the little guy gets to stay. Of course I'm sure you're not surprised I concentrated on the dog. LOL
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Oh my! Poor Rudy. LOL I enjoyed reading your post. I do hope the little guy gets to stay. Of course I'm sure you're not surprised I concentrated on the dog. LOL
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Yes, you may remember Rudy from my short story of the same name early last year. He's a hard dog to love. Thank you, as usual, for your support and for your gorgeous chartreuse crossed-Band-aids.
Comment from Judy Lawless
The activity and dialogue in this scene are riveting, Jay. There is a lot of innuendo, making us stop to think, to analyse just what is going on here. I like little Rudy. He seems to have a major role. Very well done, again, Jay.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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The activity and dialogue in this scene are riveting, Jay. There is a lot of innuendo, making us stop to think, to analyse just what is going on here. I like little Rudy. He seems to have a major role. Very well done, again, Jay.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Many thanks, Judy. I'm glad the characters are keeping you interested. So far, it's been rather circular. But starting next scene, and certainly beginning scene 5 the plot, as much of it as there is, will find itself. Your six stars warms my heart.
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You?re welcome, Jay. :)
Comment from Begin Again
What a world we live in....Even in times of trouble, we don't seem to be able to come together. And then the poor pup...I was ready to jump in and grab him before he went outside in the cold. LOL
Great job!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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What a world we live in....Even in times of trouble, we don't seem to be able to come together. And then the poor pup...I was ready to jump in and grab him before he went outside in the cold. LOL
Great job!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Love it, Carol, love it. Little Rudy is more a catalyst to bring out the essence in each character. He performed the same function in my short story of the same name, bringing out the best (and worst) in my wife and myself.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Jay,
As I read along, issues start popping up... like what to do with Rudy? He's not supposed to be in an eating establishment, but there's a blizzard outside. Who is going to throw the friendly pooch out in that? Right-wrong? Personalities arise, as well as issues. Robert Piebald is a piece of work, isn't he? It doesn't take long before Jackson has to settle things down between Harry Lowery and Robert. Martha takes the dog, who has a bath coming up in his near future. Meanwhile, the blizzard is still raging outside.
It made me think of an old movie I watched on Turner Classic Movies earlier in 2021 (I think, or maybe it was 2020). Same idea, strangers plopped together, personalities clashing after a disaster. (I think I mentioned "The Poseidon Adventure" in my last review.) But now I'm thinking about a 1957 movie, starring Tyrone Power, Lloyd Nolan, Stephen Boyd, Mai Zetterling, Moira Lister, Gordon Jackson, and a host of others. "Abandon Ship" is a British drama/thriller about a group of people who find themselves elbow-to-elbow in a lifeboat after their luxury liner, Crescent Star, strikes a derelict mine and sinks in seven minutes. The officer in charge has to decide who must go into the shark-patrolled water, and who can stay on board. This causes quite an upset with the passengers, as you might imagine. And the officer (Tyrone Power) must keep order before the lifeboat capsizes in the waves and they all wind up in the drink.... much the same as Jackson is trying to do in the diner... retain order and sensibility. And now, he's getting a bit of help from the retired judge, Bett Stabler.
It's a great setting for your story, Jay. I wonder what other issues will surface during these chaotic few days before the roads are plowed, the Greyhound is driven up to the diner, and passengers collected.
I look forward to see what will transpire as night falls, and who will get the cots... and who will sleep on the floor. How many eggs does Jackson have in his fridge? Who is going to help in the kitchen?... dishes to wash... food to prepare. Can this group get along? Or will there be a fight before long? Piebald will be in the middle of it, you can be sure.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Hi Jay,
As I read along, issues start popping up... like what to do with Rudy? He's not supposed to be in an eating establishment, but there's a blizzard outside. Who is going to throw the friendly pooch out in that? Right-wrong? Personalities arise, as well as issues. Robert Piebald is a piece of work, isn't he? It doesn't take long before Jackson has to settle things down between Harry Lowery and Robert. Martha takes the dog, who has a bath coming up in his near future. Meanwhile, the blizzard is still raging outside.
It made me think of an old movie I watched on Turner Classic Movies earlier in 2021 (I think, or maybe it was 2020). Same idea, strangers plopped together, personalities clashing after a disaster. (I think I mentioned "The Poseidon Adventure" in my last review.) But now I'm thinking about a 1957 movie, starring Tyrone Power, Lloyd Nolan, Stephen Boyd, Mai Zetterling, Moira Lister, Gordon Jackson, and a host of others. "Abandon Ship" is a British drama/thriller about a group of people who find themselves elbow-to-elbow in a lifeboat after their luxury liner, Crescent Star, strikes a derelict mine and sinks in seven minutes. The officer in charge has to decide who must go into the shark-patrolled water, and who can stay on board. This causes quite an upset with the passengers, as you might imagine. And the officer (Tyrone Power) must keep order before the lifeboat capsizes in the waves and they all wind up in the drink.... much the same as Jackson is trying to do in the diner... retain order and sensibility. And now, he's getting a bit of help from the retired judge, Bett Stabler.
It's a great setting for your story, Jay. I wonder what other issues will surface during these chaotic few days before the roads are plowed, the Greyhound is driven up to the diner, and passengers collected.
I look forward to see what will transpire as night falls, and who will get the cots... and who will sleep on the floor. How many eggs does Jackson have in his fridge? Who is going to help in the kitchen?... dishes to wash... food to prepare. Can this group get along? Or will there be a fight before long? Piebald will be in the middle of it, you can be sure.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Yes, Rudy and the Blizzard are both catalysts to bring out the best and the worst in everyone. So far, everything else is circularity. I likened it (or rather Cililla likened it) to the Canterbury Tales. Your comparison to the Poseidon Adventure, is certainly apt. That circularity around the poles of a character and others who gravitate to it, is what my play is doing now. But the Poseidon Adventure (the way you describe it) has the central thrust being to get the passengers to safety without their toppling the boat they're in. So far, this doesn't have that singular thrust. It may start developing in scene 5, when Jackson complete's his tale, which I subtitle, "Jackson's (AKA The Tavern Owner's) Tale". It's an honor having you visit each scene, Kimbob, with or without the 6 stars!
Comment from BethShelby
I am enjoying the exchange going on in this restaurant. Cililla is convinced that Harry isn't her assignment. So for the other invisible character, Gregory is the only one who sees her. I think I'm going to have to go back into you portfolio and read about Harry. He seems like a very interesting character. I don't think I read his story.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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I am enjoying the exchange going on in this restaurant. Cililla is convinced that Harry isn't her assignment. So for the other invisible character, Gregory is the only one who sees her. I think I'm going to have to go back into you portfolio and read about Harry. He seems like a very interesting character. I don't think I read his story.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Never say I don't comply with my beloved reader's needs: https://tinyurl.com/2p845nrz. Harry is my very favorite character of all my plays.
Thank you for reading, Beth.