Eavesdroppers Are We All
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Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad to see Cornelius and Jennie back. I appreciate the metaworld you created with a Fanstorian (though Fanstory existed only 21 years and no internet etc was available in 1968 but we'll suspend our disbelief.) I guess this script helps us as writers to always be ready to discern and observe even if we don't have a Cililla approach us and give us the task of recorder.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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I'm glad to see Cornelius and Jennie back. I appreciate the metaworld you created with a Fanstorian (though Fanstory existed only 21 years and no internet etc was available in 1968 but we'll suspend our disbelief.) I guess this script helps us as writers to always be ready to discern and observe even if we don't have a Cililla approach us and give us the task of recorder.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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I am mortified! Thanks for the six, Helen, but if you only knew how much of a stickler I've been for accuracy in my plays from the "old days". The huge flaw was about the internet not even existing in '68. I don't feel as bad about FanStory's non-existence as I do about the non-existence of what makes FanStory possible. OMG!
Thank you for YOUR suspension of disbelief, my dear, but many won't be able to. As soon as it dawns on them. (My wife quit reading her favorite romance novelist of 20 years when one of her character's eyes went from brown to blue. She lost faith in that writer, so invested had she become in the character.)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, Ha, Ha I remember that I read about Cillila in another play, and she is doing an excellent job on bringing up all the characters from your previous plays. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Ha, Ha, Ha I remember that I read about Cillila in another play, and she is doing an excellent job on bringing up all the characters from your previous plays. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Iza. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from tfawcus
I love the tension you have already begun to create here. Shades of Key Largo! Great to see the reappearance of Cililla and Cornelius, too. This promises to be great drama and great comedy.
You have a facility for dropping gems unnoticed before the swine! Othello's beast with two backs, for instance.
The stage is set. How could I give this less than six stars?
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I love the tension you have already begun to create here. Shades of Key Largo! Great to see the reappearance of Cililla and Cornelius, too. This promises to be great drama and great comedy.
You have a facility for dropping gems unnoticed before the swine! Othello's beast with two backs, for instance.
The stage is set. How could I give this less than six stars?
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I'm glad you caught that reference, Tony. I think it passed by most. I sooo do appreciate the six stars. This is not taking off as I had planned.
Comment from lancellot
So, this is some form of 'It's a Wonderful Life'? Now, we see that Cililla Queez is some form of Angel. Which tells us that is what she was all along and not what we were told in the last script. That's makes sense, as in the last script she knew things and did things, a part of Cornie's mind couldn't know or do.
Also, you break the fourth of a sorts and bring in a reviewer from FanStory.
I won't lie to you. This is odd, again heavy on exposition and Cil also plays the part of a narrator.
Naturally, for FS, I think it will do well.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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So, this is some form of 'It's a Wonderful Life'? Now, we see that Cililla Queez is some form of Angel. Which tells us that is what she was all along and not what we were told in the last script. That's makes sense, as in the last script she knew things and did things, a part of Cornie's mind couldn't know or do.
Also, you break the fourth of a sorts and bring in a reviewer from FanStory.
I won't lie to you. This is odd, again heavy on exposition and Cil also plays the part of a narrator.
Naturally, for FS, I think it will do well.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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As usual, I appreciate your candor, Lance. You know, I didn't think of Clarence when I wrote this, but I love the movie, and won't say it mightn't have influenced my creation of the character. I don't understand what you mean by "Also, you break the fourth of a sorts and bring in a reviewer from FanStory." I think you left a word out. But of course it's odd! Genius in Love was odd, too. I work hard to try to limit exposition. It's tough to do with stage direction. It'll take two or three scenes before I'll get a direction the readers are going in. So far, it's been slow.
Comment from damommy
I picked up on the name right away. Does that mean I'm smart? hahaha. Cililla Queez. How clever. I like the lightning of each table as Cililla approaches. Poor Rudy who nobody wants to claim. I can see this is going to be a fantastic book.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I picked up on the name right away. Does that mean I'm smart? hahaha. Cililla Queez. How clever. I like the lightning of each table as Cililla approaches. Poor Rudy who nobody wants to claim. I can see this is going to be a fantastic book.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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You are one of the smart ones, Yvonne. Glad you are enjoying this. I'm getting a bit experimental.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I am so pleased to see that Cornelius is making a success of his life with Jennie at his side. Gregory and his connection to FanStory is an interesting character to have added. The idea of this play is different in a good way. Our community theater here did a play with the light and dark effect. It was very good and humorous, too. Can't think of the name but as I read your work it came to mind.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I am so pleased to see that Cornelius is making a success of his life with Jennie at his side. Gregory and his connection to FanStory is an interesting character to have added. The idea of this play is different in a good way. Our community theater here did a play with the light and dark effect. It was very good and humorous, too. Can't think of the name but as I read your work it came to mind.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Yes, Carol. The light and shadow does work in plays ... unfortunately less in written plays than acted ones. Please stay tuned. I think you'll enjoy this one.
Comment from Spitfire
I'm not sure I can relate to this. Reading past reviews it seems to depend on prior posts which I missed when I got off the site for awhile. Also, I find trouble with the number of characters I would have to remember! Maybe in following scenes, stick to smaller number like four. Just saying.....
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I'm not sure I can relate to this. Reading past reviews it seems to depend on prior posts which I missed when I got off the site for awhile. Also, I find trouble with the number of characters I would have to remember! Maybe in following scenes, stick to smaller number like four. Just saying.....
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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That's okay, Shari. Glad you are being candid with me. Yes there are a number of characters, but as this develops, you'll see that they all play a direct or indirect action in the unfoldment of the drama.
Comment from Judy Lawless
Jay, your imagination floors me. I did read the character names and descriptions first, recognizing most of them from your postings this past year. I'm guessing the ones I don't recognize might be from previous writings. Anyway, it certainly caught my attention. The setting is perfectly described and the dialogue is both funny and intriguing. Poor Gregory, being thrown into a job he thinks he's incapable of. Another amazing script. I look forward to the next scenes.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Jay, your imagination floors me. I did read the character names and descriptions first, recognizing most of them from your postings this past year. I'm guessing the ones I don't recognize might be from previous writings. Anyway, it certainly caught my attention. The setting is perfectly described and the dialogue is both funny and intriguing. Poor Gregory, being thrown into a job he thinks he's incapable of. Another amazing script. I look forward to the next scenes.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Judy. I'm glad it resonates with you. It's getting a kind of lukewarm reception, but maybe it will pick up later on.
Comment from royowen
How interesting, you have a scribal love affair with Cornelius, and Jenny, who is both a great lover and carer of Cornelius, and an old favourite in Cililla Queez, (great name) and a few other sundry characters, the set is in a diner, and interactions appear to be spontaneous, as a writer can be. Beautifully written Jay, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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How interesting, you have a scribal love affair with Cornelius, and Jenny, who is both a great lover and carer of Cornelius, and an old favourite in Cililla Queez, (great name) and a few other sundry characters, the set is in a diner, and interactions appear to be spontaneous, as a writer can be. Beautifully written Jay, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Many thanks Roy. I'm thrilled that you found this enjoyable. It was kind of slow beginning, but it should pick up.
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Jay. I just love this, and you are so true to your unique style, which is so refreshing on this site. I have to admit, though, that I'm glad to encounter Cornelius and Jennie, once again. Now on to the next scene. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Hi Jay. I just love this, and you are so true to your unique style, which is so refreshing on this site. I have to admit, though, that I'm glad to encounter Cornelius and Jennie, once again. Now on to the next scene. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I was a fan of Cornelius and Jennie, too, and didn't want them to slide into my unconscious. I really appreciate the six stars, Ulla.