Whispers . . .
Free Verse28 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Whispers, brings in the metaphorically referenced fog and insinuates it in the clefts and crannies. A foggy stillness exists as the whispers speak.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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This free verse, Whispers, brings in the metaphorically referenced fog and insinuates it in the clefts and crannies. A foggy stillness exists as the whispers speak.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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You understood exactly what I meant. Thank you.
Comment from Therese Caron
Excellent poem. The image is so eerie, which fog has a way of making things look. I was reading the poem, wondering what you were going to refer to, and was then surprised when you said I am fog. I think Carl Sandburg would like this poem. Very nice free verse!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Excellent poem. The image is so eerie, which fog has a way of making things look. I was reading the poem, wondering what you were going to refer to, and was then surprised when you said I am fog. I think Carl Sandburg would like this poem. Very nice free verse!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Thank you. That's quite a compliment!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Beautiful personification of the elusive 'fog' with a sprinkling of rhyme throughout the well-chosen phrases.... you can almost hear the foghorn sounding in the background!! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Beautiful personification of the elusive 'fog' with a sprinkling of rhyme throughout the well-chosen phrases.... you can almost hear the foghorn sounding in the background!! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Thank you. I love fog, and it had been foggy a couple of days when I wrote this.
Comment from Gail Denham
"I am fog." - Powerful statement and thought - and a misty covering often does give us chills, makes us feel there are "whispers" in all that covering. Mysterious how everything looks in fog.
Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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"I am fog." - Powerful statement and thought - and a misty covering often does give us chills, makes us feel there are "whispers" in all that covering. Mysterious how everything looks in fog.
Well done.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the lovely comments.
Comment from June Sargent
Unfortunately, fog tends to waft its way into my brain these days and linger there longer than I would like! This is a lovely example of a free verse! I like the gentle, flowing rhythm and the words whispering, wafting, wending, wherever add to the alliteration and rhyme pattern. Well done for the challenge!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Unfortunately, fog tends to waft its way into my brain these days and linger there longer than I would like! This is a lovely example of a free verse! I like the gentle, flowing rhythm and the words whispering, wafting, wending, wherever add to the alliteration and rhyme pattern. Well done for the challenge!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Thank you. I like fog, but not when it invades my brain. I think it happens to me a lot more, too.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your speaking in the first person to give your words more immediacy and using personification to surprise us with the subject of fog. I also enjoyed your use of alliteration and the parallel picture. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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I admired your speaking in the first person to give your words more immediacy and using personification to surprise us with the subject of fog. I also enjoyed your use of alliteration and the parallel picture. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Thank you. I really appreciate this wonderful review!
Comment from jenintorre
I really love this free verse poem. It is so atmospheric and descriptive. Great presentation and well chosen artwork. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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I really love this free verse poem. It is so atmospheric and descriptive. Great presentation and well chosen artwork. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review. I'm so glad you like it. I love fog and it had been foggy for a couple of days. My inspiration. lol.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You'll be getting a star and a 'very well done!' at the bottom, from Jim. I used to love that when I went to school. LOL. I enjoyed your poem and I have to say, it was a surprise to find you were the fog, yet it really did make sense that you were. Well done, my friend! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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You'll be getting a star and a 'very well done!' at the bottom, from Jim. I used to love that when I went to school. LOL. I enjoyed your poem and I have to say, it was a surprise to find you were the fog, yet it really did make sense that you were. Well done, my friend! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Thank you. Such a great review. I love fog.
Comment from Pantygynt
This works very well as far as the rhythms go. It is there, underpining the whole poem without being overtly in charge. Exactly what I was looking for. The rhyme element is less obvious but exists with assonance in the first stanza, internally on a single line and crossed with a subsequent one. Also both old/bold and way/stray are examples of cross rhyme here. They appear well separated but the lines are mostly short and, reading aloud, one can 'feel' them there.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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This works very well as far as the rhythms go. It is there, underpining the whole poem without being overtly in charge. Exactly what I was looking for. The rhyme element is less obvious but exists with assonance in the first stanza, internally on a single line and crossed with a subsequent one. Also both old/bold and way/stray are examples of cross rhyme here. They appear well separated but the lines are mostly short and, reading aloud, one can 'feel' them there.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Jim. Pam(respa) said to tell you she gave me an A+. lol.
Comment from dragonpoet
Damommy,
I like this whimsical poetic description of fog. It sounds like the fog is enshrouding the speaker too. Luckily fog burns away.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Damommy,
I like this whimsical poetic description of fog. It sounds like the fog is enshrouding the speaker too. Luckily fog burns away.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Thank you. I like fog.
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You are most kindly welcome. I like fog as long as I'm not driving in it.
Joan
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You are most kindly welcome. I like fog as long as I'm not driving in it.
Joan