Babysitting Legacies
They're never quite what we remember... are they?34 total reviews
Comment from Simonsez
I like this quite a bit. My favorite element is the expression of body language, especially on the part of Faye, and of Jerrod. The bit about his feet commanding his attention made me smile.
The only criticism I have to offer is that the introduction of the boys' abandonment by their mother feels slightly artificial. Quite a minor detail. Nice job. :)
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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I like this quite a bit. My favorite element is the expression of body language, especially on the part of Faye, and of Jerrod. The bit about his feet commanding his attention made me smile.
The only criticism I have to offer is that the introduction of the boys' abandonment by their mother feels slightly artificial. Quite a minor detail. Nice job. :)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your review, Simon. And I apologize for the tardiness of this response, but family affairs called me away for awhile. Have a wonderful Christmas Season! ;)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
You got into these boys' heads and emotions very well. The characters were believable. Twins seem to feed off one another just as they did in this story. Good work.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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You got into these boys' heads and emotions very well. The characters were believable. Twins seem to feed off one another just as they did in this story. Good work.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your review!
Comment from dragonpoet
Yvette
This is a nice story of a wonderful babysitter with a twist. The end answered my questioon on how she could be a babysitter for both a father and his children. Maybe when the children get older they'll be able
to see the troll and the hidden fairy wings. I like the infusion of fantasy with reality.
Congrats for the second place finish in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Yvette
This is a nice story of a wonderful babysitter with a twist. The end answered my questioon on how she could be a babysitter for both a father and his children. Maybe when the children get older they'll be able
to see the troll and the hidden fairy wings. I like the infusion of fantasy with reality.
Congrats for the second place finish in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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LOL!! ;) So glad you enjoyed this fun little twist, Joan -- you know the blonde over here, she just cannot write a 'straight-up reality' story...too much work! ;) :) Thanx for the review and have an awesome week! ;) Yvette
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You are most kindly welcome, as Cinderella said the the Prince, in my version of the play on DVD. I agree with you about true stories.
Have a great week.
Joan
Comment from Lobber
Hi job! ... You win. I never had time for fantasy horror events in my life. Alas, I was busy coping with the real ones. A fun Monday nite read. Makes me glad I never had children. - Lobber
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Hi job! ... You win. I never had time for fantasy horror events in my life. Alas, I was busy coping with the real ones. A fun Monday nite read. Makes me glad I never had children. - Lobber
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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No horror to this fantasy, Lobber - I promise! ;) The only time this blonde writes horror is for a contest... and I don't enter many of those!! ;) :) Thanx for stopping by for Monday night storytime...lol! ;) Yvette
Comment from Tina Crute
This is such a cute story! Will there be more to come? I hope so! The dialogue was amazingly
Intetesting, like a real conversation between adults and children. The detail of her biting the inside of her cheek is clever...it gives the reader a clue to how she loves the children, and knows what they are talking about. Love it!
Congrats on your win!
Tina
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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This is such a cute story! Will there be more to come? I hope so! The dialogue was amazingly
Intetesting, like a real conversation between adults and children. The detail of her biting the inside of her cheek is clever...it gives the reader a clue to how she loves the children, and knows what they are talking about. Love it!
Congrats on your win!
Tina
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Oh, I'm so glad you enjoyed this one, Tina -- three sons gives me a 'leg up' on these types of interactions...LOL!! ;) I hadn't planed on more of Faye's magical babysitting expertise, but I've had a number of questions.... so, I might have to consider it! ;) :) Thank you so much for these lovely stars and such an awesome review, my lady -- take care out there!! ;) Yvette
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I hope you do write more. Know what
your stories remind me of? A little Mary Poppins and a bit of Berenstein Bears, where there's a different adventure each book!
Hugs!
Tina
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Oh my goodness - what a wonderful compliment!! ;) Thank you so much!! ;) I'll try to keep your 'adventures' coming! ;)
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Good, I'm glad!
Tina
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great contest entry, YM. I enjoyed reading it. Your attention to details add to the enjoyment. Your descriptive words and dialogue do as well. You had me believing this was a 'normal' babysitting story. I was surprised with the great twist and how you continued to expand on it rather than just say it and leave--sorry for the run-on sentence. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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This is a great contest entry, YM. I enjoyed reading it. Your attention to details add to the enjoyment. Your descriptive words and dialogue do as well. You had me believing this was a 'normal' babysitting story. I was surprised with the great twist and how you continued to expand on it rather than just say it and leave--sorry for the run-on sentence. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Jan
Comment Written 11-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review, Jan -- so glad you enjoyed Faye's magical babysitting expertise! ;) Take care out there and have a great weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Schott
An incredible story, Yvette. I enjoyed the characters and loved how you led us to the noise maker and the reason for his oaring. I Fun tale of the ancient, fairy babysitter.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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An incredible story, Yvette. I enjoyed the characters and loved how you led us to the noise maker and the reason for his oaring. I Fun tale of the ancient, fairy babysitter.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Wow, Bill!! :) :) Thank you so much for these lovely stars and such an awesome review -- so glad you enjoyed Faye's magical babysitting expertise! ;) Take care out there and have a wonderful year ahead! ;) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
Hey Yvette you the teacher with a pen with wings. Fairy good writing. I see that you like the fairy kingdom and I'm glad for without you writing about the hidden world we wouldn't know of it's existence. This is a good entry for This sentence start the story contest. :)
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Hey Yvette you the teacher with a pen with wings. Fairy good writing. I see that you like the fairy kingdom and I'm glad for without you writing about the hidden world we wouldn't know of it's existence. This is a good entry for This sentence start the story contest. :)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for these lovely stars, Jose, and for such an awesome review -- so glad you enjoyed Faye's magical babysitting expertise! ;) You know the crazy blonde over here with her 'magic'... :) :) Take care over there in the Lone Star State! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sugarray77
Wow, Yvette, this is really good. I know that every reader will be delighted with this tale of the fairy babysitters. Your references to parents support the century of babysitting very well. Really adorable!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Wow, Yvette, this is really good. I know that every reader will be delighted with this tale of the fairy babysitters. Your references to parents support the century of babysitting very well. Really adorable!!
Melissa
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for these lovely stars and such an awesome review, Melissa -- so glad you enjoyed Faye's magical babysitting expertise! ;) You know the crazy blonde and her 'fantasy writes'... ;) :) Take care out there and I hope y'all missed out on the storms.... we've been in and out of watches all morning and are actually under a warning right now, but it's in a completely different part of the county! ;) Yvette
Comment from emmaysavage
I liked your boys' characters, and the emergence of the troll was perfect. Was Freckles a coon or a cat? I also liked the emergence of the baby-sitter's real nature
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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I liked your boys' characters, and the emergence of the troll was perfect. Was Freckles a coon or a cat? I also liked the emergence of the baby-sitter's real nature
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review, Emmay -- so glad you enjoyed Faye's magical babysitting expertise! ;) Take care out there and have a great weekend! ;) Yvette