To Cherish Thorns
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Comment from catch22
Hi Mikey, this is a very interesting take on the old cliche of a rolling stone gathering no moss. I liked how you developed it into a restless partner in a relationship. The flow was good due to good use of line breaks and poetic sound devices. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Hi Mikey, this is a very interesting take on the old cliche of a rolling stone gathering no moss. I liked how you developed it into a restless partner in a relationship. The flow was good due to good use of line breaks and poetic sound devices. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for your insightful comments. I'm pleased to hear i was successful in some of what I was attempting to do. Thanks for the well wishes. I did fairly well. RYME4U got the win, but I made her nervous for awhile. :)) mikey
Comment from scd41
The metaphorical application of a rolling stone has been finely made in the poem and it is heartening to find that the gathering moss is all gone. This particular saying has a negative interpretation and it could be a subject of controversy. When the rolling stone is somebody who is satisfied with his mobility in life - changing jobs, houses and places, he might realize 'A plant often moved does not take root'. This writing prompt is interesting as divergent views on old time sayings can be shared for which FS is famous.
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The metaphorical application of a rolling stone has been finely made in the poem and it is heartening to find that the gathering moss is all gone. This particular saying has a negative interpretation and it could be a subject of controversy. When the rolling stone is somebody who is satisfied with his mobility in life - changing jobs, houses and places, he might realize 'A plant often moved does not take root'. This writing prompt is interesting as divergent views on old time sayings can be shared for which FS is famous.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from Sasha
Excellent cliche and beautifully written. This is an terrific entry for this contest and I wish you all the best. I really enjoyed this one, keep up the great work.
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Excellent cliche and beautifully written. This is an terrific entry for this contest and I wish you all the best. I really enjoyed this one, keep up the great work.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from justafan
Hi Mikey, I love this softer side of you :)
I read it 3 times and saw it differently all 3 times. I have a strange mind...lol.
This is lovely and a wonderful entry into this contest.
Thanks for sharing.
Always,
Missy
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Hi Mikey, I love this softer side of you :)
I read it 3 times and saw it differently all 3 times. I have a strange mind...lol.
This is lovely and a wonderful entry into this contest.
Thanks for sharing.
Always,
Missy
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from lancellot
Very well crafted, and presented. Good choice of a cliché. I remember this one from the old days. Good way of describing it in a new form. Well done.
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Very well crafted, and presented. Good choice of a cliché. I remember this one from the old days. Good way of describing it in a new form. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from Pantygynt
The moss gross on the stone in the river. The current rolls the stone and the moss is torn away so the cliche holds. Then stationary in the sand no moss grows but not because the stone is rolling but because nothing can grow on a stone in the sand. Thde cliche is rubbish, well almost. You have debunked it in a fine poem with lovely use of language.
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The moss gross on the stone in the river. The current rolls the stone and the moss is torn away so the cliche holds. Then stationary in the sand no moss grows but not because the stone is rolling but because nothing can grow on a stone in the sand. Thde cliche is rubbish, well almost. You have debunked it in a fine poem with lovely use of language.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from RYME4U
Excellent free verse poem. Good choice of cliche', You have explained the meaning in a philosophical way. I enjoyed reading this poem and seeing things from your point of vgiew
Great job
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Excellent free verse poem. Good choice of cliche', You have explained the meaning in a philosophical way. I enjoyed reading this poem and seeing things from your point of vgiew
Great job
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from Nosha17
Some would call it having the wanderlust, can't stay too long in one place, life is carefree. Good use of metaphorical language, imagery and well chosen words. Good luck in the contest. faye
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Some would call it having the wanderlust, can't stay too long in one place, life is carefree. Good use of metaphorical language, imagery and well chosen words. Good luck in the contest. faye
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
Oh my. I could not come up with an approach for this interesting prompt. What an amazing piece this is. So thought provoking with imagery that explodes off the page. A certain winner. Thank you for the ride!!
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Oh my. I could not come up with an approach for this interesting prompt. What an amazing piece this is. So thought provoking with imagery that explodes off the page. A certain winner. Thank you for the ride!!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from ellie6
A great, deep thinking poem. it expresses exactly the conflict of a rolling stone - the need to be alone fighting with the need for roots and companionship.
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A great, deep thinking poem. it expresses exactly the conflict of a rolling stone - the need to be alone fighting with the need for roots and companionship.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015