Desire
Woman in heat24 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
No apologies needed, Steve. Besides, the ADULT WARNING should be an adequate enough roadblock to steer away anyone who finds erotic writings inappropriate or offensive. If they open it to read it, the blame falls squarely on their shoulders, not yours.
It's definitely well rhymed and adequately ...descriptive...ahem.
Now, if you'll excuse me, I have a cold shower calling my name.
Is it hot in here, or is it just me? Heh-heh-heh...
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean ;)
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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No apologies needed, Steve. Besides, the ADULT WARNING should be an adequate enough roadblock to steer away anyone who finds erotic writings inappropriate or offensive. If they open it to read it, the blame falls squarely on their shoulders, not yours.
It's definitely well rhymed and adequately ...descriptive...ahem.
Now, if you'll excuse me, I have a cold shower calling my name.
Is it hot in here, or is it just me? Heh-heh-heh...
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean ;)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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LOL! You are too funny my friend. I was not sure I could craft such a piece (No pun intended lol) but found it to be a delight!
God bless my friend!
Steve
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My pleasure, Steve. :)
~Dean
Comment from OLA THOMAS
There's no need of apology...just a contest entry...just fun. You were instructed to make it hot but you made it hotter...Lol! A very good capture of the mood. Nicely done.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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There's no need of apology...just a contest entry...just fun. You were instructed to make it hot but you made it hotter...Lol! A very good capture of the mood. Nicely done.
ola thomas
Comment Written 18-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Thank you Ola Thomas for this most excellent of reviews my friend.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from ravenblack
Now that is what I call breakfast in bed- scrambled eggs and sausage lol. Down south they both have masterbated- and will have grins on their faces as they sleepwalk through their day. Good entry and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Now that is what I call breakfast in bed- scrambled eggs and sausage lol. Down south they both have masterbated- and will have grins on their faces as they sleepwalk through their day. Good entry and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Lol! I love all the reviews I have received with this piece (no pun intended).
Thank you for the excellent review my friend.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from seaglass
This erotic poem has skillful rhyme and smooth meter. I wonder if it was inspired bey the picture. Hopefully there is pre-consent or she might be charged with taking advantage.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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This erotic poem has skillful rhyme and smooth meter. I wonder if it was inspired bey the picture. Hopefully there is pre-consent or she might be charged with taking advantage.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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LOL! No, I crafted this piece (no pun intended) and then searched for the right pic lol!
It was certainly fun stepping outside my genre and crafting a piece I was not necessarily comfortable doing.
Thank you for the awesome review my friend.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from rjuselius
Hahaha. Lol. This is an entertaining piece of poetry dear friend! It's passionate and lustful and yet it has a subtle humor to it and is written tongue firmly placed on cheek.
Nice one!
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Good luck!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Hahaha. Lol. This is an entertaining piece of poetry dear friend! It's passionate and lustful and yet it has a subtle humor to it and is written tongue firmly placed on cheek.
Nice one!
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Good luck!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Thank you Rebekka for this incredibly entertaining response! I have thoroughly enjoyed the reviews I have been receiving over this one!
God bless!
Steve
Comment from scd41
Why should you apologize? The writing prompt wanted it as hot as the poet could make. Your poem should have got deservingly more votes. I too participated. Though I narrated a lustful scene, I went about beating about the bush while readers wanted it direct. Some photos were just porn. Fanstorians are matured and they like it straight. So let us enjoy.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Why should you apologize? The writing prompt wanted it as hot as the poet could make. Your poem should have got deservingly more votes. I too participated. Though I narrated a lustful scene, I went about beating about the bush while readers wanted it direct. Some photos were just porn. Fanstorians are matured and they like it straight. So let us enjoy.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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I agree Scd41, but I have been butchered over a couple of my macabre pieces in the past for even a hint of sexuality lol! I would have certainly won this if every review I received would have voted lol! I absolutely loved all the reviews with this piece and may have to do this again.
Thank you again and God bless my friend.
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
A stronger ending suggestion:
"Her fountain gushed as he ejaculated."
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This is very well written with a good rhyming scheme. There is a smooth flow of words with very good imagery. Wishing you the best of luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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A stronger ending suggestion:
"Her fountain gushed as he ejaculated."
****
This is very well written with a good rhyming scheme. There is a smooth flow of words with very good imagery. Wishing you the best of luck in your contest.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Very nice! I enjoyed crafting this piece in a relatively short period of time. I have thoroughly enjoyed the reviews this piece has brought forth as well.
God bless C lucas and thank you for this wonderful review.
Steve
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You're welcome, Neo. Charlie
Comment from pickmeplease
Laughed out loud...definitely was not expecting your ending...but I was amused.
Love that she was the instigator. Great descriptions, vivid images. I thought the title was perfect and the photo only added to complete the story. Thanks...good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015
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Laughed out loud...definitely was not expecting your ending...but I was amused.
Love that she was the instigator. Great descriptions, vivid images. I thought the title was perfect and the photo only added to complete the story. Thanks...good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015
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Thank you pickmeplease for this most exceptional of reviews. I love these six star ratings my friend.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from Louise Michelle
Excuse me, Steve, while I go take a cold shower, LOL.
What a terrific entry with this writing prompt. You grabbed my attention from the get go and held it throughout. Naturally!
I've been wearing a Cheshire grin and that last sentence really cracked me up. Good writing.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015
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Excuse me, Steve, while I go take a cold shower, LOL.
What a terrific entry with this writing prompt. You grabbed my attention from the get go and held it throughout. Naturally!
I've been wearing a Cheshire grin and that last sentence really cracked me up. Good writing.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 16-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015
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LOL! You are too funny Lou! I certainly appreciate the excellent review my friend. I would love nothing more than to spend the rest of my days sitting at my desk with a cup of coffee and my imagination lol!
God bless!
Steve
Comment from BeasPeas
An interesting and well written poem with good rhyming. Playful in nature (pardon the pun). Many good lines. A good entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015
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An interesting and well written poem with good rhyming. Playful in nature (pardon the pun). Many good lines. A good entry for the contest.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review my friend. I had fun crafting this piece (no pun intended lol.)
God bless!
steve