Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Good Morning, Poet,

I enjoyed reading your haiku this morning. I've always been amazed by rainbows cast by waterfalls and prisms.

You've done well with capturing a moment in time by juxtapositioning two concrete images--sunlit waterfall and rainbows.

If I had any suggestions it would be to tighten up lines 2 and 3. In line 2, you're using two articles which often times can be avoided in haiku. For example, 'casts showers of rainbows'
Also, I realize what you're trying to achieve in the satori, but I think it is too verbose. 'Soaks me in colors' seem more of a statement than an ah-ha moment. I think with some tweaking you would be able to strengthen the ah-ha.

Best of luck to you in the contest.
Ray

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015

Thanks for the helpful advice. I agree with you and will give it a little tweak, cheers

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, judester, I love the imagery that this presents, beautiful words, a mountain of images that can be presented, good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks for the review, we both wrote about waterfalls for this.one. There is a wonderful swimming hole in Vermont and I can spend hours there under the mini rainbows. Cheers j

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a correct line and syllable count. You render delightful imagery with your well chosen syllables. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks for the kind review Mystic Angel. There is a swimming hole in Vermont and I can spend hours under that waterfall. cheers j

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Your imagery is beautiful. The syllable count for this piece is perfect. I feel like all the rules were followed for the contest and that this piece will certainly leave people awash in color and seeing rainbows. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015

Thanks for the encouraging review Dovey. I just love the spray from waterfalls, cheers

Comment from emkoutny

Excellent

I liked the visual images used in this haiku, especially the middle one about the shower of rainbows. Very lovely and cheerful. Godlike in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015

Thanks for the insightful review, I just love the spray from waterfalls, cheers