His Voice
The sound of a voice can disturb to the core33 total reviews
Comment from fimarie78
This certainly gave me the shivers. Your image prepared us well for what lay ahead. I liked the phrase 'too soon' in the 2nd stanza and the way that the 4th stanza is all about 'him'. The premise reminded me of 'the phantom of the opera'. Good luck in the contest. Fiona
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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This certainly gave me the shivers. Your image prepared us well for what lay ahead. I liked the phrase 'too soon' in the 2nd stanza and the way that the 4th stanza is all about 'him'. The premise reminded me of 'the phantom of the opera'. Good luck in the contest. Fiona
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for your words of encouragement! Blessings!
Comment from cbat
Frightening, eerily and chilling.
This poem sends chills down my spine.
For anyone that has been trapped in a bad relationship it rings true.
Keep up writing!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Frightening, eerily and chilling.
This poem sends chills down my spine.
For anyone that has been trapped in a bad relationship it rings true.
Keep up writing!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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I sure appreciate your comments and the feelings you mentioned. Happy me! Thanks again.
Comment from Ben Colder
I believe you made it to the winning circle with this one. I find no fault. The rhyming couplets are right on. Thanks fro sharing. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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I believe you made it to the winning circle with this one. I find no fault. The rhyming couplets are right on. Thanks fro sharing. Best wishes.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Dear Ben, I always APPRECIATE YOUR COMMENTS! Thanks for reading it!
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Hello poet friend, I enjoyed your poem about the ghost, very entertaining and captivating. It should do well in the contest, my best to you.
Loyd
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hello poet friend, I enjoyed your poem about the ghost, very entertaining and captivating. It should do well in the contest, my best to you.
Loyd
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thank you so very much, Loyd...Your words meant a lot....
Comment from Muffins
The haunting of this woman is cruel and obscene. No matter what form, human, ghost, vampire or werewolf, a woman is disturbed by any man with this type of presence:
His voice comes haunting me this night,
my shaking body; chilled.
He promises he'll come for me-
his ghostly threat fulfilled.
The word threat stands out. It tells the reader this woman does not welcome this thing into her life. It invaded her life with permission. A haunting, beautiful poem with a great abcd format.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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The haunting of this woman is cruel and obscene. No matter what form, human, ghost, vampire or werewolf, a woman is disturbed by any man with this type of presence:
His voice comes haunting me this night,
my shaking body; chilled.
He promises he'll come for me-
his ghostly threat fulfilled.
The word threat stands out. It tells the reader this woman does not welcome this thing into her life. It invaded her life with permission. A haunting, beautiful poem with a great abcd format.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Dear Muffins, this arose from a very real series of nightmares I had years ago. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow, Lois. This was truly chilling in its context, and the imagery you've created here sent a shiver or two up & down my spine.
This was simply excellent ghost story telling in rhyme. No two-ways about it!
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest. ~Dean
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Wow, Lois. This was truly chilling in its context, and the imagery you've created here sent a shiver or two up & down my spine.
This was simply excellent ghost story telling in rhyme. No two-ways about it!
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest. ~Dean
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Dear Dean, I just wanted to tell you AGAIN what your comments meant to me...Truly, what you said....a man whose writing I SO ADMIRE, meant volumes....Thanks, friend, Lois
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You are more than welcome, Lois, my friend. The pleasure was all mine. :)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi LoannaLois - a good ghost story telling how just a voice can put the fear of death into you. Written in good abcb rhyme form it is a chilling story of a ghostly voice. Just a voice and nothing more, but this can be more frightening than a hoard of ghouls. Your last line sounds ominous 'His voice, the death of me' - a good ending. Perfect picture - no face just a misted image. Very good. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hi LoannaLois - a good ghost story telling how just a voice can put the fear of death into you. Written in good abcb rhyme form it is a chilling story of a ghostly voice. Just a voice and nothing more, but this can be more frightening than a hoard of ghouls. Your last line sounds ominous 'His voice, the death of me' - a good ending. Perfect picture - no face just a misted image. Very good. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hi there, Dorothy, one of my favorite people...I loved what you said and am so glad you read it. Thank you!
Comment from ravenblack
You truly did make the voice the scariest part of a haunting. You can also take this poem as about one who obsessively grieves, taking the passing of a loved one to the next level, one that is far from pleasant. Excellent poem and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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You truly did make the voice the scariest part of a haunting. You can also take this poem as about one who obsessively grieves, taking the passing of a loved one to the next level, one that is far from pleasant. Excellent poem and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hello Ravenblack, I always appreciate your comments so much . I also respect your writing and the insight you have for others.
Comment from c_lucas
As a general rule, Ghosts will do you no harm. Demons are another matter all together. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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As a general rule, Ghosts will do you no harm. Demons are another matter all together. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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You have identified the matter so well. This stemmed from actual reoccuring nightmares I experienced years ago. Thank you!
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You're welcome, Lois. Charlie
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You have identified the matter so well. This stemmed from actual reoccuring nightmares I experienced years ago. Thank you!
Comment from Helena Frances
Yikes! This might keep me awake tonight! It drew me in, and kept me.
well written, and definitely meets the requirements.
Good luck
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Yikes! This might keep me awake tonight! It drew me in, and kept me.
well written, and definitely meets the requirements.
Good luck
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thank you so very much for your insightful comments. I appreciate your writing.
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Thank you so very much for your insightful comments. I appreciate your writing.