Clippings
Free verse contest entry 160 words17 total reviews
Comment from Texasbay
a beautifully penned piece, heartwarming in thought with a hint of heartache presented in several references " school girl scissors " , no stapler only glue and long hours alone ... a brothers guilt? Love how it leaves us with unanswered questions ... and wanting more. Bay
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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a beautifully penned piece, heartwarming in thought with a hint of heartache presented in several references " school girl scissors " , no stapler only glue and long hours alone ... a brothers guilt? Love how it leaves us with unanswered questions ... and wanting more. Bay
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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This is a wonderful surprise on a cold afternoon. Thank you so much for looking this one up. I am delighted you enjoyed it and I appreciate your thoughtful comments. Rod
Comment from Tatarka2
Ah, this is so lovely, and so bittersweet. The reader can feel your love for your sister, and your patience with her. You have portrayed this delicate relationship so well in just a few well=chosen words. Thank you for sharing this piece of yourself. It is lovely.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Ah, this is so lovely, and so bittersweet. The reader can feel your love for your sister, and your patience with her. You have portrayed this delicate relationship so well in just a few well=chosen words. Thank you for sharing this piece of yourself. It is lovely.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Thank you for your very understanding review and kind praise. Rod
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a good free verse, portraying the frustration of receiving those envelopes chock full of clippings from your sister. I like the way the frustration turns to your love for her before you throw them all away. The free verse form is well done and interesting. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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This is a good free verse, portraying the frustration of receiving those envelopes chock full of clippings from your sister. I like the way the frustration turns to your love for her before you throw them all away. The free verse form is well done and interesting. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Jeanie, for sharing and your very kind praise. Rod
Comment from Connie C
What a lovely free verse poem this is as you reflect on your sister
and her habit of clipping articles and ads and then sending them to
you. I love how you end your poem by not tossing the clippings but
reading them again and thinking about your sister sitting there cutting
them out and how you love her. Very nice!
Connie
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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What a lovely free verse poem this is as you reflect on your sister
and her habit of clipping articles and ads and then sending them to
you. I love how you end your poem by not tossing the clippings but
reading them again and thinking about your sister sitting there cutting
them out and how you love her. Very nice!
Connie
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Connie, for sharing my poem and understanding what I am trying to say. Rod
Comment from adewpearl
great use of enjambment
my mother-in-law used to send me loads of clippings, but I knew their purpose - they were all on child/baby rearing stuff to prove what I was doing was wrong LOL
clipping keeps her company - great alliteration throughout
great description of your sister looking for and clipping the articles she mails
love your closing and the emotion you obviously feel for your sister and she for you :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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great use of enjambment
my mother-in-law used to send me loads of clippings, but I knew their purpose - they were all on child/baby rearing stuff to prove what I was doing was wrong LOL
clipping keeps her company - great alliteration throughout
great description of your sister looking for and clipping the articles she mails
love your closing and the emotion you obviously feel for your sister and she for you :-) Brooke
Comment Written 15-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Brooke, for this lovely review and your thoughtful comments. My father used to send me clippings about babies when my wife and I were first married. He desperately wanted to be a grandfather and we made him wait 10 years. Rod
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my mother-in-law's clippings were not sent in a loving spirit - she is why I work so hard to be the kind of mother-in-law my children's spouses actually like LOL
Comment from Jackarrie
This is a lovely free verse poem for the contest. I can just see your sister enjoying her love of cutting out scraps that mean something to her. She shares them with her beloved brother. Yes, I believe he loves her very much.
Well written
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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This is a lovely free verse poem for the contest. I can just see your sister enjoying her love of cutting out scraps that mean something to her. She shares them with her beloved brother. Yes, I believe he loves her very much.
Well written
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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Thank you for sharing my poem. Your positive interpretation is truly appreciated. Rod
Comment from krys123
RodG; Anyway I found your poem to be inspirational and enlightening especially to have a special relative, sister, as you have. Taking your time to sniffing cut and even paste endless articles that are relative to her relationship with you. You're very intricate in your imagery that was very demonstratively descriptive and expertly expressive throughout the writing. Some alliteration for use like "speaking softly" that will work of a a soft euphony sound. I enjoyed this writing because I was like your sister and took my time To send my brother's clippings of the happenings around here where I live now and I still do it today especially when I live in the golf capital of the world near Pebble Beach and Spyglass. Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend. Good luck in the contest also.
Alex
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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RodG; Anyway I found your poem to be inspirational and enlightening especially to have a special relative, sister, as you have. Taking your time to sniffing cut and even paste endless articles that are relative to her relationship with you. You're very intricate in your imagery that was very demonstratively descriptive and expertly expressive throughout the writing. Some alliteration for use like "speaking softly" that will work of a a soft euphony sound. I enjoyed this writing because I was like your sister and took my time To send my brother's clippings of the happenings around here where I live now and I still do it today especially when I live in the golf capital of the world near Pebble Beach and Spyglass. Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend. Good luck in the contest also.
Alex
Comment Written 15-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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Thank you for shaing my poem, Alex. I am delighted you can relate to my sister's efforts to communicate and truly appreciate your kind praise. Rod
Comment from acerisestory
I had to read your free verse several times to get the meaning of your words, Rod. Once I understood, I was moved by your message. I don't know of anyone who is addicted (not sure that's the right word) to this type of activity, but I understand. And your understanding is even more important.
Your poem is well written and tells the story well without using punctuation or capitalization. Your use of alliteration with sister/stuffed; times/told; clippings/company, toss/trash, etc., promotes the flow of your words.
This is a fine entry for the contest. Best of luck! Alana
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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I had to read your free verse several times to get the meaning of your words, Rod. Once I understood, I was moved by your message. I don't know of anyone who is addicted (not sure that's the right word) to this type of activity, but I understand. And your understanding is even more important.
Your poem is well written and tells the story well without using punctuation or capitalization. Your use of alliteration with sister/stuffed; times/told; clippings/company, toss/trash, etc., promotes the flow of your words.
This is a fine entry for the contest. Best of luck! Alana
Comment Written 15-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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I am very pleased that all the time you took to interpret my poem proved worthwhile, Alana. Thank you for your kind feedback. Rod
Comment from Debbie Noland
A poignant piece. The sister's act of clipping gives her life purpose and creates a lifeline of communication to her brother. The brother is reluctant to realize, but ultimately must, that this is also a connection to his sister that he cannot easily dismiss. A good portrayal of a unique sibling relationship that makes the reader ponder numerous possibilities regarding the source of it.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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A poignant piece. The sister's act of clipping gives her life purpose and creates a lifeline of communication to her brother. The brother is reluctant to realize, but ultimately must, that this is also a connection to his sister that he cannot easily dismiss. A good portrayal of a unique sibling relationship that makes the reader ponder numerous possibilities regarding the source of it.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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What a beautiful interpretation of my poem, Debbie! Thank you so much for sharing. Rod
Comment from pattipac
You have managed to pen an imprint on our minds of what it means to love our siblings, my friend. Good luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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You have managed to pen an imprint on our minds of what it means to love our siblings, my friend. Good luck in this contest.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much, pattipac, for your gracious praise and wealth of stars. I truly appreciate both. Rod