Comment from lakeport

Excellent

Whale's teeth have rings, indeed that is interesting, that's a very nice expressed poem. Thanks for sharing it, God bless you.Hugs!lakeport,

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014

Thanks lakeport, it was fun to research and write. :-) Carolyn

reply by lakeport on 28-Aug-2014

your welcome.Hugs!lakeport.

Comment from Rosalyne

Excellent

Hi, Carolyn.
This is a great poem and well penned. I really like your comparison to the trees rings, a way of counting age. Very clever. Best of luck in the contest!
Bye
Rosalyne :)

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thanks so much Rosalyne for the wonderful review. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Titan Black

Excellent

Yes, I think you took it there. You
put this Haiku in perfect formation.
You poetic alliteration was on point.
Keep writing.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thank you for this affirming review and generous rating. :-) Carolyn

reply by Titan Black on 25-Aug-2014

No problem. And don't forget to stop by my page, and check out some of my poetry. And if you like what you read, click on that "Fan" button. For, this is all about the networking.
So, stay connected.

Comment from kintesiegel

Excellent

this is a bit hard to read because the title sits inside the poem with it. Everybody seems to really like your poem though.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014

Hi there and thank you. Haiku poetry must have the title by the form. I agree with you that's a little strange. So glad you stopped by . :-) Carolyn

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

I read this then had to go to the dictionary to look up deciduous (dumbo that I am)!

Nicely done. I never knew that of the rings on whales teeth. Learn something every day. Well actually two things, that fact and deciduous definition.

Good luck in the contest, Johnny

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014

I went to the Internet and the dictionary before I wrote. LOL just to make sure. BTW: I was disqualified as I had the short line in the wrong place. :-) It was fun to write anyway. So glad you liked it John.
Love, Carolyn

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Clever, intelligent poem.
You've really given the prompt true attention and chosen a very original idea.
The execution is terrific. The first two lines make you didg into science knowledge (basic) but set up an interesting natural comparison.
The satori line complete the first thought with a quirky, but plausible image.
Best of luck in teh contest.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014

Thanks mfowler, for this wonderful review, I'm so glad you found it educational and interesting. It was fun to write, :-) Carolyn

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

Carolyn, this contest entry has the under 17 syllables approach with 3 lines that fall into the parameter's of haikus with no rhyme and deals with nature. The title is right with the haiku and the first line in parenthesis, no capitols, but the author name is not normally in the title and no quote marks or identification of the poem-contest entry. I like the pun on deciduous. Might want to check with FS on rules. :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014

Hi there my friend, I was disqualified before the voting began, because it was suppose to be a 13 syllable haiku and short, long, short. I, also, according to the creator of the contest, had 14 syllables instead of 13. My reviewers affirmed the count. But evidently I counted wrong. I have a wonderful reward, in that most readers, did not know that this large mammals age can be counted by the rings in their teeth, just like the trees are measured by their rings. Thanks for reading and the astute review. Love, Carolyn

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

This is the first poem I have read about the teeth of the whale. Excellent poetic form that creates a picture of nature and explains that the teeth will fall out.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014

Thanks for the wonderful review. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Both deciduous...excellent finishing touch...and...a highly informative haiku...I never knew whales teeth had rings! I love reading the poems I actually learn from! Blessings, and good luck! ....Judy

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014

Glad you enjoyed this one Judy, thanks for the review and awesome rating.. :-) Carolyn

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

I like the line count age like trees as it is a great use of descriptive words to create the imagery. The syllable count is correct. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014

Thanks for this great review and affirmation. :-) Carolyn