The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "Power walk"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
16 total reviews
Comment from Righteous Riter
stride
if you can't walk with pride
ride
This piece meets the criteria of the prompt as the syllable count is correct. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with walk/with. Clear message that is short and simple.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
stride
if you can't walk with pride
ride
This piece meets the criteria of the prompt as the syllable count is correct. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with walk/with. Clear message that is short and simple.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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I am glad you enjoyed this short piece and that you found it correctly written, your opinion means a lot to me, :-) Carolyn
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. You can tell an animals nature by the way they walk. Rabbits scurry every where they go. They are timid. The cheetah strides through the jungle. It still has fights. But it warns the other animals of it's power by the way it walks. Many will not even challenge him. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
I love the picture. I love the poem. You can tell an animals nature by the way they walk. Rabbits scurry every where they go. They are timid. The cheetah strides through the jungle. It still has fights. But it warns the other animals of it's power by the way it walks. Many will not even challenge him. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thanks, I didn't win but I received wonderful reviews and comments such as yours. That means so much to me. :-) Carolyn
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We need more voters.
Comment from Just Alyx
I bet those in wheelchairs loved this one as a cool declaration of never losing self-confidence in each their own story. This is even better than a message in a bottle. That cat's also an excellent emblem for endurance and improvising, so good entry, and with or without the pic. Much luck in the booth, poet-author. Perfect title.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
I bet those in wheelchairs loved this one as a cool declaration of never losing self-confidence in each their own story. This is even better than a message in a bottle. That cat's also an excellent emblem for endurance and improvising, so good entry, and with or without the pic. Much luck in the booth, poet-author. Perfect title.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you for this incredible review. I am delighted you enjoyed Power walk
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I'm sorry, I did reply to you earlier but it got lost in the road works somewhere. You're welcome; it was a refreshing approach :)
Comment from BeasPeas
An original thought and how true. Stride with pride or ride. Beautiful image. Your piece isn't contrived. Interesting for the reader.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
An original thought and how true. Stride with pride or ride. Beautiful image. Your piece isn't contrived. Interesting for the reader.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Glad you liked it and thanks for the review.
Comment from Orphan33
Nice 1-6-1. Great words which lead to a simple message. Good luck in the contest and in all of your writing adventures.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
Nice 1-6-1. Great words which lead to a simple message. Good luck in the contest and in all of your writing adventures.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much for this great review.
Comment from Harborvu
Pretty much sums up sage advice for anyone who needs to improve their air of confidence. "Ride" is ambiguous of course, as expected of such a short poem, but I envision the person who cannot show pride being relegated to the bus!
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
Pretty much sums up sage advice for anyone who needs to improve their air of confidence. "Ride" is ambiguous of course, as expected of such a short poem, but I envision the person who cannot show pride being relegated to the bus!
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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what a neat review you have left me for this one. Thank you
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
well done
your 1-6-1 rhyme conforms to the rules
your words tell the picture if one can't walk with pride then ride
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
good luck in the contest
well done
your 1-6-1 rhyme conforms to the rules
your words tell the picture if one can't walk with pride then ride
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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I appreciate your wonderful comments.
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welcome..SC
Comment from jmdg1954
Stride
If you can't walk with pride
Ride
Pretty cool photo. Word selection and poem details are perfect for the photo. It's difficult to review these type of contest entries...
Good luck in the contest... John
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
Stride
If you can't walk with pride
Ride
Pretty cool photo. Word selection and poem details are perfect for the photo. It's difficult to review these type of contest entries...
Good luck in the contest... John
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Hi John, there isn't much to review for this type of contest entry, as you said. But I am so happy you read and commented so positively on Power Walk. :-)
Comment from adewpearl
Good pairing of photo and poem, which is in excellent 1/6/1 syllable form
The three lines all end in a strong rhyme, as required by the contest
good action verb choices in delivering this advice
Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
Good pairing of photo and poem, which is in excellent 1/6/1 syllable form
The three lines all end in a strong rhyme, as required by the contest
good action verb choices in delivering this advice
Brooke
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thanks Brooke for this wonderful review, :-)
Comment from GracieAnn
This Rhyme That 1-6-1 writing prompt entry fulfills the elements of the contest with all three lines ending in rhyme, and it maintains the proper syllable count. It has a sensible meaning, as well. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
This Rhyme That 1-6-1 writing prompt entry fulfills the elements of the contest with all three lines ending in rhyme, and it maintains the proper syllable count. It has a sensible meaning, as well. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thanks GracieAnn for the review and good wishes. :-)