Wee Willie Chill
a poem for children & the young at heart15 total reviews
Comment from krowboom
Wee willie winkle wee willie wee
This was a strange lad for all to see
He was cold he was bold but mainly he was cold
A rhyming time was fine at nine
but tricks at six make me sick.
Rod as always my vote you got
Though my fingers and toes are wont to rot
To give a ribbon you richly deserve
If only you knew how to serve
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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Wee willie winkle wee willie wee
This was a strange lad for all to see
He was cold he was bold but mainly he was cold
A rhyming time was fine at nine
but tricks at six make me sick.
Rod as always my vote you got
Though my fingers and toes are wont to rot
To give a ribbon you richly deserve
If only you knew how to serve
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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Thank you. RodG
Comment from MarjorieAnne
These stanzas stimulate imagination and empathy using creative characterization, rhyme and hyperbole. Meter and line length varies between some lines and stanzas. "Wee Willie" is reminiscent of "Wee Willie Winkie". Maybe something like Little Bill Chill would a possibility?
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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These stanzas stimulate imagination and empathy using creative characterization, rhyme and hyperbole. Meter and line length varies between some lines and stanzas. "Wee Willie" is reminiscent of "Wee Willie Winkie". Maybe something like Little Bill Chill would a possibility?
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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I had totally forgotten about that nursery rhyme, MarjorieAnne, and will definitely get my thinking cap on to think of a new name. I am delighted you enjoyed the character and the techniques used to give him life. Thank you for sharing.
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You're welcome
Comment from royowen
A clever little tale about a small who shouldn't live in a cold climate. Great little romp that bops along from beginning to end. Sound rhyme and rhythm maintain its integrity. Good for reading to children publicly! Blessing.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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A clever little tale about a small who shouldn't live in a cold climate. Great little romp that bops along from beginning to end. Sound rhyme and rhythm maintain its integrity. Good for reading to children publicly! Blessing.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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I am delighted you enjoyed the poem and am especially pleased you think it is suited for children. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Leineco
Wee Willie Chill is always cold
no matter where he goes.
Although he wears a ton of clothes,
he shivers head to toes.
Love this stanza. . . adorable :-)
Great kids poem, it flows in that musical way kids love to memorize :-)
Nice job - good luck in the contest :-)
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Wee Willie Chill is always cold
no matter where he goes.
Although he wears a ton of clothes,
he shivers head to toes.
Love this stanza. . . adorable :-)
Great kids poem, it flows in that musical way kids love to memorize :-)
Nice job - good luck in the contest :-)
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Leineco. I am delighted you enjoyed the poem and appreciate the well wishes.
Comment from Charlene0513
A descriptive and interesting look at the guy they call, Jack Frost. You brought to the table very valid reasons why winter is not the place for his abode.
Very good rhythm and flow, therefore making for an easy read.
Nice simile:
His skin looks like it's made of ice,
Charlene
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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A descriptive and interesting look at the guy they call, Jack Frost. You brought to the table very valid reasons why winter is not the place for his abode.
Very good rhythm and flow, therefore making for an easy read.
Nice simile:
His skin looks like it's made of ice,
Charlene
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Charlene, for your very thoughtful review. I am delighted you enjoyed the story.
Comment from rouskin
Attractive artwork, enjoyable read and strong message:Although he may seem strange to you because of how he's dressed,please be kind and welcome him as visitor or guest Best of luck in the contest Well done
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Attractive artwork, enjoyable read and strong message:Although he may seem strange to you because of how he's dressed,please be kind and welcome him as visitor or guest Best of luck in the contest Well done
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you for your kind praise and encouragement.
Comment from Jane Marie
I really enjoyed reading your entry and know my children would love it too.
The use of rhyming words in children's poetry is very important in capturing their attention, imagination and mesmerizing them with the short story your marvelous poems tells.
The use of a cute cartoon like picture illustrates the character in your poem extremely well and I think you will find anyone who reads this piece will like it as well.
Overall great use of the English language and an appropriate length for children that they aren't expected to listen or read for too long and lose interest.
Very well done.
Jane Marie
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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I really enjoyed reading your entry and know my children would love it too.
The use of rhyming words in children's poetry is very important in capturing their attention, imagination and mesmerizing them with the short story your marvelous poems tells.
The use of a cute cartoon like picture illustrates the character in your poem extremely well and I think you will find anyone who reads this piece will like it as well.
Overall great use of the English language and an appropriate length for children that they aren't expected to listen or read for too long and lose interest.
Very well done.
Jane Marie
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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It sounds like you are very familiar with various age groups and what they like to read. I am delighted you think this poem would appeal to many children. You are so right about age-appropriate language. I am used to writing for teenagers, so this poem was very challenging. Thank you so much for your wonderful review.
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You are most welcome. I am a mother of four children aged 6,7,9 and 13 with a baby on the way but have also worked over 15 years with children aged from 6 weeks to 13 years in child care, kindy, outside school hours care, vacation care and babysitting too... I have qualifications in children's services but the best education I've had is from the school of life raising my children with my loving devoted husband.
Writing for children can be challenging however it is awesome to see how captivated and mesmerized they are listening reading and sharing literature... It is the one gift we can still give our future generations that technology cannot spoil.
Keep up the great work.
Jane Marie
Comment from mfowler
This is good children's poetry. It has a fun theme, lots of easily relatable images and concepts eg nose is Rudolph red; and a good bouncy rhythm built around alternating tetrameter and trimeter. I'm sur emy students would love it.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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This is good children's poetry. It has a fun theme, lots of easily relatable images and concepts eg nose is Rudolph red; and a good bouncy rhythm built around alternating tetrameter and trimeter. I'm sur emy students would love it.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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I am delighted you think this poem would appeal to your students. I usually write for teenagers, so this was a challenge, especially finding age-appropriate language. Thank you so much for your kind praise.
Comment from judester
A fun poem. Description is good and I like the little compassion lesson at the end. I will keep an eye out for this Wee Willie Chill and invite him in for hot chocolate, cheers Judester
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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A fun poem. Description is good and I like the little compassion lesson at the end. I will keep an eye out for this Wee Willie Chill and invite him in for hot chocolate, cheers Judester
Comment Written 16-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, judester, for your kind praise. I am especially pleased you like the ending which I had to rewrite because the original was sort of a downer.
Comment from seaglass
This is a nice rhyming poem introducing fun fantasy to children. As a child we believed jack Frost was a little elf, an elderly one. he carried a paint brush and painted the crystal ice swirls on the windows. Wee Willie Chill is a fun additional winter character.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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This is a nice rhyming poem introducing fun fantasy to children. As a child we believed jack Frost was a little elf, an elderly one. he carried a paint brush and painted the crystal ice swirls on the windows. Wee Willie Chill is a fun additional winter character.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, seaglass, for accepting my character as "real" in the world of children's lit. I had fun creating him for my three-year-old granddaughter.
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