My life for a Nickel
Sometimes the smallest things make the largest difference31 total reviews
Comment from EMB
It took me several readings before I realized that the narrator must be her husband. So it sounds like he'll live, now that he knows what's going on behind his back. :)
Cute but tragic.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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It took me several readings before I realized that the narrator must be her husband. So it sounds like he'll live, now that he knows what's going on behind his back. :)
Cute but tragic.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Welcome back. I see you've shortened your name. I can't wait to read what you have for 2014.
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Thank you! I've been really busy as of late, but I'm slowing trying to scratch my way back to the surface. Have a great weekend! :)
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Can't help but wonder if this is how his wife chose to wake him up. It'd be a brilliant way to send a message. Well done, lancellot. :) nancy
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Can't help but wonder if this is how his wife chose to wake him up. It'd be a brilliant way to send a message. Well done, lancellot. :) nancy
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, Nancy.
JW
Comment from mfowler
You have used the image to clever effect here. I like the concept of the letter and the plot you reveal with such a tiny word budget. Your final line about the five pennies is disturbing, and ironically funny, sort of.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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You have used the image to clever effect here. I like the concept of the letter and the plot you reveal with such a tiny word budget. Your final line about the five pennies is disturbing, and ironically funny, sort of.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Thank you. Yes, it was challenging contest. It gave me a chance to work on my art.
JW
Comment from BeasPeas
A good one! The start of a longer story here. Image enhances your short story. No wasted words, original, and entertaining. Held reader's interest.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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A good one! The start of a longer story here. Image enhances your short story. No wasted words, original, and entertaining. Held reader's interest.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much
Comment from Ebodean
You managed to paint a very vivid picture. In those few words I can see the back story and several possible outcomes. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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You managed to paint a very vivid picture. In those few words I can see the back story and several possible outcomes. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Janie King
Oh my this one presents a terrifying thought for sure for it seems as if there are plans to kill the husband. Good luck in the prompt. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Oh my this one presents a terrifying thought for sure for it seems as if there are plans to kill the husband. Good luck in the prompt. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from tmor3735
Short and sweet and wow, to think what you could have or would have done, or been able to do at the time is beyond me but you did get me thinking.for Such a short piece, nice work..Tom
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Short and sweet and wow, to think what you could have or would have done, or been able to do at the time is beyond me but you did get me thinking.for Such a short piece, nice work..Tom
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Princesseunice
First, that there, is a good illustration.
From the love stamp to the kiss.
I have had times too when what we term 'insignificant' saved me a great deal.
This is good.
Well written.
Clapping
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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First, that there, is a good illustration.
From the love stamp to the kiss.
I have had times too when what we term 'insignificant' saved me a great deal.
This is good.
Well written.
Clapping
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from in777wr#
I guess that would terrorize any husband or wife!. This short story was very well written. This story had the element of being shocking. This was an excellent story under 60 words. If I had a six star rating left you would get in. Outstanding job.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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I guess that would terrorize any husband or wife!. This short story was very well written. This story had the element of being shocking. This was an excellent story under 60 words. If I had a six star rating left you would get in. Outstanding job.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from victor 66
All of my life has been based on BDL (Blind Dumb Luck). Fortunately, this has never happened to me, but the day's not over. I don't know if you will win the contest, but you have my vote. Great story! Great presentation.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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All of my life has been based on BDL (Blind Dumb Luck). Fortunately, this has never happened to me, but the day's not over. I don't know if you will win the contest, but you have my vote. Great story! Great presentation.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, Victor. I really appreciate the great review and support. Wins aren't everything. Having people enjoy what you've written is its own reward. Thanks again.