The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Awareness"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
24 total reviews
Comment from Lise Deangelo
This is a beautiful poem and excellently-written. I am often out side in the dark at the moment because it's winter and it gets dark early. I love seeing everything in your poem. I love the background colour too. I love it when the nightsky is deep blue. Thanks so much for sharing :) Lise
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
This is a beautiful poem and excellently-written. I am often out side in the dark at the moment because it's winter and it gets dark early. I love seeing everything in your poem. I love the background colour too. I love it when the nightsky is deep blue. Thanks so much for sharing :) Lise
Comment Written 25-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
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And thank you for your wonderful comments. There is something about the night. :-) Carolyn
Comment from poetbear
Nice at.
I have done what you write about.
I try to appreciate things more evey single day.
Not carpe diem more like stop and smell the roses which is what you say so well.
Beautiful write.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
Nice at.
I have done what you write about.
I try to appreciate things more evey single day.
Not carpe diem more like stop and smell the roses which is what you say so well.
Beautiful write.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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I am happy you relate to this one. And thanks for another wonderful review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from kiwijenny
Yes I would creep out of my house at night and just gaze at the night . I love this poem and feel the empathy. I especially loved the last lines.
God bless thank you
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
Yes I would creep out of my house at night and just gaze at the night . I love this poem and feel the empathy. I especially loved the last lines.
God bless thank you
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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And thank you for such a great review. I am glad you liked it. Carolyn
Comment from MoonMuse
Very wonderful imagery so well described. Wonderful flow. It's a sweet longing that rings at the end when you're finally aware of what's missing in the 'almost perfect night'. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
Very wonderful imagery so well described. Wonderful flow. It's a sweet longing that rings at the end when you're finally aware of what's missing in the 'almost perfect night'. Very nice job.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
Thanks for such a nice review. Carolyn
Comment from adewpearl
nice alliteration in twilight transcends
lovely descriptive detail
our Maker's hand - add apostrophe for possessive
night bird's call - add apostrophe for possessive
good use of occasional rhyme
a beautifully romantic closing :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
nice alliteration in twilight transcends
lovely descriptive detail
our Maker's hand - add apostrophe for possessive
night bird's call - add apostrophe for possessive
good use of occasional rhyme
a beautifully romantic closing :-) Brooke
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you Brooke, for the wonderful review. As always appreciated. I will fix the edits. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Carolyn, I enjoyed this one - such great imagery and a dreamy feel as I read it. It had me slowing and pondering your lines and message - really lovely.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
Hi Carolyn, I enjoyed this one - such great imagery and a dreamy feel as I read it. It had me slowing and pondering your lines and message - really lovely.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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You are so welcome, It is great to see you on board. My prayer is that you are doing well. If this poem slowed you gave you pause to ponder, then I am pleased. Love, Carolyn
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the essence of the picture its beauty flows down to the heavens in the thread between your heart and soul you penned beautiful
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
from the essence of the picture its beauty flows down to the heavens in the thread between your heart and soul you penned beautiful
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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I appreciate such kind and wonderful words in your review. Thank you so much, Carolyn
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
A lovely write, Carolyn. I could feel myself out there looking at the stars with my arms feeling a slight chill. Excellent descriptions. I could envision it all so clearly. And such lovely images they are! I love how you ended it. Fave line ... "Shivers of delight create a slight chill". :)
Beautiful poem, Carolyn!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
A lovely write, Carolyn. I could feel myself out there looking at the stars with my arms feeling a slight chill. Excellent descriptions. I could envision it all so clearly. And such lovely images they are! I love how you ended it. Fave line ... "Shivers of delight create a slight chill". :)
Beautiful poem, Carolyn!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Thank you Connie, I am so pleased you enjoyed this one, and that you related to it. Carolyn
Comment from Spitfire
What I neat and original love poem. I was enjoying the beautiful sky and stars and moon, smelling the flowers, and hearing birds and frogs. Then... my tranquilitiy was aware - my man wasn't there. Sigh....
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
What I neat and original love poem. I was enjoying the beautiful sky and stars and moon, smelling the flowers, and hearing birds and frogs. Then... my tranquilitiy was aware - my man wasn't there. Sigh....
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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I am glad you enjoyed this one Shari. :-) Carolyn
Comment from lorijean
A beautifully written poem, very descriptive and full of emotion, a pleasure to read, and the artwork was perfect, thank you for sharing...
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
A beautifully written poem, very descriptive and full of emotion, a pleasure to read, and the artwork was perfect, thank you for sharing...
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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I am glad you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn