Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Clowns Wanted"A collection of my children's poems
17 total reviews
Comment from Charlene0513
This is a very well constructed and descriptive poem will lots of action and with good detail to the characters goings-on.
Good cadence and a nice flow to your quatrains.
Charlene
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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This is a very well constructed and descriptive poem will lots of action and with good detail to the characters goings-on.
Good cadence and a nice flow to your quatrains.
Charlene
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thanks, Charlene!
Steve
Comment from june prescott
Very fun read about the rowdy clowns waiting in line. I love the names you assigned them. I could picture the "key-stone cops" scene, when the rukus broke out. You rhyming scheme read much like Dr. Suesse. Nicely done. ~JP
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Very fun read about the rowdy clowns waiting in line. I love the names you assigned them. I could picture the "key-stone cops" scene, when the rukus broke out. You rhyming scheme read much like Dr. Suesse. Nicely done. ~JP
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thanks, June.
Steve
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My pleasure. :) Cheers, JP
Comment from Cornelius2000
Lots of fun imbedded in your clown poem. I loved the use of the various clown names, and the humorous lilt of the entire poem. And a clever ending....nice job.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Lots of fun imbedded in your clown poem. I loved the use of the various clown names, and the humorous lilt of the entire poem. And a clever ending....nice job.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from lorijean
A great poem it just jumps off the page and bounces along with fun and wit, a fun and pleasure to read, loved the artwork just perfect....
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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A great poem it just jumps off the page and bounces along with fun and wit, a fun and pleasure to read, loved the artwork just perfect....
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thanks, lj - yes, I tried to get the bouncy, fun effect.
Steve
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
What a rollicking and fun entry into this contest. I love the pace you set and the story you told. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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What a rollicking and fun entry into this contest. I love the pace you set and the story you told. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I don 't really like clowns much, but this was very cute and so well done. Very creative. I do wonder if there is an error in stanza 1 line 4 you have 'theur' should it be 'their'. Well done. Hope you do well in the contest. Rox
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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I don 't really like clowns much, but this was very cute and so well done. Very creative. I do wonder if there is an error in stanza 1 line 4 you have 'theur' should it be 'their'. Well done. Hope you do well in the contest. Rox
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Roxanna, thanks for the review and the spag alert.
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming couplets
typo in donned their red noses
good alliteration in Big Belly... and in many other lines
great detail throughout that makes for a very humorous scene
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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solid rhyming couplets
typo in donned their red noses
good alliteration in Big Belly... and in many other lines
great detail throughout that makes for a very humorous scene
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thanks, brooke.
Steve
Comment from BeasPeas
Well done, interesting, and clever. Rhyming is good, as well as the cadence. Progresses nicely. My favorite stanza is next to last--the trapeze stanza.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Well done, interesting, and clever. Rhyming is good, as well as the cadence. Progresses nicely. My favorite stanza is next to last--the trapeze stanza.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I love your fun, whimsical poem...
the words and rhyme flowing
perfectly, with a sing-song rhythm
throughout.
a most enjoyable read - a great contender for
the contest - good luck to you, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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I love your fun, whimsical poem...
the words and rhyme flowing
perfectly, with a sing-song rhythm
throughout.
a most enjoyable read - a great contender for
the contest - good luck to you, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you, Margaret - and yes, you backed the winner.
Steve
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Congratulations, Steve. M
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is funny. I think the clown names were hilarious. I would fix "somesault" to read "somersault" with an r before the second s. I would capitalize "Kalamazoo" as it is a place. Add quotation marks before "I've made a mistake! as that is the beginning of the complete statement. This poem would sound awesome read aloud; hope you get to perform it somewhere.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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This is funny. I think the clown names were hilarious. I would fix "somesault" to read "somersault" with an r before the second s. I would capitalize "Kalamazoo" as it is a place. Add quotation marks before "I've made a mistake! as that is the beginning of the complete statement. This poem would sound awesome read aloud; hope you get to perform it somewhere.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the review and the spag alerts - I finished this in a hurry to meet the deadline (and to keep my wife happy - I was keeping her awake!) - hence no proofreading.
Sneaked a win, though.
Steve