Christopher Colby
Spoilt kids aren't happy kids.22 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Oye-oye what a loud and obnoxious child with a dirty face, but so cute for such behaviors. And now I read the poem. Nice flow of rhytm and rhymes. Good narrative story in a poem too. Wonderful ending. Thank goodness. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Oye-oye what a loud and obnoxious child with a dirty face, but so cute for such behaviors. And now I read the poem. Nice flow of rhytm and rhymes. Good narrative story in a poem too. Wonderful ending. Thank goodness. Excellent work.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review. I enjoyed your comments.
Beth
Comment from rama devi
Good resolution in the closing! Well penned with fine flow and rhyming and some funny lines, too. A good presentation as well -- expressive picture! LOL
I can see why this might do well in the contest, as it is entertaining and witty and whimsical, too. Nice alliterative name.
Good luck
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Good resolution in the closing! Well penned with fine flow and rhyming and some funny lines, too. A good presentation as well -- expressive picture! LOL
I can see why this might do well in the contest, as it is entertaining and witty and whimsical, too. Nice alliterative name.
Good luck
Love,
rd
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I appreciate it.
Beth
Comment from Realist101
That picture! I was so surprised! And I don't surprise too easily! LOL! Beth, good job! Six stanzas where each rhymed to a 't', with great flow too. A story in a poem. The brat becomes a doll. Or close! :) I hope this wins for you! xoxo Susan
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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That picture! I was so surprised! And I don't surprise too easily! LOL! Beth, good job! Six stanzas where each rhymed to a 't', with great flow too. A story in a poem. The brat becomes a doll. Or close! :) I hope this wins for you! xoxo Susan
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Susan, Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments.
Yep, that picture surprised me too. I wasn't sure I should use it but I figured people might remember it. It is shocker.
Beth
Comment from jlsavell
Beth Shelby, there are so many great poems in this contest, but this one is excellent in its execution and rhythm as well as a great little story, best wishes with the contest... jlsavell
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Beth Shelby, there are so many great poems in this contest, but this one is excellent in its execution and rhythm as well as a great little story, best wishes with the contest... jlsavell
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I'm glad you like it.
Beth
Comment from Gloria ....
Beth this a wonderful entry into the contest. Your cadence is great and the rhymes perfect and I laughed out loud when he sat on his hat and called his aunt fat. Oh goodness me, I am still chuckling. The photograph of the young lad cockin' a snook at us, tops your write perfectly. You are so correct that children need boundaries, caring discipline and guidance.
All the best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Beth this a wonderful entry into the contest. Your cadence is great and the rhymes perfect and I laughed out loud when he sat on his hat and called his aunt fat. Oh goodness me, I am still chuckling. The photograph of the young lad cockin' a snook at us, tops your write perfectly. You are so correct that children need boundaries, caring discipline and guidance.
All the best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and wonderful commnets. I glad you found the humor there.
Beth
Comment from Charlene0513
A true testament how far a child will test your nerves and try to plant a feeling of guilt on the parent, but thankfully they wise up and say "It is my way or the highway"
(theoretically speaking)
Very good flow and an awesome picture ttttttttto express his character.
Charlene
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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A true testament how far a child will test your nerves and try to plant a feeling of guilt on the parent, but thankfully they wise up and say "It is my way or the highway"
(theoretically speaking)
Very good flow and an awesome picture ttttttttto express his character.
Charlene
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the review, Charlene. I enjoyed reading your comments.
Beth
Comment from missy98writer
Beth,
Your poem is wonderfully written with vivid imagery.
The art work you used of the little boy flipping the bird is priceless.
You used excellent rhyme and meter.
You used great alliteration.
You used very good metaphors.
I enjoyed your lines:
His parents declared that they'd had enough.
Maybe his problem, he'd had too much stuff
It was time for someone to call his bluff.
His dad decided he had to get tough.
If only more patents of spoiled kids would take charge of their bratty kids instead of spoiling and allowing their bad behavior.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your delightful poem to other reviewers.
Please have a nice day,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Beth,
Your poem is wonderfully written with vivid imagery.
The art work you used of the little boy flipping the bird is priceless.
You used excellent rhyme and meter.
You used great alliteration.
You used very good metaphors.
I enjoyed your lines:
His parents declared that they'd had enough.
Maybe his problem, he'd had too much stuff
It was time for someone to call his bluff.
His dad decided he had to get tough.
If only more patents of spoiled kids would take charge of their bratty kids instead of spoiling and allowing their bad behavior.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your delightful poem to other reviewers.
Please have a nice day,
Melissa.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you Melissa, I really appreciate the review and I enjoyed reading all your nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is very well done and has the right message, I think. I especially like that the parents wised up and fixed the problem, so it sets a good example for kids and parents both!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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This is very well done and has the right message, I think. I especially like that the parents wised up and fixed the problem, so it sets a good example for kids and parents both!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you Phyllis, I'm so glad you liked the message.
I appreciate you reading and commenting.
Beth
Comment from juliedickson55
Very clever, your bratty poem!
I think the image fits well.
The lines are humorous, and the rhymes are good.
I like it that you offered a solution with the dad teaching the boy to behave and cooperate.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Very clever, your bratty poem!
I think the image fits well.
The lines are humorous, and the rhymes are good.
I like it that you offered a solution with the dad teaching the boy to behave and cooperate.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much Julie, I appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth
Comment from marion
Hi Beth
This was an enjoyable read about a spoilt brat! That turned around with a bit of parental tough love. Wish all parents would toughen up a bit, even my brautiful nephews and nieces can be little brats now-a-days. Can't blame the child, one needs to look at the parent!!!! I enjoyed. Good presentation - neat pic! Good rhyme, I never missed a beat. Good Luck in the competition. Marion.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Hi Beth
This was an enjoyable read about a spoilt brat! That turned around with a bit of parental tough love. Wish all parents would toughen up a bit, even my brautiful nephews and nieces can be little brats now-a-days. Can't blame the child, one needs to look at the parent!!!! I enjoyed. Good presentation - neat pic! Good rhyme, I never missed a beat. Good Luck in the competition. Marion.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much Marion. I really appreciate the review. A reader just pointed out that treads and yens don't rhyme. I meant to write trends and yens. Sometimes my eyes don't pick up the errors
Beth