A Life Disrupted
The tragedy of Alzheimers62 total reviews
Comment from wilkswrites
WOW!!!! What a story told within a poem. It was extremely well-written, flowed very well. It painted a clear picture of the victim of the disease. It made me think of the main character in the movie, NOTEBOOK. I am very sorry that this happened to your brother. Sickness, aging, and dest are a part of life, but suck just the same. GREAT JOB!!!
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WOW!!!! What a story told within a poem. It was extremely well-written, flowed very well. It painted a clear picture of the victim of the disease. It made me think of the main character in the movie, NOTEBOOK. I am very sorry that this happened to your brother. Sickness, aging, and dest are a part of life, but suck just the same. GREAT JOB!!!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
Comment from Adelaimar
Thank you for the poem. My mother had an asthma attack in 2007 and she experienced a stroke as a result of that. Your poem evoked an image of confusion -- that's what I usually see in my mother's eyes. The poem captured that image of confusion quite well.
I see nothing I do not like, nothing amiss.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Thank you for the poem. My mother had an asthma attack in 2007 and she experienced a stroke as a result of that. Your poem evoked an image of confusion -- that's what I usually see in my mother's eyes. The poem captured that image of confusion quite well.
I see nothing I do not like, nothing amiss.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Adelaimar, wow, where did you find this?? I am sorry to hear of your mother. Hope she is doing well today.. thank you for stopping by to read and review. I am honored. I am on my way to Austin, but will stop in your port this evening. again thank you.. jlsavell
Comment from writeapoem
Such a sad story in verse and rhyme about the loss of the mind. My uncle and aunt had the same horrific disease that brought his offspring to their knees in prayer. I'm sorry to hear about your brother and his suffering. Nothing can prepare us for such an affliction. But thank God He sent his only begotten Son to overcome death hell and the grave. All the best andGod Bless you.
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
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Such a sad story in verse and rhyme about the loss of the mind. My uncle and aunt had the same horrific disease that brought his offspring to their knees in prayer. I'm sorry to hear about your brother and his suffering. Nothing can prepare us for such an affliction. But thank God He sent his only begotten Son to overcome death hell and the grave. All the best andGod Bless you.
Comment Written 12-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
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writeapoem, thnk you ever so much for stopping by to read and review my work. I apologize for the late reply. I am humbled... jlsavell
Comment from Janelle
jlsavelle, this is a remarkable poem. You have captured succinctly and poignantly the true nature of Alzheimers and the world it's sufferers' live in; one of confusion and despair.
I know I'm aged, but I still have a life;
and I love and I cry and I miss my wife
I hope she knows I love her so
Sometimes I'm so puzzled, for where did she go?
It must be so awful to be unable to remember such major things as who your immediate family are, or the death of your wife.
I have just one suggestion, offered with respect;
Then she takes my hand and all she does say - seems a little awkward, to me. Perhaps:
Then she takes my hand and all she will say'
I'm so sorry that your beloved brother suffered, at a relatively young age of this terrible affliction and that his days ended so painfully and tragically. This poem is a loving tribute to both him and all the other sufferers of Alzheimer's. Regards, Jan
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jlsavelle, this is a remarkable poem. You have captured succinctly and poignantly the true nature of Alzheimers and the world it's sufferers' live in; one of confusion and despair.
I know I'm aged, but I still have a life;
and I love and I cry and I miss my wife
I hope she knows I love her so
Sometimes I'm so puzzled, for where did she go?
It must be so awful to be unable to remember such major things as who your immediate family are, or the death of your wife.
I have just one suggestion, offered with respect;
Then she takes my hand and all she does say - seems a little awkward, to me. Perhaps:
Then she takes my hand and all she will say'
I'm so sorry that your beloved brother suffered, at a relatively young age of this terrible affliction and that his days ended so painfully and tragically. This poem is a loving tribute to both him and all the other sufferers of Alzheimer's. Regards, Jan
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
Comment from dragonpoet
These smooth rhymes tell the pain of Altheimers from the patient's standpoint. It is such a lonely disease. It must be confusing for him to not to know the people who come to visit and hard on the family who come to visit.
The car in the pictures gives an idea of how old the patient is.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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These smooth rhymes tell the pain of Altheimers from the patient's standpoint. It is such a lonely disease. It must be confusing for him to not to know the people who come to visit and hard on the family who come to visit.
The car in the pictures gives an idea of how old the patient is.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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dragonpoet, oh my, thank you. This is a pleasant surprise. Where did you find this? jlsavell
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You're welcome. I suprise a lot of people by reviewing their older works. I use the read drop down tab and pick Stand Out Writing and than choose one of the topics and click on a poem title I like. That is my path and I will continue to follow it.
dragonpoet
Comment from justjo66
Your poem is so personal and sad. The heartbreak is evident. Memories are
what we all have left in the end if God so decides to allow them. I am touched
by your phrasing and poem. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Your poem is so personal and sad. The heartbreak is evident. Memories are
what we all have left in the end if God so decides to allow them. I am touched
by your phrasing and poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Justjo66, oh goodness, where did you find this. Thank you ever so much I am honored.. jlsavell
Comment from SueOS
Very poignant and thought provoking. Only someone with direct experience of this life grabbing disease could evoke the emotion and feeling of this illness. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Very poignant and thought provoking. Only someone with direct experience of this life grabbing disease could evoke the emotion and feeling of this illness. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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SueOS, thank you very much for such a wonderful review and reviewing a very old work. I apologize for just responding. I am not on Fanstory much anymore. again thank you ..jls
Comment from onkughosh19
Very Very touching.Alzheimers can play havoc with one's life and it also affects the lives of all the near an dear ones.The poet has very beautifully brought this fact to light in this poem.
'A life disrupted' is an excellent title or this poem.the content is very good and the rhyming perfect.
A brilliant poem.A must read.I liked it so much that I wish I could save it for later reads.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Very Very touching.Alzheimers can play havoc with one's life and it also affects the lives of all the near an dear ones.The poet has very beautifully brought this fact to light in this poem.
'A life disrupted' is an excellent title or this poem.the content is very good and the rhyming perfect.
A brilliant poem.A must read.I liked it so much that I wish I could save it for later reads.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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onkughosh19, thank you ever so much. I am truly humbled. I apologize for just responding so late. I am rarely on Fanstory anymore.. again thank you ever so much... jls
Comment from CaitlinElizabeth
A raw, unapologetic and beautiful look at a horrific disease. I am sorry for your loss, but thankful that you shared this wonderful tribute through words. The poem is strong and so is your brother's spirit. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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A raw, unapologetic and beautiful look at a horrific disease. I am sorry for your loss, but thankful that you shared this wonderful tribute through words. The poem is strong and so is your brother's spirit. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Caitlin Elizabeth, thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and review my work. I am truly honored. again thank you.. jlsavell
Comment from J.R.Brown
Wow what a compelling piece of art and such a harsh ending tp a wonderful brothers life. I'm sorry for that memory as it is forced yo be your last.However, try and let the fact that upyr brother was hone long before his last day here om earth. That poem had great flow and rythym I am interested in the few statements within the poem where you come off your flow and change directions then begin your rhythm again. Very cool
What is that twopoetry types in. One? Is it called any particular thing. Thanks for your time. Would give anything for your review of my poem "take my hand " or "Take my hand"
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Wow what a compelling piece of art and such a harsh ending tp a wonderful brothers life. I'm sorry for that memory as it is forced yo be your last.However, try and let the fact that upyr brother was hone long before his last day here om earth. That poem had great flow and rythym I am interested in the few statements within the poem where you come off your flow and change directions then begin your rhythm again. Very cool
What is that twopoetry types in. One? Is it called any particular thing. Thanks for your time. Would give anything for your review of my poem "take my hand " or "Take my hand"
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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JRBrown, I must apologize for just responding, but my time is limited here on Fanstory. I am honored and truly humbled that you found this work, which was not even promoted, but you gave it an excepotional. I am just very moved, again thank you.. I will look inot your poem, most definitely.. again thank you.. jlsavell
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Thank you jlsavell!