Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Chapter 10; part one"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from Nicnac
Nice build of tension - showing the men's jaws tightening, etc... Something big is about to happen, and sweet caring George is distracting Sara once again with the painting. What a kind man. I like him.
Heading to the next post now - gotta find out what happens... LOL
No suggestions.
I've missed you... and your posts.
Hugs and prayers,
Nic
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2010
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Nice build of tension - showing the men's jaws tightening, etc... Something big is about to happen, and sweet caring George is distracting Sara once again with the painting. What a kind man. I like him.
Heading to the next post now - gotta find out what happens... LOL
No suggestions.
I've missed you... and your posts.
Hugs and prayers,
Nic
Comment Written 16-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your review. I have missed hearing from you. What have you been up to?
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is a really good well written chapter but I feel like the painting is starting to get almost as much focus as the main storyline.
This question also bothered me
["If I accepted it, would I be considered a kept woman?"] - It made me feel a bit irritated with Sarah, as it seems like a bit of dumb question to ask. He doesn't pay her bills, feed or clothe her. I could understand, though, if she felt accepting the gift might make her feel beholden to him.
Just my thoughts on this chapter, now on to the next :-)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2010
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This is a really good well written chapter but I feel like the painting is starting to get almost as much focus as the main storyline.
This question also bothered me
["If I accepted it, would I be considered a kept woman?"] - It made me feel a bit irritated with Sarah, as it seems like a bit of dumb question to ask. He doesn't pay her bills, feed or clothe her. I could understand, though, if she felt accepting the gift might make her feel beholden to him.
Just my thoughts on this chapter, now on to the next :-)
Comment Written 15-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Sara is very old fashioned and from some town USA. She has a very low self concept. We are working on building it up.
Comment from Paula Andrea Pyle
The tempo is excellent as far as causing the reader to stay in tuned and interested. The dialogue makes for an interactive conventional read for the observer of the work. The story sets up a gravity which innately pulls the reader through with interest and curiosity. Lighthearted and pure. I liked it.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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The tempo is excellent as far as causing the reader to stay in tuned and interested. The dialogue makes for an interactive conventional read for the observer of the work. The story sets up a gravity which innately pulls the reader through with interest and curiosity. Lighthearted and pure. I liked it.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi barbara,
you're building the tension really well here, keeping the story going in a believable fashion. I hope we can see a 'happily reunited' coming up soon!
Patrick
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Hi barbara,
you're building the tension really well here, keeping the story going in a believable fashion. I hope we can see a 'happily reunited' coming up soon!
Patrick
Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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I hope so too. We have some tender momentments coming up, and some gunfire. I just hope I can pull it off, especially the gunfight.
Comment from Jonez08
An educational chapter, Barbara. I wasn't aware of the extent perverts would go. You're knowledge adds realness to the story. I hope Cassie comes home soon. Sending healing prayers to you from Florida!
Cassandra
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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An educational chapter, Barbara. I wasn't aware of the extent perverts would go. You're knowledge adds realness to the story. I hope Cassie comes home soon. Sending healing prayers to you from Florida!
Cassandra
Comment Written 10-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your prayers and I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from jclark
I can't begin to imagine what Sara must be thinking and feeling. I like the idea of the painting and keeping her busy during such a horrendous ordeal. I believe that she and Joe will become closer than ever. I am nervous...hope they find Cassie soon. Great chapter as always. Good luck with your chemo treatment.
Judy
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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I can't begin to imagine what Sara must be thinking and feeling. I like the idea of the painting and keeping her busy during such a horrendous ordeal. I believe that she and Joe will become closer than ever. I am nervous...hope they find Cassie soon. Great chapter as always. Good luck with your chemo treatment.
Judy
Comment Written 10-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
Oh despite the painting, things may be moving along and I smell some action on the way. Love the way you describe things in this chapter and the wonderful continuity you keep up. Loving the story line, girl!!!
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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Oh despite the painting, things may be moving along and I smell some action on the way. Love the way you describe things in this chapter and the wonderful continuity you keep up. Loving the story line, girl!!!
Comment Written 10-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Enjoyed the read Barbara!!!
Comment from essence56
Whew, this is driving me crazy. I can't wait until this story comes to an end. My chair will pretty much be happy too since I stay on edge. smile.. Thanks for continuing to write in between your treatments. You are very brave Barb. Good Chapter. See ya later.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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Whew, this is driving me crazy. I can't wait until this story comes to an end. My chair will pretty much be happy too since I stay on edge. smile.. Thanks for continuing to write in between your treatments. You are very brave Barb. Good Chapter. See ya later.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Ponder
Hi Barbara,
More painting, lol!
This is another well written chapter. The interactions betwwen JOe and Sarah are very well done. I think I like your story because it is very modern and up to date, but deals with perpetual emotions that are valid in anyt era and you deal with them very well. Sara's fears for Cassie, JOe's need to do more than he can, etc - all very well done by you in this chapter (and the rest.)
Hope the Chemo is going well,
Jules
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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Hi Barbara,
More painting, lol!
This is another well written chapter. The interactions betwwen JOe and Sarah are very well done. I think I like your story because it is very modern and up to date, but deals with perpetual emotions that are valid in anyt era and you deal with them very well. Sara's fears for Cassie, JOe's need to do more than he can, etc - all very well done by you in this chapter (and the rest.)
Hope the Chemo is going well,
Jules
Comment Written 10-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review,
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
This is a very interesting chapter and you have described well, the conversations and the change of mood of the men involved in the search for Cassie.
There are a few places where normally I would point out grammatical mistakes but it seems that this is the way the people speak about whom you have written. However, there are two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - How you holding up? I suggest - How are you holding up?
* You have - as matter of fact, it's lousy. I suggest -
as a matter of fact, it's lousy. (The use of the word
'lousy' is so very descriptive!)
Thank you for sharing this with us and I look forward to the next chapter. I will also be thinking of you on
Thursday.
Love from ....... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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Hullo Barbara ....
This is a very interesting chapter and you have described well, the conversations and the change of mood of the men involved in the search for Cassie.
There are a few places where normally I would point out grammatical mistakes but it seems that this is the way the people speak about whom you have written. However, there are two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - How you holding up? I suggest - How are you holding up?
* You have - as matter of fact, it's lousy. I suggest -
as a matter of fact, it's lousy. (The use of the word
'lousy' is so very descriptive!)
Thank you for sharing this with us and I look forward to the next chapter. I will also be thinking of you on
Thursday.
Love from ....... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.