Bright Light
A poem about God's creation.8 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
This is an inspiring poem in just a few words. If we stop and really look at creation, our day does get brighter and our load lighter. Love the illustration. Should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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This is an inspiring poem in just a few words. If we stop and really look at creation, our day does get brighter and our load lighter. Love the illustration. Should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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Thank you for your great review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 1-6-1, Bright Light, has the proper formatting and general acknowledges that the presense of another person, especially one who is adored, is a gift.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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This 1-6-1, Bright Light, has the proper formatting and general acknowledges that the presense of another person, especially one who is adored, is a gift.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
I love this poem. The three lines are very powerful. God's creations are always a bright light. Just look all around and you can see God's paintbrush all around.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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I love this poem. The three lines are very powerful. God's creations are always a bright light. Just look all around and you can see God's paintbrush all around.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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You're welcome
Comment from Elias Noor
The poem is concise and evocative, capturing a sense of divinity and wonder. However, expanding it slightly or adding more imagery could deepen its impact and emotional resonance.
A thoughtful and minimalistic piece that could benefit from further development to enhance its poetic depth.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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The poem is concise and evocative, capturing a sense of divinity and wonder. However, expanding it slightly or adding more imagery could deepen its impact and emotional resonance.
A thoughtful and minimalistic piece that could benefit from further development to enhance its poetic depth.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Comment from Sugarray77
Hello.
This is an excellent entry for this prompt. Your artwork is stunning and sets up your theme perfectly. Great choice of end rhymes that support the theme. I love the emphasis on God's creatures :)
Melissa
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hello.
This is an excellent entry for this prompt. Your artwork is stunning and sets up your theme perfectly. Great choice of end rhymes that support the theme. I love the emphasis on God's creatures :)
Melissa
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed your poem. The way you captured the beauty of nature with just a few words is wonderful. The way you wrote "God's creatures" and "a bright light" creates a peaceful image. For me this felt like a reminder of the small wonders around us.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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I really enjoyed your poem. The way you captured the beauty of nature with just a few words is wonderful. The way you wrote "God's creatures" and "a bright light" creates a peaceful image. For me this felt like a reminder of the small wonders around us.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello!
What an excellent entry into the contest! Although it is hard to pack very much profundity into such a short poem, you do a great job at this!
I am a firm believer in presenting all work on FanStory with an eye toward total presentation. Unfortunately, many members just present their words in a small, boring font with no image, etc. I LOVE the color of this poem, the "warmth" of it. The image, the background, the message. It all adds up to a fantastic post. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
Patrick
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hello!
What an excellent entry into the contest! Although it is hard to pack very much profundity into such a short poem, you do a great job at this!
I am a firm believer in presenting all work on FanStory with an eye toward total presentation. Unfortunately, many members just present their words in a small, boring font with no image, etc. I LOVE the color of this poem, the "warmth" of it. The image, the background, the message. It all adds up to a fantastic post. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
Patrick
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is a good poem for the contest. All three lines rhyme and syllables are correct. You chose good words and your image presentation is good. Best wishes, Alex
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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This is a good poem for the contest. All three lines rhyme and syllables are correct. You chose good words and your image presentation is good. Best wishes, Alex
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you.
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You're welcome.
