The Ice Man
Fortean Phenomena contest2 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Wow, what an interesting story! I love the way you shared local history with spooky happenings. The little surprises left behind added a touch of mystery. It's fun to think about whether the strange occurrences are the work of a spirit or just coincidences. This piece really makes you wonder about the unseen things around us!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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Wow, what an interesting story! I love the way you shared local history with spooky happenings. The little surprises left behind added a touch of mystery. It's fun to think about whether the strange occurrences are the work of a spirit or just coincidences. This piece really makes you wonder about the unseen things around us!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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Thank you. There really is a restaurant in that town that has a ghost. I was in that restaurant years ago when I lived there. It does feel spooky. But nothing unusual happened when I was there, and I can see spirits. So, I expected to see one. I was disappointed, but these things do happen. There is also a house there they tell me is haunted. I have no idea if that is true or not. I stayed away from it just in case.
Comment from lancellot
It is an interesting entry. I would recommend looking this over again. It needs some revision and editing. Some of the sentences are bit confusing. Try reading it out loud or have text-to-speech read it.
notes:
This Poltergeist has been a resident in their restaurant long before it became a restaurant.
-This sentence is contradicted later. As he died before the restaurant was built in a house on the land.
We have spent some time investigating a small restaurant in Somerset, Ohio who claims they have a Poltergeist.
-Rewrite. This line makes it seems the 'restaurant' is making the claim.
But, like magic when we arrive in the morning and open the freezer to organize what we [throw] in last night we find a perfectly organized freezer."
-But, like magic when we arrive in the morning and open the freezer to organize what we threw in last night, we find a perfectly organized freezer."
"The other day I decided to stop in the restaurant and get something to drink. I got up to go to the bathroom and came back to find an extra straw in my drink. {I was} as if someone planned to join me."
-Who is speaking here?
- change: I was, to: It was
"I ordered a hamburger and got up to get my drink refilled. {When I returned I found a huge bit taken} out of my burger."
- "I ordered a hamburger and got up to get my drink refilled. When I returned, I found a huge bite taken out of my burger."
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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It is an interesting entry. I would recommend looking this over again. It needs some revision and editing. Some of the sentences are bit confusing. Try reading it out loud or have text-to-speech read it.
notes:
This Poltergeist has been a resident in their restaurant long before it became a restaurant.
-This sentence is contradicted later. As he died before the restaurant was built in a house on the land.
We have spent some time investigating a small restaurant in Somerset, Ohio who claims they have a Poltergeist.
-Rewrite. This line makes it seems the 'restaurant' is making the claim.
But, like magic when we arrive in the morning and open the freezer to organize what we [throw] in last night we find a perfectly organized freezer."
-But, like magic when we arrive in the morning and open the freezer to organize what we threw in last night, we find a perfectly organized freezer."
"The other day I decided to stop in the restaurant and get something to drink. I got up to go to the bathroom and came back to find an extra straw in my drink. {I was} as if someone planned to join me."
-Who is speaking here?
- change: I was, to: It was
"I ordered a hamburger and got up to get my drink refilled. {When I returned I found a huge bit taken} out of my burger."
- "I ordered a hamburger and got up to get my drink refilled. When I returned, I found a huge bite taken out of my burger."
Comment Written 01-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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I'll give it another look over. I must have written it too quickly. Thanks
