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Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "The Nature of Mother "A collection of poems
23 total reviews
Comment from forestport12
Loved this! You truly took me beyond the wonderful picture. I loved the word play with sanctuary, creation, and sacred, making lifting the poem to a spiritual high, which is how I see and feel when I'm at my camp and go out to immersed in the sorroundings. Thanks for this.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Loved this! You truly took me beyond the wonderful picture. I loved the word play with sanctuary, creation, and sacred, making lifting the poem to a spiritual high, which is how I see and feel when I'm at my camp and go out to immersed in the sorroundings. Thanks for this.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Wow thank you so much! I'm privileged to receive it. Super, glad you liked this. This is my first kick at the can, for iambic meter and rewrote it several times. So you're 6 star award is very welcome. I appreciate it. Thank you.I hope you have a great night!
Comment from Tina Crute
The beauty of the poem lies in your words as well as the picture. I could visualize, if I didn't have the picture, a beautiful scene in my head. Your lines have ten syllables each. One line...Through eon's aged trees...could have 11 syllables depending on how you pronounce aged. No criticism...just an observation. This is well done. I wish you well with it!
Tina
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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The beauty of the poem lies in your words as well as the picture. I could visualize, if I didn't have the picture, a beautiful scene in my head. Your lines have ten syllables each. One line...Through eon's aged trees...could have 11 syllables depending on how you pronounce aged. No criticism...just an observation. This is well done. I wish you well with it!
Tina
Comment Written 06-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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Thank you!! I'm really happy you liked it! And I certainly take your observation to heart 'cause that's how we get better.And the reader's opinion is very important! Thank you so much for your time. Your great rating, and encouraging comments.Thank you have great night!
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You are very welcome! Good night!
Comment from Nicki.B
This is a gorgeous poem. I did a syllable check for you lol....as I know how frustrating it can get, it turns out there's just one line with a mis count and it's easily fixed if you want to!
Line 4 - change evenings to ev'nings to match the count on the rest of the poem.
Although I love all the scenes you painted here and I don't care about the syllable count because you have done a brilliant job, capturing natures beauty throughout.
Good luck with the contest!
Best Wishes
Nicki
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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This is a gorgeous poem. I did a syllable check for you lol....as I know how frustrating it can get, it turns out there's just one line with a mis count and it's easily fixed if you want to!
Line 4 - change evenings to ev'nings to match the count on the rest of the poem.
Although I love all the scenes you painted here and I don't care about the syllable count because you have done a brilliant job, capturing natures beauty throughout.
Good luck with the contest!
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 06-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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That's awesome thank you so much Nicki! I appreciate your review and you're very encouraging comments. Thank you! Thank you for the suggestion as well. I'll check it out like again.Have a great day!
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You're very welcome x
Comment from Bill Schott
This blank verse, The Nature of Mother, somehow envelopes all of nature's scenes within this mighty poem. It is a special description of nature through the eyes of a special admirer.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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This blank verse, The Nature of Mother, somehow envelopes all of nature's scenes within this mighty poem. It is a special description of nature through the eyes of a special admirer.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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Bill, that's so very kind of you.What a lovely compliment! Thank you again for reading, writing and rating! Nice to see you here too! I hope your christmas in new year's was grand and that tonight, is even grander! Thanks again Bill Ihope your night is good!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, detailed, lovely and creative. I enjoyed
the read of this poem. I thought about how this certainly is a place to go when you want peace and serenity. The author's description was exceptional and added a lot to this poem. The artwork is beautiful and compliments this poem. Great Poem!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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The author's words are engaging, detailed, lovely and creative. I enjoyed
the read of this poem. I thought about how this certainly is a place to go when you want peace and serenity. The author's description was exceptional and added a lot to this poem. The artwork is beautiful and compliments this poem. Great Poem!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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Oh, thank you very much.What if I compliment?I'm so happy you liked it! I so appreciate your time and writing and rating. It's very encouraging, as you know, it's helpful for a writer to hear from the reader's perspective. So thank you again and have a great night!
Comment from Jacob1395
There was some really beautiful imagery in this piece depicting how beautiful nature is. I loved the image of the mountains and I could smell the sweet rivers. An excellent piece. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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There was some really beautiful imagery in this piece depicting how beautiful nature is. I loved the image of the mountains and I could smell the sweet rivers. An excellent piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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Jacob thank you again appreciate so much! I hope you are well. Family as well.You have a great new year.Can that tonight be even better! Thanks for your time here, writing and your fine rating too! Very encouraging and kind comments.And as you know, for a writer is very helpful indeed. Have yourself in awesome evening!
Comment from kahpot
This is so very well written, as I read your words and look at the artwork, I feel comforted, knowing that nature can turn it is for the best, so peaceful, an excellent read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2025
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This is so very well written, as I read your words and look at the artwork, I feel comforted, knowing that nature can turn it is for the best, so peaceful, an excellent read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2025
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Thank you. Thank you so much for this awesome review. And in the fine rating, I'm super glad you enjoyed it. It's so nice to see you here again. I'm pleased you like it.Because this is my first kick of the can for this type of poem. I've written written and rewritten it several times but I wasn't sure what I was doing. Thank you so much for this fine rating. It's privilege.I hope you have a great evening!
Comment from Lana Marie
Oh my gosh, they are very difficult and mess with the brain. I really like the flow and the words you've chosen to go with your colorful vibrant picture.
I enjoyed all the different things that you wrote about that could be added to the scenery... like the chickadees.
There's one line that only has nine syllables.
The rockies air, crisp and clear and pure
Breakdown:
The (1 syllable)
rock-ies (2 syllables)
air (1 syllable)
crisp (1 syllable)
and (1 syllable)
clear (1 syllable)
and (1 syllable)
pure (1 syllable)
Total: 9 syllables
Great job good luck at the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2025
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Oh my gosh, they are very difficult and mess with the brain. I really like the flow and the words you've chosen to go with your colorful vibrant picture.
I enjoyed all the different things that you wrote about that could be added to the scenery... like the chickadees.
There's one line that only has nine syllables.
The rockies air, crisp and clear and pure
Breakdown:
The (1 syllable)
rock-ies (2 syllables)
air (1 syllable)
crisp (1 syllable)
and (1 syllable)
clear (1 syllable)
and (1 syllable)
pure (1 syllable)
Total: 9 syllables
Great job good luck at the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2025
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You've got a super keen eye.Thank you for pointing that out.I have corrected it. And those are the kinds of things I need to hear, the most practical things can mean a lot. Thank you again, and thanks for this awesome review. In your time and the trouble to write it all out for me. Thanks again.I hope you're having a great evening!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I do not know if you did it right or not. It is a nice poem.
Here are some howevers; Th color palette is unnatural as you talk about nature. I find that weird, and it will hold you back. Also the font Is heavy handed and will throw people off. It pounds at us. Try a forest green or a brown for the font color. Try a beigy lemon for the matting. and try georgia in italics for the font type. See the difference. Make some changes and I will review it again. Karen
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2025
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I do not know if you did it right or not. It is a nice poem.
Here are some howevers; Th color palette is unnatural as you talk about nature. I find that weird, and it will hold you back. Also the font Is heavy handed and will throw people off. It pounds at us. Try a forest green or a brown for the font color. Try a beigy lemon for the matting. and try georgia in italics for the font type. See the difference. Make some changes and I will review it again. Karen
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Karen. I appreciate your comments. Your suggestion for change are all really great, right? These are things that I need to hear in order to make stuff better.So I appreciate that thank you. I also appreciate your time in suggesting and the rating in for your comments. I hope you have a grand evening!
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I was truly bad at most poetry when I got here and only knew a few types. There are over 350 types now. Keep writing and you will improve. I did, so there is much hope.Lots of folks here will help you. I still get edited.:-) Karen
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Thank you I appreciate that!
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:-)
Comment from BermyBye50
Lea,
This poem is simply brilliant; your exceptional creative gifts and outstanding talent shine through in every line. Your descriptive verses paint magnificent portraits of Mother Nature.
You are spot on with your syllable and word count.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Lea,
This poem is simply brilliant; your exceptional creative gifts and outstanding talent shine through in every line. Your descriptive verses paint magnificent portraits of Mother Nature.
You are spot on with your syllable and word count.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 04-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Thank you so very much for the kind privilege and honor you have done me! I'm most happy to receive it.Thank you! I hope you had an amazing christmas that your new year will bring you to me.Everything we wish and hope for! Thank you again!
