Comment from CM Pickard

Excellent

Very sweet contest entry, perfect selection of photo too. It doesn't pretend to do anything more than it's designed to do and crafts a fun little story while it's at it. Well done

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024

Thanks so very much!

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

Katiemae, I will pray for you, I'm so sorry that you are going through all this. I loved your poem and can remember my first kiss. This line in your poem affected me the most: "When I look, I see eternity In your beauteous innocent face."

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024

Thanks so very much!)

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

There is a feeling of love and tranquility in your words. Excellent 3-6-9 form that captures good feelings and a scene of romance. "But all the planets kicked into place" is a great last line that sums up your words.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024

Thanks so very much!

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is absolutely charming, Katie! The visual is a delight and your series of 3-6-9 verses skilfully captures the magnitude and thrill of that first kiss. I particularly like the change of tone in the last stanza to a more colloquial and exaggerated one, adding fun to the theme. Just one edit: Our fi(r)st kiss. (Your version sounds a little less tender:))
Well done and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024

Thanks so very much Debbie!
Luv&stuff

Comment from Gloria ....

Exceptional

This is simply a delightful and innocent expression of love at first sight.

I very much enjoy the confessional aspect and the artwork too.

Wishing you all the best with the Contest Committee. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024

Why thanks ever so much for your lovely
comments and stellar rating.
Luv&stuff
Katherine

Comment from Barry Penfold

Excellent

A lovely poem and such a cute image. Thanks for sharing. Yes, that first kiss is the one. Love your last stanza. Take care and have a most wonderful day. Keep writing.
Regards
Barry Penfold.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024

Thanks so very much Barry!

Comment from Nicole Dover

Average

I think that this is a decent poem. I'd like to know what the last line means. Perhaps it is an old expression I've never heard before?

Looking forward to hearing back - Nicole

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 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024

It'd sort of an.old expression
Thanks so very much for reviewing

Comment from EeanBlack

Excellent

:YES. The one that puts your universe into place. I own that kiss. Well, I leased it for a day. Then, you know, had car trouble. Then it rained. Then she wasn't home. So, I just gave it to the girl next door. Come to find out, I had the address wrong and it was her all along. This was sappy(cool), but pretty. That's romance in a nutshell anyway. Right?

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024

Thanks so very much!

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is so romantic and moving Katiemae as everything changed for you with this first kiss and I loved your dramatic words to mark this occasion, a wonderful poem, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024

Thanks so very much Dolly!

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice artwork and presentation, Katiemae.
-You have written good poems with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and occasional rhyme.
-A very good opening verse.
-The second verse expands on the first
showing the deep love you see in this person.
-A very good closing verse.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024

Thanks so very much Pam!