Adventures on Kingsley Street
Meet my Family The first in a series of short storys13 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Richard, I enjoyed reading this very much. It's clearly written with a punchy style that drive the narrative with pace. What's more I like all three brothers and their antics. The suggestions I'd make is to keep to the past tense as, periodically , you tend to slip into the present, e.g.:
Don and John (got) into an argument
Keep the present tense for when you're making statements, e.g.:
Respect far outweighs discipline
Also don't be afraid to contract words for added fluency and succinctness, e.g.
(I'll) remember..
My dad (wasn't)
(I'm) not sure
Thanks for sharing this excellent story. I'll look forward to reading more, Richard. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Richard, I enjoyed reading this very much. It's clearly written with a punchy style that drive the narrative with pace. What's more I like all three brothers and their antics. The suggestions I'd make is to keep to the past tense as, periodically , you tend to slip into the present, e.g.:
Don and John (got) into an argument
Keep the present tense for when you're making statements, e.g.:
Respect far outweighs discipline
Also don't be afraid to contract words for added fluency and succinctness, e.g.
(I'll) remember..
My dad (wasn't)
(I'm) not sure
Thanks for sharing this excellent story. I'll look forward to reading more, Richard. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Debbie thank you for the kind words and suggestions. I think I got all of them?? I welcome suggestions. Writing these stories is bringing back good memories.
I do hope you read the upcoming stories. I plan to post one or two a week .
Comment from Tim Margetts
I was 2 in '64 :) But I was also the middle of 3 brothers, me and my older one fought, but lord help anyone who tried to pick on one or other of us. Our little brother is 10 years younger and he was well looked after, thought we made sure he always knew who was the older sibs.
I totally enjoyed this look into your family life and dynamic.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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I was 2 in '64 :) But I was also the middle of 3 brothers, me and my older one fought, but lord help anyone who tried to pick on one or other of us. Our little brother is 10 years younger and he was well looked after, thought we made sure he always knew who was the older sibs.
I totally enjoyed this look into your family life and dynamic.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Thanks for sharing a little about your brothers. They sound like mine.
I am happy you enjoyed my story.
I do hope you will follow my adventures. I promise there will be some funny stories.
Comment from Teri7
This was a very interesting and entertaining true story about your brothers and growing up with them. You used great descriptive words and great imagery from the artwork you chose and your words. Thanks for sharing. Teri
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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This was a very interesting and entertaining true story about your brothers and growing up with them. You used great descriptive words and great imagery from the artwork you chose and your words. Thanks for sharing. Teri
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Teri, I am so glad you enjoyed it. I should thank my brothers for giving me the story to write.
I hope you will follow the rest of the coming stories.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your story. It brings back memories of my childhood. There were 5.of us. We did respect my parents or got the belt.
The story was easy to follow along and you described your brothers well. Great job.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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I enjoyed reading your story. It brings back memories of my childhood. There were 5.of us. We did respect my parents or got the belt.
The story was easy to follow along and you described your brothers well. Great job.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Brenda, for the thoughtful comments. Writing this story brings back so many memories. We lived in a good time.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Your parents were so wise. Respect is the greatest gift, and not to show it is not at all good, it's very disappointing. I was reminded of my two sons, when you said how Don did not like anyone hurting his brothers. Mine loved each other, always have. Even when they had a rough and tumble, they weren't mad at each other, it was all a game. But, if any other kid had a go at either one of them, the other was there in an instant. That's what brother's do. J enjoyed reading this, and look foreward to reading more. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Your parents were so wise. Respect is the greatest gift, and not to show it is not at all good, it's very disappointing. I was reminded of my two sons, when you said how Don did not like anyone hurting his brothers. Mine loved each other, always have. Even when they had a rough and tumble, they weren't mad at each other, it was all a game. But, if any other kid had a go at either one of them, the other was there in an instant. That's what brother's do. J enjoyed reading this, and look foreward to reading more. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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You know, respect wasn't something my parents sat us down to talk about. We learned to respect them from the way they treated us and how they handled lifes bad moments.
I am so happy you want to read the next story.
Thank you again for your comments.
Comment from DonandVicki
You have a way of ending a story leaving the reader wanting more. I was 16 in Nineteen sixty four and our town was Like Mayberry RFD. I miss the innocents.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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You have a way of ending a story leaving the reader wanting more. I was 16 in Nineteen sixty four and our town was Like Mayberry RFD. I miss the innocents.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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This idea of a series came around from a good friend I grew up on Kingsley. We talked about the old days. That was my inspiration. You are so right about the innocence in the 60s. My friends could go anywhere without our parents. You could leave your bike unlocked and go into the movie theater and watch a movie. When we came out our bikes were still there.
I hope you will follow my series.
My hope is the ones that grew up in the 80s and up will have better idea of what it was like for their parents and grandparents.
Comment from LJbutterfly
These are very interesting stories describing young life in the sixties. I grew up in the late fifties and early sixties, in a big city, so I will be able to compare. Thinking back on easier times is a joy. I look forward to your future posts.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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These are very interesting stories describing young life in the sixties. I grew up in the late fifties and early sixties, in a big city, so I will be able to compare. Thinking back on easier times is a joy. I look forward to your future posts.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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I decided to write a series of stories after a conversation with a good friend that lived on Kingsley.
It was a nicer time to grow up.
I do hope you follow along. I plan to post one a week. Maybe two in Thanksgiving.
Comment from Ulla
Those are great stories how it was to grow up in the sixties as a country boy. Don was certainly looking out for his two younger brothers. It was such a different world back then. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Those are great stories how it was to grow up in the sixties as a country boy. Don was certainly looking out for his two younger brothers. It was such a different world back then. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Don was and is a GREAT BROTHER.
I am doing a series of stories about my family and life in the 1960s. I hope you will follow them. I promise they will be entertaining. You might even get a few laughs out of them.
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Looking forward to it. I grew up in the sixties as well.
Comment from Begin Again
Don didn't fool around, did he? When he had something to say or a score to settle, he went straight to the source with no holes barred. Pow! Your stories were very interesting. I had a brother much older and wild, so I technically grew up as an only child in the country...no city excitement there.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Don didn't fool around, did he? When he had something to say or a score to settle, he went straight to the source with no holes barred. Pow! Your stories were very interesting. I had a brother much older and wild, so I technically grew up as an only child in the country...no city excitement there.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thanks Carol. Don being the oldest felt it was his job to watch over his brothers. You can tell from this story he did a pretty good job.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
I loved your story.
I love the fact that your brother Don didn't wait to catch Billie or Mike in neutral territory but went right up to their front door and dealt their punishment.
He took a risk confronting them at their family door step.
When I had finished reading the second incident I really wanted to hear another so when I read : alright one more story ..I said Yessssss
Maybe because I missed out on having a child-teenhood family life , but I love to hear how others grew up at home.
Looking forward to the next episode.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Ciao !
I loved your story.
I love the fact that your brother Don didn't wait to catch Billie or Mike in neutral territory but went right up to their front door and dealt their punishment.
He took a risk confronting them at their family door step.
When I had finished reading the second incident I really wanted to hear another so when I read : alright one more story ..I said Yessssss
Maybe because I missed out on having a child-teenhood family life , but I love to hear how others grew up at home.
Looking forward to the next episode.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the rating!! These stories are special to me, so a rating like yours means a lot.
My wife and I just had dinner last Monday with Don and his wife. We chatted a little about our younger days.
The idea for my stories came about from talking with one of my old neighborhood friends. He mentioned something we did as teens. After I hung up, it made me start thinking about my youth. I managed to get into a few things, some funny and some not so funny.
I hope people will find them interesting.