Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Weigh Anchor"Musings of an old man - 2022
29 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I enjoyed your interpretation of the Brigantine's voyage and its captain and crew JLR. You created quite a visible scene in my head, well told. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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I enjoyed your interpretation of the Brigantine's voyage and its captain and crew JLR. You created quite a visible scene in my head, well told. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Valda, thank you for sharing your comments.
Comment from Paul McFarland
It's like you have done this before, although it seems like this is in the distant past. Nice mixture of nautical terms lends an authenticity to this poem.
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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It's like you have done this before, although it seems like this is in the distant past. Nice mixture of nautical terms lends an authenticity to this poem.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Yes, over years I have written several variations of nautical themed poems.
Comment from LisaMay
I think I have the smell of salt in the air while reading your well-crafted free verse poem. Your descriptions are wonderful and I enjoyed all the nautical terms that made it feel so authentic.
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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I think I have the smell of salt in the air while reading your well-crafted free verse poem. Your descriptions are wonderful and I enjoyed all the nautical terms that made it feel so authentic.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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LisaMay, thank you!
Comment from Goosey Gander
This free verse poem is excellent! I love the story you have told in the form of a free verse poem. Thank you very much for sharing this spectacular poem!
-GG
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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This free verse poem is excellent! I love the story you have told in the form of a free verse poem. Thank you very much for sharing this spectacular poem!
-GG
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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GG thank you!
Comment from karenina
Nice free verse! I'd never have guessed you were a "Landlubber"--this reads as true as if you'd experienced it all yourself! I love the sea--but, like you, prefer to haze at those ships from the shore! Nice alliteration, fine descriptions, lots of authentic sailing terms and done in a style of verse I am just now learning to (attempt to) write in!
Karenina
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Nice free verse! I'd never have guessed you were a "Landlubber"--this reads as true as if you'd experienced it all yourself! I love the sea--but, like you, prefer to haze at those ships from the shore! Nice alliteration, fine descriptions, lots of authentic sailing terms and done in a style of verse I am just now learning to (attempt to) write in!
Karenina
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Ah, it is good to read the seeds are planted for a new free verser! I can't wait to read the contributions you glean from the depths of your soul ....
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Over the past month I've posted three or four...after some fifty years of largely rhymed verse. I find free verse fascinating!
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Awesome, I am going to look them up!! I am literally - three years into learning to write poetry. I stuffed this part of my soul while in corporate life and started writing after I retired.
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I've written as a hobby and avocation since I was eleven...my career was in Nursing. Now retired, I write for my pleasure and an occasional published bit here or there. I stuck to pretty much rhyming poetry for most of my years. A few poets here really touched me with their free verse and encouraged me to give it a try. I think three or four of my last five or six are free verse. It's very (here's a surprise) FREEING! Releasing the rhyme and meter and letting the words flow! (smile)
Comment from Liz O'Neill
There is so much great alliteration here, it is hard to know where to start. The sounds of your onomatopoetic words brings this painting alive. We can hear the bells, the men in their excitement, the splashing of the water, the winds, the banging of the barrels. There is even the rocking rhythm of the lines to mimic the boat's motion.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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There is so much great alliteration here, it is hard to know where to start. The sounds of your onomatopoetic words brings this painting alive. We can hear the bells, the men in their excitement, the splashing of the water, the winds, the banging of the barrels. There is even the rocking rhythm of the lines to mimic the boat's motion.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Liz, thank you for this wonderful validation my poem Weigh Anchor.
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***smile***
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your dramatic sea adventure poem. Thank you for sharing about St. Brendan, a saint I never heard of. Seems like you have a lot of sailing knowledge. I especially liked the last five lines.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Enjoyed your dramatic sea adventure poem. Thank you for sharing about St. Brendan, a saint I never heard of. Seems like you have a lot of sailing knowledge. I especially liked the last five lines.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Thank you, while always being a landlubber at heart - I have passion for the historic naval achievements that propelled exploration.
Comment from Wendy G
You obviously know a great deal about sailing and have incorporated the terms and expressions and duties into your interesting poem. It flows well, true to theme. The information in your notes is helpful - thanks for including it.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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You obviously know a great deal about sailing and have incorporated the terms and expressions and duties into your interesting poem. It flows well, true to theme. The information in your notes is helpful - thanks for including it.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Wendy, while always being a landlubber at heart - I have passion for the historic naval achievements that propelled exploration.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely done. Very credible imagery. Good work.
It's work I wouldn't want. I'd be happy dig ditches in rock or muck before working a sailing ship.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Very nicely done. Very credible imagery. Good work.
It's work I wouldn't want. I'd be happy dig ditches in rock or muck before working a sailing ship.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Wayne, I am right there with you! while always being a landlubber at heart - I have passion for the historic naval achievements that propelled exploration.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a stunning, smoothly flowing free verse that captured and held me throughout my read. I found it poetically articulated and informative, a thoroughly enjoyable descriptive write about a seafaring odyssey...
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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In my opinion, a stunning, smoothly flowing free verse that captured and held me throughout my read. I found it poetically articulated and informative, a thoroughly enjoyable descriptive write about a seafaring odyssey...
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Eve, thank you for your six star validation!
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You're very welcome, JLR, a thoroughly absorbing read for me...Eve