The Hunt is On
A Trijan Refrain poem25 total reviews
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Wow. This looks like its very hard but you crafted it expertly.
Good strong rhymes, smooth flow and as charming topic. Since I just joined your free verse club, I thought I'd gave a look as your profile.
Very impressive!
Luv,
Katiemae
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
Wow. This looks like its very hard but you crafted it expertly.
Good strong rhymes, smooth flow and as charming topic. Since I just joined your free verse club, I thought I'd gave a look as your profile.
Very impressive!
Luv,
Katiemae
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much!
Yvonne
Comment from AnnieDawn
I wasn't able to picture this type of poetry until I read your post here. You make it look so simple and yet it is not. Great job on this as I think this looks to be one of the most complicated styles you have ever presented.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
I wasn't able to picture this type of poetry until I read your post here. You make it look so simple and yet it is not. Great job on this as I think this looks to be one of the most complicated styles you have ever presented.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the compliment, and for the review.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely tale of this little mum out looking for food for her young. Your double refrain lines meld beautifully in each verse. Lovely scenes you've created here Yvonne, cheers valda
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
This is a lovely tale of this little mum out looking for food for her young. Your double refrain lines meld beautifully in each verse. Lovely scenes you've created here Yvonne, cheers valda
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for the great review and stars!
Comment from lyenochka
Wonderful storytelling with your Trijan Refrain, Yvonne! I like how you used that refrain well to create a sense of urgency in the first two stanzas and a sense of relief in the last stanza.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
Wonderful storytelling with your Trijan Refrain, Yvonne! I like how you used that refrain well to create a sense of urgency in the first two stanzas and a sense of relief in the last stanza.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for the great review and stars!
Comment from Sharon Davis
This Trojan Refrain meets the many requirements of this format efficiently and effectively.
The piece also has a very uplifting theme and tone.
An enjoyable read.
Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
This Trojan Refrain meets the many requirements of this format efficiently and effectively.
The piece also has a very uplifting theme and tone.
An enjoyable read.
Well done.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne. This is a delightful poem with such a wonderful imagery I could just visualise it. I loved it.
Just one little thing: The fox lays in her lair so snug, = The fox lies in her lair so snug,
Ulla xx
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
Hi Yvonne. This is a delightful poem with such a wonderful imagery I could just visualise it. I loved it.
Just one little thing: The fox lays in her lair so snug, = The fox lies in her lair so snug,
Ulla xx
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Gotta change that. Thanks, Ulla.
Comment from judiverse
This is charming. The Trojan Refrain looks pretty tricky. You did an excellent job with yours. The repeating lines are great in each stanza. The fox is pretty confident in her skills as a hunter, as she leaps and bounds to catch her prey. She needs to be sharp, because she has those babies to care for. This delightfully shows how nature provides the animals with the survival skills they need. judi
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
This is charming. The Trojan Refrain looks pretty tricky. You did an excellent job with yours. The repeating lines are great in each stanza. The fox is pretty confident in her skills as a hunter, as she leaps and bounds to catch her prey. She needs to be sharp, because she has those babies to care for. This delightfully shows how nature provides the animals with the survival skills they need. judi
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much. This is a lovely review, and much appreciated.
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You're welcome. I really enjoyed. judi
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love this! What a bouncy form, it suits the fox, how bouncy they are when they are kits and playing while mum hunts. The words are fun, she's a canny mother, making sure it's safe to go out and hunt, and is rewarded with a catch to feed the family easily! I really enjoyed reading this one. I've just been watching some of your animal videos and then came and read this. Wonderful!! Well done, dear sister. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
I love this! What a bouncy form, it suits the fox, how bouncy they are when they are kits and playing while mum hunts. The words are fun, she's a canny mother, making sure it's safe to go out and hunt, and is rewarded with a catch to feed the family easily! I really enjoyed reading this one. I've just been watching some of your animal videos and then came and read this. Wonderful!! Well done, dear sister. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Also the videos I send you. When they get tiresome, let me know. Thank you for a great review!
Comment from Eternal Muse
Thank you for introducing us to this form. I love Jan Turner's poetry, but haven't tried this one.
I wish I had a six for it. You complied with the form to a 't' - loved your rhyming, flow, imagery, visuals and the picture of that adorable for.
Much enjoyed, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
Thank you for introducing us to this form. I love Jan Turner's poetry, but haven't tried this one.
I wish I had a six for it. You complied with the form to a 't' - loved your rhyming, flow, imagery, visuals and the picture of that adorable for.
Much enjoyed, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for this great review.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne.
Your poem reads very well with rhyme, meter, and conformance to the style standard. Your narration of the fox on the hunt to feed the kits shows, rather than tells, the process of mom bringing home the groceries.
Robert
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
Hello Yvonne.
Your poem reads very well with rhyme, meter, and conformance to the style standard. Your narration of the fox on the hunt to feed the kits shows, rather than tells, the process of mom bringing home the groceries.
Robert
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Robert.
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You're welcome Yvonne.