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Comment from Ekim777
I can hardly understand what you're saying, that is why I'm writing, hoping to connect...
Take the first verse. I know the horror of sleepless, insane nights but nights can also be magic they are the playground of the soul and why can't you have wild exciting dreams. If you can't have good dreams sometimes what can you enjoy. As for the disgusting following lines. I don't believe you.Let's skip a few verses, the images are not very enticing. At some stage you mention the child in you. Can't you occasionally return to the state of childhood laughter or have you forgotten. You remember the fear and the guilt (You never mention guilt, maybe you never did anything to be guilty about). Anyway Guilt and fear are the same thing. Now I know that most children must suffer the horror at the edge of an abyss. That's where their fevered imaginations lead them but some manage to create something new and even exult in its freshness like a sudden breeze. Maybe if you got past the horror, your horror, you'd see the light. You did mentions somewhere an awareness of the universe. Have you ever seen the beauty of a nebulae. You wouldn't believe it and it is only a shaft of light on a cloudy, dying star. You say you seek meaning for the universe. What about seeking meaning for your life. Of course that would mean bringing in people into your world, at least someone and new things might happen and maybe draw you our of your masturbatory exercises. Take care my friend, Have you too seen the best minds of your generation destroyed by madness? Life can't be all that bad. - Ekim
You're probably wondering what am I going on about? Did you realise that Ekim is Mike spelt backwards?
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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I can hardly understand what you're saying, that is why I'm writing, hoping to connect...
Take the first verse. I know the horror of sleepless, insane nights but nights can also be magic they are the playground of the soul and why can't you have wild exciting dreams. If you can't have good dreams sometimes what can you enjoy. As for the disgusting following lines. I don't believe you.Let's skip a few verses, the images are not very enticing. At some stage you mention the child in you. Can't you occasionally return to the state of childhood laughter or have you forgotten. You remember the fear and the guilt (You never mention guilt, maybe you never did anything to be guilty about). Anyway Guilt and fear are the same thing. Now I know that most children must suffer the horror at the edge of an abyss. That's where their fevered imaginations lead them but some manage to create something new and even exult in its freshness like a sudden breeze. Maybe if you got past the horror, your horror, you'd see the light. You did mentions somewhere an awareness of the universe. Have you ever seen the beauty of a nebulae. You wouldn't believe it and it is only a shaft of light on a cloudy, dying star. You say you seek meaning for the universe. What about seeking meaning for your life. Of course that would mean bringing in people into your world, at least someone and new things might happen and maybe draw you our of your masturbatory exercises. Take care my friend, Have you too seen the best minds of your generation destroyed by madness? Life can't be all that bad. - Ekim
You're probably wondering what am I going on about? Did you realise that Ekim is Mike spelt backwards?
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Mr Mike spelled backwards :-). It's certainly an unrelentingly dismal dream, this one, but thankfully not an indicator for my life in general. I know I have positive dreams too, but I can never remember them. As for writing the poem, I do find the darker side of humanity fascinating so I write about it a lot, bit also about beauty and love. Thanks for stopping by :-).
Mike
Comment from lola29
What a horrible nightmare for a child to be caught in. I started to believe that you were offering expressions about a drug user, but admittedly, I don't understand the source of your conflicted pain.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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What a horrible nightmare for a child to be caught in. I started to believe that you were offering expressions about a drug user, but admittedly, I don't understand the source of your conflicted pain.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, lola :-). I've been having this since I was very young, so I hope it's not drugs! My Mum did have acupuncture when I was little, which I found very shocking, so maybe that's where the needle thing comes from. The main thing is that, when I write plenty of poetry, I do not dream :-)
Mike
Comment from Mara del Mar
This is a piece well done, with great images of great relevance. I have often had bad dreams, but one predominates where I am in an old house, large and surrounded by muddy waters. You did a great job here, congratulations.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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This is a piece well done, with great images of great relevance. I have often had bad dreams, but one predominates where I am in an old house, large and surrounded by muddy waters. You did a great job here, congratulations.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Mara :-). Sounds like we have a creepy repeat visitor in common. Perhaps you should write yours out in a poem.
Mike
Mike I have two others in my portfolio, but in Spanish. "Sleeping Muse" and "Nightmare" but this is so creepy that I avoid. Last night I was there. Greetings Mike.
Comment from Espresso momma
This is a new type sonnet for me and I liked it. It is eerie that one would have a recurring dream like this from childhood, I don't believe in Shrinks, so guess I'd do lot's of praying or something. LOL. Thanks.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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This is a new type sonnet for me and I liked it. It is eerie that one would have a recurring dream like this from childhood, I don't believe in Shrinks, so guess I'd do lot's of praying or something. LOL. Thanks.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much :-). I agree about shrinks - my therapy has always been creativity. If I can get it all out in my poetry, the dreams leave me be.
Mike
Comment from Addy García
"In the abyss of the world to find a meaning for the universe, represented by these thoughts out of place and passion to steal my time," these lines are very deep images that captivate your poem as a whole.
Great poem is the show, congratulations!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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"In the abyss of the world to find a meaning for the universe, represented by these thoughts out of place and passion to steal my time," these lines are very deep images that captivate your poem as a whole.
Great poem is the show, congratulations!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Addy :-). I was very happy with how this one turned out and I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Mike
Comment from Jen Gentry
I learned something today about a crown of sonnets Gennerally sonnets are not my fave but you have done this quite well I also have a recurring nightmare so I feel your fear well done poem
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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I learned something today about a crown of sonnets Gennerally sonnets are not my fave but you have done this quite well I also have a recurring nightmare so I feel your fear well done poem
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Christa :-). I'm really glad you enjoyed the read.
Mike
Comment from angel123
Your poem is profoundly written and I am glad I got the opportunity to read it. It rhymes and flows well and your artwork choice is very interesting. I have no suggestions for any changes.
Angel123
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Your poem is profoundly written and I am glad I got the opportunity to read it. It rhymes and flows well and your artwork choice is very interesting. I have no suggestions for any changes.
Angel123
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Angel :-). I love writing these crowns. They can take a while to get right, but there is a great sense of fulfilment when one is complete. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading through and thrilled with your wonderful review :-)
Mike
Comment from c_lucas
Dreams are said to be our subconscious speaking to our conscious. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Dreams are said to be our subconscious speaking to our conscious. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, my friend :-). I've always found that dreams come when I haven't written for a while, so I certainly agree. If one cannot express through an outlet, the dreams will do it instead ...
Mike
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You're welcome, Mike. Dream interpretation can make for an interesting conversation.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am confused because I just read the prologue so I assumed this is post one, but by the numbering up above I see its post four. I must go find out. Anyway, I did enjoy reading this and thank you for the author's notes which help non poets.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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I am confused because I just read the prologue so I assumed this is post one, but by the numbering up above I see its post four. I must go find out. Anyway, I did enjoy reading this and thank you for the author's notes which help non poets.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Barbara :-). I wrote the prologue yesterday then added in previous Crown of Sonnet posts, so this became the fourth. Apologies if I didn't make that very clear :-/. Mostly, I'm very happy you enjoyed the read :-)
Mike
Comment from TammyGail
Well done sweetie - I am speechless - the picture is stunning - and the poem oh my you did a fantastic job here - who gives a damn if it's long - I could have read more .... Well done ... I will be following you for sure now
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Well done sweetie - I am speechless - the picture is stunning - and the poem oh my you did a fantastic job here - who gives a damn if it's long - I could have read more .... Well done ... I will be following you for sure now
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much, Tammy :-). You sure put a smile on my face this morning with your wonderful review!
Mike