The Wayward Adventurer
Seeking fame on the seven seas.127 total reviews
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
How I wish I had six stars left for this magnificent work of literature! The fact that the writer not only incorporates end rhymes, but rhymes within each line displays truly superior writing ability! This tale told through a poem which incorporates a moral or lesson in the final stanza is reminiscent of the writings of Shakespeare himself! The use of alliteration is evident throughout the entire poem in examples such as seven/seas, ship/sailed along with many other instances of alliteration. The GIF style photos further enhance the reader's reading experience allowing them to envision clearly the events transpiring throughout this poem. These moving photos add a new layer of depth to the poem. The final stanza where the writer incorporates the moral/lesson resulting from wanting more than one needs and allowing greed to get the best of us really unites the poem and leaves the reader with a message of caution. The poem after reading this final stanza becomes more of a cautionary tale here. Then when one rereads the piece knowing this final tidbit of information supplied in the conclusion of the poem, the piece takes on a whole new appearance. The monster is a metaphor for the constant greed to become greater and its capture which would surely bring great acclaim to the captain and crew symbolizes humanity's selfish desire to achieve a life of fame and fortune. When desire for celebrity overtakes the thrill of your life's passion, you are destined to crash and burn, hitting rock bottom much like the boat crashing against the rocks. When you put all your eggs into one basket and your goal is not obtained you are forever left with an emptiness inside. If you set out to achieve a goal with the wrong mindset, you will never achieve it. That dream will slip through your fingers, forever gnawing at your unfulfilled insides unless you wake up and start pursuing your dream with pure intentions and a clear mind. There are so many meanings one can pull from this poem that I could discuss it for hours! This poem's ability to resonate deeply causing the reader to create thought-provoking ideas is what truly makes it so exquisitely designed. The meter is consistent throughout and the lines generate elaborate images through precisely chosen word choices. There is not a single thing I would change about it, I just wish I had six stars left to award it.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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How I wish I had six stars left for this magnificent work of literature! The fact that the writer not only incorporates end rhymes, but rhymes within each line displays truly superior writing ability! This tale told through a poem which incorporates a moral or lesson in the final stanza is reminiscent of the writings of Shakespeare himself! The use of alliteration is evident throughout the entire poem in examples such as seven/seas, ship/sailed along with many other instances of alliteration. The GIF style photos further enhance the reader's reading experience allowing them to envision clearly the events transpiring throughout this poem. These moving photos add a new layer of depth to the poem. The final stanza where the writer incorporates the moral/lesson resulting from wanting more than one needs and allowing greed to get the best of us really unites the poem and leaves the reader with a message of caution. The poem after reading this final stanza becomes more of a cautionary tale here. Then when one rereads the piece knowing this final tidbit of information supplied in the conclusion of the poem, the piece takes on a whole new appearance. The monster is a metaphor for the constant greed to become greater and its capture which would surely bring great acclaim to the captain and crew symbolizes humanity's selfish desire to achieve a life of fame and fortune. When desire for celebrity overtakes the thrill of your life's passion, you are destined to crash and burn, hitting rock bottom much like the boat crashing against the rocks. When you put all your eggs into one basket and your goal is not obtained you are forever left with an emptiness inside. If you set out to achieve a goal with the wrong mindset, you will never achieve it. That dream will slip through your fingers, forever gnawing at your unfulfilled insides unless you wake up and start pursuing your dream with pure intentions and a clear mind. There are so many meanings one can pull from this poem that I could discuss it for hours! This poem's ability to resonate deeply causing the reader to create thought-provoking ideas is what truly makes it so exquisitely designed. The meter is consistent throughout and the lines generate elaborate images through precisely chosen word choices. There is not a single thing I would change about it, I just wish I had six stars left to award it.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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My my, rainbows, you've got me blushing over here, lol. Such an enthusiastic, detailed and wonderful review as this need no accompanying sixth star, my dear friend. That alone is reward enough!
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You are most welcome for the review and I still wish I had a sixth star to award it! :-) I'm so glad you enjoyed the review! I definitely enjoyed this piece of literature! :-) Thank you again for the reviewer vote it made my day! :-)
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It was the least that I could do!
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:)
Comment from James Dooney
Wow this is actually quite impressive what you have done here ! I like the way you have structured your poem out with the design and all. Good work here I think and well done !
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Wow this is actually quite impressive what you have done here ! I like the way you have structured your poem out with the design and all. Good work here I think and well done !
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, James. I appreciate that.
Comment from LoannaLois
My good writer, This one's rating is a 20. Sometimes, it is so subjective...but this is universally just a great poem.And your illustrations....YOWZA!( now where did I get that one?) Regards and blessings, Lo
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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My good writer, This one's rating is a 20. Sometimes, it is so subjective...but this is universally just a great poem.And your illustrations....YOWZA!( now where did I get that one?) Regards and blessings, Lo
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Lo, I really appreciate your glowing review.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Wow, what a wonderful adventure this is, Dean. It's easy to see you put a lot of effort into this poem. The rhythm and rhymes were spot on and added to the enjoyment of the read.
In addition, you interject a moral cautionary tale by addressing greed. Chasing the monster by throwing caution to the wind can lead to trouble. What a clever way to illustrate this!
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Wow, what a wonderful adventure this is, Dean. It's easy to see you put a lot of effort into this poem. The rhythm and rhymes were spot on and added to the enjoyment of the read.
In addition, you interject a moral cautionary tale by addressing greed. Chasing the monster by throwing caution to the wind can lead to trouble. What a clever way to illustrate this!
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Lou, and I'm very glad you appreciated the moral beneath all the hype. I'm very grateful for your lovely review!
Comment from Cedar
This is another exceptional piece, as always. It's amazing how you fabricate all these wonderful stories. It's also evident that you invest a great deal of time and work into your masterpieces. I remember telling you after you joined this site that you had a bright future, well, it just keeps getting brighter and brighter. Exceptional job. Bill
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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This is another exceptional piece, as always. It's amazing how you fabricate all these wonderful stories. It's also evident that you invest a great deal of time and work into your masterpieces. I remember telling you after you joined this site that you had a bright future, well, it just keeps getting brighter and brighter. Exceptional job. Bill
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Yes, you did, Bill, and I'm still working at it, lol.
I really appreciate your complimentary rating and review, my friend!
Comment from GWHARGIS
I am so glad you posted this. I am being pressured by some to write about the "it" thing now. Write what will sell. I have never been one to buy a book because it is on the NY times best
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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I am so glad you posted this. I am being pressured by some to write about the "it" thing now. Write what will sell. I have never been one to buy a book because it is on the NY times best
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Me either, GW, I read and buy what I like, not what's at the top of the best seller lists. Unless it's by Stephen King, of course, lol. The ravings everyone heaped upon Fifty Shades of Gray, for example, we really unfounded.
Thanks again for your awesome review, my friend!
Comment from dragonpoet
Very apt illustration of this seafarer poem.
The rhyme seems unforced and the rhythm is like the waves. Yes greed is the biggest monster of our times and any time really. It would be great fame and money weren't such a pull for so many.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Very apt illustration of this seafarer poem.
The rhyme seems unforced and the rhythm is like the waves. Yes greed is the biggest monster of our times and any time really. It would be great fame and money weren't such a pull for so many.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks, dragonpoet. Glad you liked it.
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You're welcome.
dragonpoet
Comment from 1954speed
An entertaining tale. The rhythm maintained and carried the reader along, much as a following sea. It was easily read and enjoyed. Would probably rate six stars if available. Good piece
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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An entertaining tale. The rhythm maintained and carried the reader along, much as a following sea. It was easily read and enjoyed. Would probably rate six stars if available. Good piece
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Speed. I'm glad you enjoyed this.
Comment from JonnyRhymes
This poem is extremely well-written and also has numerous dimensions which readers would not expect to find incorporated into one poem. You have successfully told an entertaining tale which is reminiscent of Greek mythology, included elements (and visuals) which resemble modern-day "sea-based" horror movies, delivered an important message for modern-day life AND done all of this with competent poetic technique. This was an interesting, entertaining read and is a poem to be proud of. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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This poem is extremely well-written and also has numerous dimensions which readers would not expect to find incorporated into one poem. You have successfully told an entertaining tale which is reminiscent of Greek mythology, included elements (and visuals) which resemble modern-day "sea-based" horror movies, delivered an important message for modern-day life AND done all of this with competent poetic technique. This was an interesting, entertaining read and is a poem to be proud of. Well done!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks very much, Johnny Rhymes. I know what an astute, careful reviewer you are, and you don't pass out sixes lightly. I'm honored that you felt this poem deserved one.
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You're welcome, & thanks again for sharing a great poem
Comment from amahra
Love your poems, especially your style of writing: so crisp and realistic, even with fantasy, there's a lot of realism to your writing. Loved this poem that took me on a scary adventure. However, as noble as you sound about writers wanting to make money. If writing is a hobby that's good advice, but not if you want to make a living doing something you're good at and something you love. What's so wrong with making money from writing. Actors don't act for free, doctors get paid. I'm sure Shakespeare would have loved to have gotten rich from his many writings; and he would have deserved every penny...seeing what his writings have accomplished centuries later.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Love your poems, especially your style of writing: so crisp and realistic, even with fantasy, there's a lot of realism to your writing. Loved this poem that took me on a scary adventure. However, as noble as you sound about writers wanting to make money. If writing is a hobby that's good advice, but not if you want to make a living doing something you're good at and something you love. What's so wrong with making money from writing. Actors don't act for free, doctors get paid. I'm sure Shakespeare would have loved to have gotten rich from his many writings; and he would have deserved every penny...seeing what his writings have accomplished centuries later.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks for sharing your thoughts with me about this, amahra, I really appreciate it.
I'm not saying that it's not okay to make money from writing. I do, and that would be extremely hypocritical of me. What I'm trying to say is that money should not be your motivating factor for writing. The love of the craft, the chance to enrich someone's life by reading what you've written, those should be your driving force, not how much money you can make by doing so.
Thanks again, and I hope I've cleared up that little misunderstanding?