I Asked For That One
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Comment from Tina McKala
Well, it won the contest, so I guess I would be in a minority (that happens to me, on this site especially), but I still think a 5-7-5 should be about more than a 17 syllable sentence spread into three lines (or the other extreme - three nothing saying lines put together). It was kind of funny, but I found nothing poetic here (and a poem shall be poetic, I'm conservative here).
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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Well, it won the contest, so I guess I would be in a minority (that happens to me, on this site especially), but I still think a 5-7-5 should be about more than a 17 syllable sentence spread into three lines (or the other extreme - three nothing saying lines put together). It was kind of funny, but I found nothing poetic here (and a poem shall be poetic, I'm conservative here).
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Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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First of all I will comply with the rules and say thank you for your review. Next, I would like to request a clarification of your rating "good." This poem met all the requirements for this contest, went strictly by the rules set by the site admin office and it even won the contest. This form of poetry is not meant to be poetic, some are and some aren't. There are 56 different styles of poetry used. This poem is done exactly as the site contest committee requested. Therefore, I request you reconsider or else I will contact the site administrator. If your rating was for a valid reason, I would not comment at all. Bill
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Contact administrator if you want to, I said my reasons in the review.
Comment from SaluteDobby
LOL..This was really nice. I can empathise with her-it's so frustrating when we do all the work and are then ordered around. :) Just kidding.
I can see why this won the contest. It made me laugh. Congrats on winning the contest and for acheiving the "All time best" status.
Regards,
Namratha
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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LOL..This was really nice. I can empathise with her-it's so frustrating when we do all the work and are then ordered around. :) Just kidding.
I can see why this won the contest. It made me laugh. Congrats on winning the contest and for acheiving the "All time best" status.
Regards,
Namratha
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much my friend, I appreciate your kind words. I'm also glad that it made you laugh. Men can be insensitive at times, but without you ladies to keep us under control, we would simply be "lost." Thanks my friend and may God bless you and yours. Bill
Comment from Glasstruth
LOL. Hope it was a cold beer. The picture and poem is a psrfect match. As they say you are the king of the castle. Congrats on the win. And yes, you did put a smile on my face. Les
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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LOL. Hope it was a cold beer. The picture and poem is a psrfect match. As they say you are the king of the castle. Congrats on the win. And yes, you did put a smile on my face. Les
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thanks Les, I'm glad it made you smile. This one was as the contest rules stated, "Just For Fun." I'm nearly 70 years old and haven't had a beer in years. Have a nice day my friend. Bill
Comment from TKField
Alright, I smiled. Congrats on winning the contest. This seems a little bit of male bashing, but I suppose it's not too far off in some cases. Still, cleaning up the pig stye and fetching the man of the house a beer doesn't seem that bad a fate in the grand scheme of things. Who knows? Maybe the guy's even paying the rent.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Alright, I smiled. Congrats on winning the contest. This seems a little bit of male bashing, but I suppose it's not too far off in some cases. Still, cleaning up the pig stye and fetching the man of the house a beer doesn't seem that bad a fate in the grand scheme of things. Who knows? Maybe the guy's even paying the rent.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thanks for your review. According to some of the ladies, this is "female bashing." My last review was from a woman that said she would have hit me in the head with a frying pan if she was my wife. Hell, I'm almost 70 years old and haven't had beer in years. Just trying to have a little fun with the ladies and it's working (ha). Take care. Bill
Comment from livelylinda
Yeah, Cedar, I was once married to a guy who said that to me. . .you notice I said "once married to". . .Yes, it is funny now, made me smile and then look for a frying pan to hit you over the head! lolololololol Good luck with the contest and go get your own cold beer. livelylinda
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Yeah, Cedar, I was once married to a guy who said that to me. . .you notice I said "once married to". . .Yes, it is funny now, made me smile and then look for a frying pan to hit you over the head! lolololololol Good luck with the contest and go get your own cold beer. livelylinda
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thanks Linda for your "lively" review, I appreciate it. At least it made you smile and that's a good thing. Men can be very insensitive, but we would be lost without you ladies. My wife and I have been together for 46 years and I haven't had a beer in years. Take care of yourself and have a nice day. Bill
Comment from JeanneHP
Well, you definitely made me smile with your 5-7-5 poem. I'm sure it sounds very familiar to many of us. The picture you chose is perfect. :-)
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Well, you definitely made me smile with your 5-7-5 poem. I'm sure it sounds very familiar to many of us. The picture you chose is perfect. :-)
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thanks Jeanne for your review and I'm glad it made you smile. Have a nice day. Bill
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent metaphor. [I believe that you already know what I am writing, but I just did not want to sound Pedantic.]
One, who is not astute, as to the gestures that are used in a conversation, is crippled because visual aides say a lot, and can suggest going forward--or Not,
Some sign language "signs," are universal, but many cultures have signs that show appreciation, or deprecation, or warning, or insult.
So, finger pointers beware, do it in some cultures it could cost you your hair.
I want to learn sign language, I know it is important to share, some people learn it, some do not care.
When trying to learn what to say [speaking] it is often difficult to use the correct word, but gestures are not just for the Nerd.
So I started looking to sign, and I found a menu that is vast, what should be learned first, or last?
Incidental gestures; expressive gestures, symbolic gestures, technical gestures, coded gestures, gesture variants, multi-message variants, gesture alternatives, hybrid gestures, compound gestures, relic gestures . . .
Before I started I bowed my head in respect for those that sign, and those that teach it.
I love your message(s):
Up your [--] with broken glass.
You can leave now, your ride is ready.
I am not a proctologist but I will take a look.
You have now been elevated to a top position, so now is your time to take over.
Just one more message for your anal-sanctum.
Your shift starts now.
As long as I am here, you will always have a place to sit.
Just on beer please, your facial gesture suggest you did not get my meaning.
No, really, bend over, the prostate gland must be palpitated in order to determine its size, of course the insertion of my finger will give you a rise, but forget it, nothing new, I wash your underwear.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Excellent metaphor. [I believe that you already know what I am writing, but I just did not want to sound Pedantic.]
One, who is not astute, as to the gestures that are used in a conversation, is crippled because visual aides say a lot, and can suggest going forward--or Not,
Some sign language "signs," are universal, but many cultures have signs that show appreciation, or deprecation, or warning, or insult.
So, finger pointers beware, do it in some cultures it could cost you your hair.
I want to learn sign language, I know it is important to share, some people learn it, some do not care.
When trying to learn what to say [speaking] it is often difficult to use the correct word, but gestures are not just for the Nerd.
So I started looking to sign, and I found a menu that is vast, what should be learned first, or last?
Incidental gestures; expressive gestures, symbolic gestures, technical gestures, coded gestures, gesture variants, multi-message variants, gesture alternatives, hybrid gestures, compound gestures, relic gestures . . .
Before I started I bowed my head in respect for those that sign, and those that teach it.
I love your message(s):
Up your [--] with broken glass.
You can leave now, your ride is ready.
I am not a proctologist but I will take a look.
You have now been elevated to a top position, so now is your time to take over.
Just one more message for your anal-sanctum.
Your shift starts now.
As long as I am here, you will always have a place to sit.
Just on beer please, your facial gesture suggest you did not get my meaning.
No, really, bend over, the prostate gland must be palpitated in order to determine its size, of course the insertion of my finger will give you a rise, but forget it, nothing new, I wash your underwear.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thank you for such a descriptive and comical review. I appreciate you taking the time and effort to write such a humorous and informative comments. I enjoyed reading it. Have a great day my friend. Bill
Comment from Eternal Muse
That was hysterically funny. Congrats on your win. Great artistic presentation; and my eyes really loved that bold font! (lol). Hilarious entry, and the picture speaks a thousand words.
Love and hugs, Y.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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That was hysterically funny. Congrats on your win. Great artistic presentation; and my eyes really loved that bold font! (lol). Hilarious entry, and the picture speaks a thousand words.
Love and hugs, Y.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thank you Y, I appreciate your wonderful comments. I'm glad it made you laugh my friend. Take care and have a great day. Bill
Comment from christopherjl
This is hilarious and wonderfully relatable. I'm so glad you won the contest... you were the clear winner from the beginning! Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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This is hilarious and wonderfully relatable. I'm so glad you won the contest... you were the clear winner from the beginning! Well done!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thank you Christopher for your really nice comments, I appreciate it very much. I'm glad that you enjoyed it my friend. Have a great day. Bill
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hah...this is priceless, Cedar! Hey, just get yourself one of those Golden Lager retrievers. You know, those dogs we all see on the beer commercials who open the fridge and fetch their owner a beer? You can even justify the expense on your taxes for a write-off. Just list the dog under "health preventative expenses", LOL...
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Hah...this is priceless, Cedar! Hey, just get yourself one of those Golden Lager retrievers. You know, those dogs we all see on the beer commercials who open the fridge and fetch their owner a beer? You can even justify the expense on your taxes for a write-off. Just list the dog under "health preventative expenses", LOL...
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thanks Dean for your outstanding review, I appreciate it. You've made some pretty good suggestions and I might have to look into a few of them. Have a good day my friend. Bill