Comment from Jesse James Doty

Excellent

Wow, this really is the greatest gift of Christmas day! The artwork is so realistic that it took my breath away! This is an excellent poem and I found only one thing I might suggest you change. You start many verses in this rather longish poem with And, and then you go on to say some of the most beautiful words I have ever read. Well, rather than And I might suggest using another word that best describes how you felt on a wintry day.
Enough of that I want to say that I really love how the three of you children when into that nursing home and went up to that old lady and spent Christmas day! Even more than that you were able to draw up some memories from her and made her Christmas day special! I am glad I read this poem this early morning it has set my soul free!
Take good care of all your elders it will make your Christmas special!
Have a happy holiday season!
Jesse

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021

Thanks, Jesse. A true story about my three grandsons and my mother.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job with your excellent contest entry. Your lines read well with good rhymes and flow and great imagery. I could see everything your mentioned and feel the heartache of the elderly woman until . . . the three boys intervened. Yes, they brought the true spirit of Christmas to her and received the same themselves.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan

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 Comment Written 13-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021

Thanks, Jan. This is a true story.

Comment from Raven Tale

Exceptional

What a wonderful story poem. I was deeply moved by the lovingkindness, so essential and traditional a part of the Christmas spirit. Sharing time with those who are otherwise alone. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021

Thanks for your review. A true story about my mother and my three grandsons.

Comment from Cass Carlton

Exceptional

This is truly beautiful. As a nursing home resident I can vouch for some of my fellow residents who just sit and stare and say nothing day after day. Your words are so true and filled with meaning and---- ---- hope. Everyone here at Oakwood where I live will receive a really nice present on Christmas morning and those remaining in house will partake of a wonderful luncheon. No-one gets left out or forgotten. Your story poem tells of someone whose memory is re-awakened at the sight of the young boys in a truly sweet and unforgettable way. It brought tears to my eyes. Well said Well done cheers Cass

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021

Thank you, Cass. This story is about my mother. Merry Christmas to you and your friends at Oakwood.

Comment from l.raven

Exceptional

Hi Paul, OMG my sweet friend...this poem
speaks of what Christmas gifts should be about...
giving from the heart...what an amazing story told...
I would love to think your story be true...it truly
touched my heart...

reading this I had tears in my eyes thinking about
my mom passed...

I love your beautiful poem sweet guy...and the picture perrrfect...very nicely written...love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021

Thanks, Linda. That was me, my three grandsons, and my mother, who passed away in that nursing home some years ago. Just a few things added for dramatic effect.

reply by l.raven on 13-Dec-2021

amazing story told...my mom passed in March...
I wish I could have given it more stars...
and your so welcome...love xxoo

Comment from Eunice Amero

Excellent

Wow what a poem. I love it. You did such goodo job. If you don't win there really will be something wrong. Keep up the good work. I could feel this poem. It was lovely. Thanks

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 Comment Written 13-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021

Thanks, Eunice. This was mostly a true story about my mother.

reply by Eunice Amero on 14-Dec-2021

Well it was wonderful. She must have been lovely.