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Domino 2
Very interesting and philosophical quote in your notes, Deano.
LOVE the eerie (pretending to be cute) music and masterful artistic presentation.
2nd stanza typo ('monters'), and maybe also consider an alternative rather than repeating 'monsters' from 1st line.
8th line reverse syntax to create the rhyme could perhaps be re-written.
Sorry I'm in such a picky mood this morning - I must have had some bad dreams. ;-)
Really enjoyed the read, my friend.
Cheers, Ray
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Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
No worries, Ray. I'm happy to hear from you, just the same. Hope you get in a better mood later on, LOL.
Thanks again!
~DeanO
reply by Domino 2 on 23-Nov-2014
No probs, Deano. 'Demons' works great in place of 'monsters'. Cheers, Ray
reply by Domino 2 on 23-Nov-2014
I meant in place of SECOND, 'monsters', as I suggested.