A Little Viking's Tale
A rhyming short story for children122 total reviews
Comment from DMCranfield
Very clever! And with a moral to boot.
Your poems never cease to entertain and amuse. Thank you so much for sharing; I could never write such a lengthy almost "epic" poem... especially one dedicated to children.
You definitely have a knack.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Very clever! And with a moral to boot.
Your poems never cease to entertain and amuse. Thank you so much for sharing; I could never write such a lengthy almost "epic" poem... especially one dedicated to children.
You definitely have a knack.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thanks for compliments .. you make-a me blush
Comment from fdgsr
Five for the theme and effort. This is too long for its message and the message too big for the words. The rhythm is rough in your attempt to keep the syllables in sync. It seems forced in places. I do like the imagery and the theme for your intent. Thanks for the effort.
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Five for the theme and effort. This is too long for its message and the message too big for the words. The rhythm is rough in your attempt to keep the syllables in sync. It seems forced in places. I do like the imagery and the theme for your intent. Thanks for the effort.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thanks a bunch
Comment from GWHARGIS
A Viking and a talking stop sign, now you don't see that every day. I liked the clever nature of this piece. The moral was told in a fun way and kept this fifty one year old kid's attention. And the name of the Viking is a personal favorite of mine. My oldest son's name is Eric. Nice job.
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A Viking and a talking stop sign, now you don't see that every day. I liked the clever nature of this piece. The moral was told in a fun way and kept this fifty one year old kid's attention. And the name of the Viking is a personal favorite of mine. My oldest son's name is Eric. Nice job.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thanks GW
Comment from ruby.sahay
"Life gave him gifts that were seemingly free" Quite loved this rhetoric !
You have made good use of alliteration, consonance and onomatopoeia that brings out the poetic effect in this story.
Good creativity!
Ruby
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"Life gave him gifts that were seemingly free" Quite loved this rhetoric !
You have made good use of alliteration, consonance and onomatopoeia that brings out the poetic effect in this story.
Good creativity!
Ruby
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thanks Ruby
Comment from October21
Well done. This poem is well written and has great flow. I thought your use of humou was great. This is a fun and enjoyable poem to read. Thanks for sharing.
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Well done. This poem is well written and has great flow. I thought your use of humou was great. This is a fun and enjoyable poem to read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thanks much OCT
Comment from Mike K2
Well, there's the red light cameras. I enjoyed reading the story that the poem contains as it is well written and interesting. I also enjoyed the humor.
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Well, there's the red light cameras. I enjoyed reading the story that the poem contains as it is well written and interesting. I also enjoyed the humor.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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thanks much
Comment from Thomas Raine
I think this would be fine for children to follow along, and that you did a good job of keeping it interesting. Nothing like taking a warrior culture like the Vikings and making it kid-friendly! :)
- TR
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I think this would be fine for children to follow along, and that you did a good job of keeping it interesting. Nothing like taking a warrior culture like the Vikings and making it kid-friendly! :)
- TR
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thanks much
Comment from gfairclough
Fun to read and great for children! A very cute story with good imagery and simple enough for the audience you have chosen to write for. Great job!
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Fun to read and great for children! A very cute story with good imagery and simple enough for the audience you have chosen to write for. Great job!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thanks much
Comment from T.C. Cunning
NICE read.
Great use of alliteration and personification.
I saw you used an a-b-a-c format
For the piece to be so long more could have happened. Consider keeping a child's attention.
Over all I definitely see where this could not only a great but highly effective children's series.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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NICE read.
Great use of alliteration and personification.
I saw you used an a-b-a-c format
For the piece to be so long more could have happened. Consider keeping a child's attention.
Over all I definitely see where this could not only a great but highly effective children's series.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
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Thank you your suggestions mean so much to me..thank you so much
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NO problem I am curious to know where Eric the Viking is going next. Does his suit change with every adventure?
Comment from Titanx9
This is an excellent rhyming poem that should be a hit with children under ten or maybe older if they are a kids at heart like me. Excellent artwork that goes well with the tone and theme of the poem!
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This is an excellent rhyming poem that should be a hit with children under ten or maybe older if they are a kids at heart like me. Excellent artwork that goes well with the tone and theme of the poem!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
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Thanks Titax