Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Chapter 4, part three"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from LadyWave
I love all of Joe's little romantic gestures. Oh to find a man like that! I will continue to keep you in my prayers. Godspeed and stay strong!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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I love all of Joe's little romantic gestures. Oh to find a man like that! I will continue to keep you in my prayers. Godspeed and stay strong!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I am looking for a Joe, too. Think my husband would mind?
Comment from jmdg1954
Again, another chapter that slowly brings the relationship along, as it should in just a the weeks time. The dialogue this time seemed a little, I don't know if this is the right word, but fake, forced??? All in all, a very good chapter.
Now for the important stuff... I just read your notes, my wife on December 10, 2001 had undergone surgury for the removal of lymph node under her right arm and a small incision and removal on her right breast. EVERY, EVERY, EVERY follow-up visit since then has been no issue. With her Breast Surgion and Oncologist (who she puts 1000% confidence in) she has had perfect follow-up visits! I pray you have the same!!! Keep the faith, be positive and may God bless... John
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Again, another chapter that slowly brings the relationship along, as it should in just a the weeks time. The dialogue this time seemed a little, I don't know if this is the right word, but fake, forced??? All in all, a very good chapter.
Now for the important stuff... I just read your notes, my wife on December 10, 2001 had undergone surgury for the removal of lymph node under her right arm and a small incision and removal on her right breast. EVERY, EVERY, EVERY follow-up visit since then has been no issue. With her Breast Surgion and Oncologist (who she puts 1000% confidence in) she has had perfect follow-up visits! I pray you have the same!!! Keep the faith, be positive and may God bless... John
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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I am extremely happy for your wife. I am praying to finally get rid of this. I appreciate your kind review and I will recheck my dialogue.
Comment from menachem
Wow, double drama! (In the story, and in the notes.) I hope you get what you want, schoolwise, and i hope Joe and Sara do as well.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Wow, double drama! (In the story, and in the notes.) I hope you get what you want, schoolwise, and i hope Joe and Sara do as well.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your well wishes and for the review. I appreciate your support.
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You're welcome.
I'm taking some time off from the site, so, all the best.
Feel better!
(Standard still lets you write reviews, right? So, I guess I'll still stop by, a bit:0)
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I will miss you.
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Thank you.
I'll be around a bit, so....
Comment from bowls
First of all, I wish you well. I'll be thinking of you on Tuesday and hoping for the best.
I do so look forward to each of your posts to see how Joe and Sara are coming along. Once again, I was not disappointed as you continued to develop their relationship at a measured pace. There's just one little typo. I think you left out a word in "don't do something attack us" Perhaps a to? Thanks for another great chapter!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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First of all, I wish you well. I'll be thinking of you on Tuesday and hoping for the best.
I do so look forward to each of your posts to see how Joe and Sara are coming along. Once again, I was not disappointed as you continued to develop their relationship at a measured pace. There's just one little typo. I think you left out a word in "don't do something attack us" Perhaps a to? Thanks for another great chapter!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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I must have been fixing that when you were reviewing it. Yes, I left out to, such a little word, but every important. Thank you for your kind thoughts and for your review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Aletheia
This is a wonderful story. I wonder how long Sara is going to have to wait? I think I had read a previous chapter, but even if I hadn't, your writing is very fluid and the story is easy to follow. I really enjoyed it.
B :)
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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This is a wonderful story. I wonder how long Sara is going to have to wait? I think I had read a previous chapter, but even if I hadn't, your writing is very fluid and the story is easy to follow. I really enjoyed it.
B :)
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Another great job, Barbara.
Only spotted a couple of things.
making sure the cartels don't do something [to] attack us through them.
Your life is so much more exicting[exciting] than mine.
Joe felt his breathing become rapid and his heart beating harder. -- This doesn't sound consistent. I can't think how to change it, but take a look at it.
Our prayers are with you. Be strong.
Roberta
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Another great job, Barbara.
Only spotted a couple of things.
making sure the cartels don't do something [to] attack us through them.
Your life is so much more exicting[exciting] than mine.
Joe felt his breathing become rapid and his heart beating harder. -- This doesn't sound consistent. I can't think how to change it, but take a look at it.
Our prayers are with you. Be strong.
Roberta
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you Roberta, for your kind review. I have made those corrections and will recheck that sentence.
Comment from JeffreyStone
Your story is told with excellent dialogue and narrative, making your characters real and believeable. I really enjoed the read. After reading your author notes, Please check my current post. I am not trying to promote it with you, but it may give you comfort. JeffreyStone
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Your story is told with excellent dialogue and narrative, making your characters real and believeable. I really enjoed the read. After reading your author notes, Please check my current post. I am not trying to promote it with you, but it may give you comfort. JeffreyStone
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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I already read it and wrote a review. I struggled with the review and gave you a 6. Than you for your kind review.
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My apologies, Barbra. I simply didn't see the name clearly enough to realize you had read the story and reviewed it. Tanks so much.
Comment from c_lucas
I think Sara can put Joe in the interested column. You are doing a good job building their relationship. This is very well written. I am enjoying the read.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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I think Sara can put Joe in the interested column. You are doing a good job building their relationship. This is very well written. I am enjoying the read.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support. I appreciate both.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from Rama Rao
An excellent chapter as usual. Joe's character is very interesting. However, he is going to be a one star general soon. Officers of that rank generally do more planning and paperwork and less field work, I thought. Secondly, I found the word scooted twice in the text. What exactly does it mean? Is it American slang apart from what is given in Webster?
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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An excellent chapter as usual. Joe's character is very interesting. However, he is going to be a one star general soon. Officers of that rank generally do more planning and paperwork and less field work, I thought. Secondly, I found the word scooted twice in the text. What exactly does it mean? Is it American slang apart from what is given in Webster?
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Another way to move closer--scooted. Joe is in a special task force. It's small group of men. The treat each other as equals and rank is only a pay grade, in this task force. Not in the military. Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Belinda
You must have a whole lot of knowledge about the everyday tasks of Task Force. I like the way things are related in a conversation between two trusting lovers. I might try it myself. Interesting chapter, Barbara. (Sorry about your health condition, I hope you will soon recover.)
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You must have a whole lot of knowledge about the everyday tasks of Task Force. I like the way things are related in a conversation between two trusting lovers. I might try it myself. Interesting chapter, Barbara. (Sorry about your health condition, I hope you will soon recover.)
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I was a military spouse for 23 years. I have thrown may different unit functions into my task force The task force isn't real.