Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Chapter 1 Part Two"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from jclark
Another good chapter. I like how you are providing us with lots of background on everybody and you do a good job with character interaction. You also keep the story moving along. I am intrigued about the "mystery" dad so I have a feeling that will take an interesting turn. Well done. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Judy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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Another good chapter. I like how you are providing us with lots of background on everybody and you do a good job with character interaction. You also keep the story moving along. I am intrigued about the "mystery" dad so I have a feeling that will take an interesting turn. Well done. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Judy
Comment Written 27-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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I can promise a few interesting twists in this manuscript. I hope you like it. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from anabelle
Barbara, you are fabulous at these love stories. You just about had me crying too. AHhh! True love. Do I remember what it feels like? I'm not sure, but it sounds good. :-)
Take care. Loved this.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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Barbara, you are fabulous at these love stories. You just about had me crying too. AHhh! True love. Do I remember what it feels like? I'm not sure, but it sounds good. :-)
Take care. Loved this.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 27-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate it.
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You're very welcome, Barbara.
Comment from afternoonlight
This hold interest for me at many levels. My first best friends were two sisters, the Wilkeys in San Pedro. My father was military and we moved and lived all over the US, the story is interesting and well written with great detail and good discription, and there is an unknown secret to keep it intriguing and small towns are always fun and mischieveous, and I want to read more.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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This hold interest for me at many levels. My first best friends were two sisters, the Wilkeys in San Pedro. My father was military and we moved and lived all over the US, the story is interesting and well written with great detail and good discription, and there is an unknown secret to keep it intriguing and small towns are always fun and mischieveous, and I want to read more.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I see you understand small towns.
Comment from It is me 59
Doing a great job so far. There's a little bit of everything in this story so far that makes you want to get to the end in a minute. Good old fashioned romance too!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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Doing a great job so far. There's a little bit of everything in this story so far that makes you want to get to the end in a minute. Good old fashioned romance too!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from animatqua
I liked this. The characters and their motives/motivations were well defined and did much to propel the story line.
Good job!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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I liked this. The characters and their motives/motivations were well defined and did much to propel the story line.
Good job!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate it.
Comment from c_lucas
When a male has sex with more than one woman, he's a stud. When a woman acts promiscuity she's a slut. It's about time things change. This is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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When a male has sex with more than one woman, he's a stud. When a woman acts promiscuity she's a slut. It's about time things change. This is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and assessment of the problem. As the story develops things will start to change for both Joe and Sara.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
closed his parent's front door - parents' - plural possessive
You portray small town life so well - how horrid that this woman has been the "town slut" all these years for a teen pregnancy that took place a lifetime ago. That his kindness would bring her to tears so effectively demonstrates how much she needs a little warmth and compassion in her life. Excellent dialogue, from the playful teasing of the teen daughter to the serious conversation at chapter's close. Brooke :-)
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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closed his parent's front door - parents' - plural possessive
You portray small town life so well - how horrid that this woman has been the "town slut" all these years for a teen pregnancy that took place a lifetime ago. That his kindness would bring her to tears so effectively demonstrates how much she needs a little warmth and compassion in her life. Excellent dialogue, from the playful teasing of the teen daughter to the serious conversation at chapter's close. Brooke :-)
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and catching that mistake. I can't believe I made that stupid mistake. My first graders would tease me.
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well, I won't tell your pupils about it if you don't. LOL