Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Pantygynt
I liked the poem overall as it caught that end of term mood well. I think if the form mentions written in quatrains it would be advisable to write in quatrains rather than in a single block. Yes, I know the quatrains are there, but a line space between them would have pointed this up.
'It is bopeep the girls do play.' >> that 'do' does nothing to enhance the meaning as perhaps 'all' might have done. It is only there to force the rhythm.
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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I liked the poem overall as it caught that end of term mood well. I think if the form mentions written in quatrains it would be advisable to write in quatrains rather than in a single block. Yes, I know the quatrains are there, but a line space between them would have pointed this up.
'It is bopeep the girls do play.' >> that 'do' does nothing to enhance the meaning as perhaps 'all' might have done. It is only there to force the rhythm.
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Hi Jim, as always, great points! I am looking forward to Saturday. I have attempted to locate the booksellers of Wit and Wisdom of Ancient Latvian Poetry Vol. I & Vol. 2 in the states, but not been successful - the poetic style seems quite daunting!
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I haven't found it either which is a pity but we can have fun trying to analyse what we have and see if we can emulate it.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a well written poem and I liked the way the picture gelled with the poem. I also liked the repetitive nature of this poem. Thank you for sharing and have a great week.
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This is a well written poem and I liked the way the picture gelled with the poem. I also liked the repetitive nature of this poem. Thank you for sharing and have a great week.
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you!