Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

This is a fun start to your adventure, that sets the characters in place well. I was a little confused at the beginning as I thought the sea creatures were going to set out to destroy the childrens' fun, but soon realised they had other issues in mind.
It will appeal to young children, without a doubt.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021

Thank you so much, Katherine. Yes, there will be a lot happening when it comes to the children helping the poor whale with his tooth. I'm so peased you think it will appeal to children. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

It seems like a very cute poetic story that young children would enjoy.

notes:

I think you may want to switch the order of the second and third stanzas.

She called the shark[,]
the dolphin, too,

- add

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 Comment Written 22-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021

Thank you so much, Lancellot, for this lovely review. I'll check your suggestion out and see how that works. Thanks for that, and for picking up on the missing comma. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

You are great with children's stories as well as novels. I wonder where you get all these delightful pictures. I would have loved finding rhymed books to read to my children when they were small.

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 Comment Written 22-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021

Thank you for reading the first chapter in my new children's book, Beth. I get the pictures from Pixabay. They are free to use in whatever way you want, even commercially, which these will be. I also go into the 'Public Domain' site, they have a variety of pictures, photos, free to use. You'll have to check them out. Thanks again, my friend. Have a lovely week. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Pantygynt

Exceptional

This is a lovely story for little kids. I was gripped by it immediately (which proves I must have entered my second childhood. What I know about whales could probably be written on a mackerel's fin, never mind about sharks, so I asked the sub-marine version of google and he came up with this child's guide. I thought it might come in useful. Find it at:

2seewhales.com/blog/do-all-whales-have-teeth/

If you want a chat I am available on my patio now the sun has decided to shine again. Here's a six to get this one off to a good start.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021

Hi, Jim, thank you so much for the six stars to start me off! That was so nice of you. I took a look at that site, who'd have guessed some have no teeth! Mine has! Lol. It's hard to find a cartoon of a sad whale I can use for commercial use and for free. The one I have will have to stay. I didn't even know there were that ammount of different whales, a dolphin is considered a whale, too. It might be an idea if I add a few facts at the end of the book because it's so educational. Even the parents might learn a thing or two. I just have!! Thanks so much for this, my friend. I've just tried to get a hold of you, but you must be walking your dog. Chat later. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx