Comment from rjuselius

Exceptional

This is a brilliant piece of horror/thriller poetry dear dean! I love the concepts myopic musings and arcane chants. The whole poem is full of great metaphors.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015

Thanks so much, Rebekka, that is so kind of you to say. As always I appreciate your generosity in rating this, but more than that, I am very pleased that you enjoyed reading it. You also obviously grasped the "irony" I intended in the comparisons of a warm, plush bed to a coffin, which I am also very grateful for.
Thanks so much again for your fabulous review.
With respect & admiration

~Dean :}

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

A dark and chilling poem I really, really, really should not be reading at night before bedtime. I could not help myself. It is haunting, seductive. Its rhymes and rhythm sing. Simple but well crafted four stanzas. "Dark Poetry" is going to be a fun, dark book.

The biggest news I have to tell you is that I am reading Bram Stoker's "Dracula" for the first time. I have never encountered horror like this before. It is such a seminal work and makes me appreciate your craft more. Thank you for sharing and for scaring.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015

A-h-h-h-h-h, I read Bram Stoker's novel for a book report my sophomore year in high school for the first time, Andre. It is, in my humble opinion, the penultimate vampire novel. For more modernistic times, Stephen Kings Salem's Lot is a very close second. If you've never read it, you should.

Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem, and the book in general.

I hope you're right...about the book being fun, I mean.

Always with respect

~Dean

Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Fantastic struff, my friend....as usual. Are you aware of the great alliteration you are using....like here: "Myopic musings--full of angst.
Oh, joyous fools, beware your flanks.
Watch those creeping from the rear
Tread carefully for sharks are near." (Myopic musings)

Great addition to your portfolio, DeanO Bravo! Bob

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015

Thank you for reading this first installment of what I hope to be an exemplary collection of dark poetry from Fanstory members one and all, Bob.
As always, your positive feedback, your time, and your readership are extremely important to me.

Thanks so much again, and one day, you should consider submitting a dark verse of your own, if you've a mind to.

Always with respect

~Dean

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Would you write a horror about flight
I am waiting to board a plane home..yikes
I like this imagery
I would like a tufted bed to lay my head...
God bless

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015

Thanks for taking a peek at it, Jenny.
I appreciate your comments, very much.

~Dean

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Dean, you've set the bar pretty high with this atmospheric, even melancholic poem. As always, your imagery is unmatched and your meter/rhyme spot on. Excellent work, Dean.

:) Bev

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015

Thanks for taking at gander at the book, and my poem, Bev.
It's appreciated.
~Dean

reply by Writingfundimension on 26-Oct-2015

You're very welcome, Dean. :) Bev

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015

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Comment from a.w.brooks

Exceptional

a very good poem I am glad you wrote it, hit the nail on the head, if you have something to say you need to say it right there because when we are gone then we wont be able to say a thing. Thanks for the read and happy writing

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015

Thank you for reading this first installment of what I hope to be an exemplary collection of dark poetry from Fanstory members one and all, a.w. ...
As always, your positive feedback, your time, and your readership are extremely important to me. It's nice to see you back posting and reviewing again.

Thanks so much again, and one day, consider submitting a dark verse of your own if you've a mind to.

Always with respect

~Dean

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Well Dean these sound like nice cheery thoughts to take with one for all eternity into the quilted coffin and cold, dark grave.

Excellent presentation with strong nouns and imagery.

Best wishes to you on your new endeavour, A book of Horror and Thriller poetry. Tis the month to be gathering that. Especially in the form of a lullaby. I've always found something sinister about lullabies.

Super job!

Gloria

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015

So have I, Gloria... found lullabies to be creepy, I mean. I agree.

No one sang lullabies to me as a child, thank Heavens. At least not that I can remember. I was usually read to by Mom or Grandma, poetry mostly, but sometimes nursery rhymes.

Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

~Dean

Comment from Poetofheart2013

Excellent

A very spooky and scary Halloween poem It full of really good Imaging.
It gave me a fright just reading it you really have a good writing sense.
I really enjoy reading it. Keep up the good Job

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, Poetofheart
I very much appreciate it.

~Dean

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Dean

_ Another great book!
_ I guess 'Cuddles' here, who's sitting on this fella gives a whole new slant to 'heavy as an elephant on my chest'. Just sayin'.... (*<*)
_ Hmmm, I may try my hand at this one 'dark side' one of these days.
_ Always good 'stuff' coming from your little head, through your fingers, and onto the keyboard. Nice.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, Jacqueline.
I very much appreciate it.

~Dean

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

I'm confused. First you say:Thoughts should not be kept in cages. But at the end, you keep yours behind bars:thoughts of pain and sorrow/slumber deep inside my head. So I guess the two stanzas in between are warning the reader your writings can frighten and scare and that's okay too?
I lived inside one part of your mind for the fifteen minutes it took to hopefully figure out what you were saying. :-)


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 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015

He (or she) has spilled their thoughts upon the page, Shari, and said all they've wanted to say. Now that those thoughts have been recorded, my poor poet is ready and preparing to die. The two stanza in the middle are basically saying, "Screw the naysayers and the critics. Express your self the way you feel is right and best for you."

Thanks so much for commenting.

~Dean