Comment from zanya

Excellent

This is truly magical and wonderful - we need lots of this magic in our world- flowing smooth rhythm - it is simply fun to read and enjoy

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thank you, Zanya

Steve

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

This is a perfect lullaby to send kids off to sleep with fascinating dreams, Steve.

The mono rhyme works, as do the repeat sections in each verse to remind the kids.

Top alliteration throughout for extra fun.

Maybe youngsters wouldn't understand 'cavort' or 'glades', but I believe in throwing the odd difficult word into kids' poetry to help them learn by asking questions.

Excellent!

Best wishes, Ted

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, Ted.

Yes, I don't believe in 'talking down' to kids - the general meaning will be clear and this is exactly how they learn.

Steve

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Steve, This is sooooooooo sweet...I read it twice and used my granddaughters name...It works great...I 'll read it to her when she gets home from school today...One and only granddaughter..I bet she is spoiled...They take our hearts away...I have 4 now...Love them all so much...A wonderful childs poem and a beautiful picture...what an angel...Luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Linda, thanks so much for the lovely review. Hope it goes down well with your grand-daughter.

Steve

reply by l.raven on 25-Jan-2014

You are so welcome...and thank you...xxoo

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

A really good children's poem with exciting imagery, perfect meter when read out loud and the rhyme was fun too. I know children would enjoy this as a bedtime story. Good Job Steve. :-) Nancy

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, Nancy.

Steve

Comment from Marillion

Excellent

No, no spoiling there! :)

Really a nice poem, Steve, with a nice rhythm to it, satisfying rhymes, and a great use of repetition. How lucky she is to have someone able to write just for her.

I enjoyed this!

David

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, David - now get back to your clucking hens.

Steve

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

Steve,

This is an adorable children's poem/lullaby. You did a great job with it.

Imaginative, upbeat and fun! What child wouldn't delight in hearing this. I did! Pixies, fairies, goblins, elves and the sandman all cavorting and having a good time. What could be better than that?! Fave line ... "no doubt they'll be making more noise than they should" ... haha!:)

I think that children would especially delight in having their name read in the final stanza. Wish I had a sixer left for you. Great job!

Connie :)

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Connie, thanks for the wonderful review and the virtual sixer - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Gladness

Exceptional

Very well done from beginning to end. A joy to read. I could imagine those pixies frolicking in the sea. Good imaging with all the wee folk. Know where we can get some of that sandman dust? I've got four grandchildren, ha ha.
Anita

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, Anita

Nope, don't know where he digs that stuff up from. When our kids were small we used to put them in the car and take them for a looooong ride!

Steve

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

What a great poem for any little girl to dream with. Love the picture! LOL! My daughter had something similar. Boys are fun for dads and grandpas, but there's nothing like your own personal lap fairy to melt a guy's heart. :)

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, Phyllis - yes, she is a real sweetie, and I am not at all biased when I say that!

Steve

Comment from mumsyone

Exceptional

A beautiful poem for children, with perfect rhyme and meter and a perfect "lilt"; the kind of poem children love to read, memorize, and repeat. I enjoyed reading it, too!

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, Mumsy

Yes, the rhythm is even more important than usual in poems for children, don't you think?

Steve

reply by mumsyone on 25-Jan-2014

Rhyme is very important in children's poems. Even if the poem/story is nonsense, they love the rhyme and will usually end up loving and repeating it.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Oh, this is absolutely precious! You are SO talented! I ADORE this children's poem, Steve. A marvelous cadence, wonderful repeat lines and rhyme, great imagery - and I have no sixes left!

EXCEPTIONAL!!!************

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Dawn, thanks a lot for the rave review and the virtual six.

Steve

reply by Dawn Munro on 25-Jan-2014

You are welcome.